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All Dreams End

February 15, 2011
By drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
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Your love was a whisper
Trailing wisps of dreams through my soul
My heartbeat, all aflutter,
Kept me warm in winter's cold
Though I did not understand
Why you chose me, above all
Your answer was always, "Why not?"
In a drawl

Your lullaby of desires
Sang me to sleep each night
I wish you were still
A part of my life
"Goodnight, my darling."
You would say with care
I cannot believe
Why you're not still there

Lightning bugs fly
Golden and silver
Storming the skies
Clouds darken in shivers
The sunlight overhead
Runs out of time
Though this happens
Only in my mind

I see just darkness
A terrible sensation
I feel no happiness
No more elation
And all because
You left me then
This nightmare is the now
That dream was the end



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on Mar. 30 2011 at 5:26 am
adriannalovesanime GOLD, Reidsville, North Carolina
17 articles 5 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's better to be hurt by the truth than to gain satisfaction from the lies.-David Allan

Welcome:3.Anime rocks!Yes I have work<3.

on Mar. 24 2011 at 9:48 am
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
13 articles 0 photos 76 comments
Thank you, Claire! I'd love to :)

on Mar. 24 2011 at 9:42 am
Monkee63 SILVER, Independence, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"I want to feel my life while I'm in it"- Meryl Streep
"Live, Life Love"
"Everybody wants happiness, nobody wants pain, but you can't have a rainbow without a little rain."

I really like this...the way it flows, the word choice...I just overall really like it Great Job. Keep writing :)

on Mar. 24 2011 at 9:23 am
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
13 articles 0 photos 76 comments

Thanks so much :)

I don't really know. I've only been a member for the past couple of months. For my work, it's taken anywhere from 5 to 20 days or so. I'm not sure if they'll notify you upon declining, as none of mine has been declined so far, but I assume that they would let you know.

Thanks again for reading, and I'd love for you to comment on some of my other work if you have the time :)


on Mar. 23 2011 at 9:09 pm
lessthanthree.14 SILVER, Pflugerville, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grief, it seemed, drove Voldemort away - although Dumbledore would have said it was love. -Deathly Hallows

I like this poem. I love your choice of word, it shows a sort of blossoming talent and really act as a window to show us your feelings. 

And, could you please do me a favor and tell me how long it takes before the editors accept/decline work? And if they DO decline it, will they notify me?

Thanks ;D an again, i think this is a phenomenal work of art. Keep up the great work!


on Mar. 23 2011 at 8:31 pm
midnitewanderer GOLD, West Des Moines, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
Don't let what you can't do stop you from doing what you can do.
John Wooden
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
Eleanor Roosevelt

I love this poem:)

"Though I did not understand why you chose me, above all Your answer was always, why not? In a drawl" <3

Your word choice/phrases is also very good----storming the skies, lullaby of desires, clouds darken in shivers.

The lightning bugs fly stanza is also pretty sweet! This is a very good poem.

If you've got some extra time on your hand please rate and comment my writing! Thanks!

Claire=)


on Mar. 23 2011 at 1:16 pm
HisPurePrincess ELITE, Flemington, New Jersey
132 articles 33 photos 482 comments

Favorite Quote:
What things there are to write, if only one could write them! My mind is full of gleaming thought; gay moods and mysterious, moth-like meditations hover in my imagination, fanning their painted wings. But always the rarest, those streaked with azure and the deepest crimson, flutter away beyond my reach. ~Logan Pearsall Smith

Comment and rate my stuff please!  I really liked this btw, and I like all the WORDS.

on Mar. 23 2011 at 10:28 am
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
13 articles 0 photos 76 comments

Sounds good! I will do that when I can :) Carolina girls have to stick together!

My friend, whose username is DRMstarlet85, is relatively new to Teen Ink. She's talented; you should check her out :)


on Mar. 23 2011 at 10:26 am
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
13 articles 0 photos 76 comments
:) x 3!! Wait, what is?

on Mar. 23 2011 at 8:53 am
TeenageParadise_114, Cary, North Carolina
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your welcome (: read YankeeSwagg"s poetry... she really needs some comments

on Mar. 23 2011 at 8:52 am
TeenageParadise_114, Cary, North Carolina
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me three (: omg this is gonna be awesome...

on Mar. 22 2011 at 8:08 pm
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
13 articles 0 photos 76 comments
Thanks, Adree :) I love anime, too! Have you posted any artwork on Teen Ink?

on Mar. 22 2011 at 8:07 pm
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
13 articles 0 photos 76 comments
I'm from NC, too :)

on Mar. 22 2011 at 8:04 pm
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
13 articles 0 photos 76 comments
I just wanted to thank everyone for their comments as it means so much to me :) I would love it if you checked out some of my other work as well. Also, if there's anything of yours you would like to be read, I'd love to!

I<3violin said...
on Mar. 22 2011 at 4:29 pm
Great poem! I like the picture a lot too :D Keep writing!

on Mar. 22 2011 at 1:15 pm
MissAnthrope BRONZE, Bristol, Other
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn't a game, there's no undo button.

this is an amazing piece of work! i feel the emotion coming off at me, i love it :)

on Mar. 22 2011 at 11:51 am
YankeeSwagg PLATINUM, Holly Springs, North Carolina
26 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Every burden is a blessing

I LOVEEEEE this poem (: keep writing please (:

on Mar. 22 2011 at 7:32 am
emoducks BRONZE, Schuylkill Haven, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Life will only be amazing if you make it that way."
-Me (:

OMG! i loved this! this was an amazing piece :) 

on Mar. 21 2011 at 8:28 pm
CJbutterfly SILVER, Chattahoochee, Florida
7 articles 1 photo 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Never let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game\"

Omg that was beautiful! I love it

on Mar. 21 2011 at 6:13 pm
adriannalovesanime GOLD, Reidsville, North Carolina
17 articles 5 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's better to be hurt by the truth than to gain satisfaction from the lies.-David Allan

I really liked, good job(: