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Nobody Knew

December 17, 2010
By archon GOLD, Mandeville, Louisiana
archon GOLD, Mandeville, Louisiana
10 articles 0 photos 39 comments

The clouds separated to form a hole in the sky
Light descended upon the earth
Trees grew
Grass grew
Life flourished.

Nobody knew.

The clouds sealed up
Darkness descended upon the earth
Trees died
Grass died
Life withered.

Nobody knew.

Storms came!
Lighting crashed and thunder rolled!
Oh, how terrible a night it was!
Thunder, the heartbeat of anger, beating down upon the canvas
I wished no harm done
I tried to contain the thunder
But my arms only reach so wide,
Only so wide.

The storms calmed, but the shadow-black clouds remained,
I begged, pleaded, fought, and tried to make deals with them
But they remained
However could I remove this awesome plague?
What ever could I do to be freed from this monster?

The days grew darker and the nights grew more comfortable
I sought not to remove the clouds
I sought union with the thunder
Only to my ignorant downfall.

Out of options and time I grow desperate...


And remained.

I grow weary.


A voice from inside the hands that made the clouds spoke to me

It told me to let go.

Damn you clouds! How dare you!

Then, suddenly. I let go.

The sky slowly brightened

The clouds separated to form a hole formed in sky
Light descended upon the earth
Trees grew
Grass grew
Life flourished

But nobody knew.

Nobody knew.

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archon GOLD said...
on Aug. 9 2011 at 12:18 am
archon GOLD, Mandeville, Louisiana
10 articles 0 photos 39 comments


thanks so much for the comment!!! as to why he/I let go, it just happened, all of a sudden, as the poem says

on Aug. 7 2011 at 9:07 pm
BriarRose PLATINUM, Seneca, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
I don't need a rose. I want a daisy you picked for my hair. I don't want some fancy box of chocolate. I want a pink frosting cookie you made just for me. Lets skip the upscale restaraunt and have a picnic in the park.

This makes a lot of sense to me without really making any sense at all. It's hard to explain...and that probably sounded better in my head.  Either way, i think it's a genius piece.  I loved how you changed the formatt to fit the emotions, going from plain type to all caps.  I do have one question though.  Why did he let go?  I mean, he was hanging on for dear life and he was totally ahem pissed at the clouds and the storm for even suggesting that he let go. What happend to make him give in like that?

on Jul. 14 2011 at 3:43 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Boredom instigates extreme creativity.

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"

I'm afraid that I didn't find it very descriptive, but with a little more work, this could be good.

archon GOLD said...
on Apr. 19 2011 at 10:15 pm
archon GOLD, Mandeville, Louisiana
10 articles 0 photos 39 comments
brilliant!? why thank you :D I really appreciate it! and to be honest I'm not exactly sure, I just got this mental image one day and tried to form it into words

on Apr. 19 2011 at 12:05 pm
musicprincess PLATINUM, Braselton, Georgia
23 articles 0 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say that love is forever, your forever is all that I need

This is brilliant :) I really like the imagery and your wording is absolutely rich in meaning. What was your inspiration?