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October 14, 2010
By AsIAm PLATINUM, Somewhere, North Carolina
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AsIAm PLATINUM, Somewhere, North Carolina
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"According to some, heroic deaths are admirable things. (Generally those who don't have to do it. Politicians and writers spring to mind.) I've never been convinced by this argument, mainly because, no matter how cool, stylish, composed, unflappable, manly, or defiant you are, at the end of the day you're also dead. Which is a little too permanent for my liking." — Jonathan Stroud (Ptolemy's Gate)

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I can hear the drums tap-tap-tapping
I can feel the earth shake under marching feet
I can see the bright light of exploding gunpowder

The gray transports carry them to the battlefield
The barrage is relentless
The soldiers are everywhere

Drumming out a tattoo
Marching out to Waterloo
Flashes of light split the night in two

And the little rain soldiers fight on

© Matt D., St Peters, MI

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It's raining here lol
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Beachgirl1 PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 14 2011 at 9:42 am
Beachgirl1 PLATINUM, Bellevue, Washington
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&quot;If You Don&#039;t Fight Back, You&#039;ve Already Lost.&quot;<br /> &quot;Don&#039;t suppress Laughter, it goes to your thighs.&quot;

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You continue to amaze me! i really like this poem because of the beat. you can hear it in you head :) 
AsIAm PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 31 2011 at 9:21 am
AsIAm PLATINUM, Somewhere, North Carolina
48 articles 3 photos 606 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;According to some, heroic deaths are admirable things. (Generally those who don&#039;t have to do it. Politicians and writers spring to mind.) I&#039;ve never been convinced by this argument, mainly because, no matter how cool, stylish, composed, unflappable, manly, or defiant you are, at the end of the day you&#039;re also dead. Which is a little too permanent for my liking.&quot; &mdash; Jonathan Stroud (Ptolemy&#039;s Gate)

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Thanks :)       
PJD17 SILVER said...
on Mar. 31 2011 at 7:27 am
PJD17 SILVER, Belleville, Illinois
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I do the best imatation of myself- Ben Folds

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clever poem  keep it up
AsIAm PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 27 2010 at 11:45 pm
AsIAm PLATINUM, Somewhere, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;According to some, heroic deaths are admirable things. (Generally those who don&#039;t have to do it. Politicians and writers spring to mind.) I&#039;ve never been convinced by this argument, mainly because, no matter how cool, stylish, composed, unflappable, manly, or defiant you are, at the end of the day you&#039;re also dead. Which is a little too permanent for my liking.&quot; &mdash; Jonathan Stroud (Ptolemy&#039;s Gate)

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I was just really bored, so I'm surprised this is all you have to say about it and it's lack of.... poemness! lol Glad you liked the last line!
NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD said...
on Nov. 16 2010 at 7:18 pm
NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
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I don&#039;t believe in hell but I believe in my parent&#039;s couch-- Watsky

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I like the idea of this poem, but I just didn't get a very strong feeling from it.  And the rhyming in the third stanza seemed forced and unnatural.  The last line was cool, though.
AsIAm PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 13 2010 at 4:00 pm
AsIAm PLATINUM, Somewhere, North Carolina
48 articles 3 photos 606 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;According to some, heroic deaths are admirable things. (Generally those who don&#039;t have to do it. Politicians and writers spring to mind.) I&#039;ve never been convinced by this argument, mainly because, no matter how cool, stylish, composed, unflappable, manly, or defiant you are, at the end of the day you&#039;re also dead. Which is a little too permanent for my liking.&quot; &mdash; Jonathan Stroud (Ptolemy&#039;s Gate)

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haha It's thunder drums, exploding lightning, and the foreshadowing mention of WATERloo lol
WinterFairy PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 13 2010 at 9:50 am
WinterFairy PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
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huh?...ooooooh! i get it now :) haha lol
AsIAm PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 12 2010 at 8:56 pm
AsIAm PLATINUM, Somewhere, North Carolina
48 articles 3 photos 606 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;According to some, heroic deaths are admirable things. (Generally those who don&#039;t have to do it. Politicians and writers spring to mind.) I&#039;ve never been convinced by this argument, mainly because, no matter how cool, stylish, composed, unflappable, manly, or defiant you are, at the end of the day you&#039;re also dead. Which is a little too permanent for my liking.&quot; &mdash; Jonathan Stroud (Ptolemy&#039;s Gate)

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Haha thanks! :D
AshTree SILVER said...
on Nov. 12 2010 at 6:26 pm
AshTree SILVER, Clarksville, Tennessee
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&quot;Live your art&quot; -made this one up myself. Simple, but true.

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lol This make me laugh and I wouldn't have realized it was "rain soldiers" until the end. When I first started reading it the picture confused me then I was like ooooh. So creative!
AsIAm PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 10 2010 at 1:05 pm
AsIAm PLATINUM, Somewhere, North Carolina
48 articles 3 photos 606 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;According to some, heroic deaths are admirable things. (Generally those who don&#039;t have to do it. Politicians and writers spring to mind.) I&#039;ve never been convinced by this argument, mainly because, no matter how cool, stylish, composed, unflappable, manly, or defiant you are, at the end of the day you&#039;re also dead. Which is a little too permanent for my liking.&quot; &mdash; Jonathan Stroud (Ptolemy&#039;s Gate)

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Thanks! :D I don't know how I would continue this.... any ideas?
Phoenix97 PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 10 2010 at 12:55 pm
Phoenix97 PLATINUM, Minneapolis, Minnesota
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See lyrics to &quot;Let the Waters Rise&quot; by MIKESCHAIR and &quot;Everything&quot; by Lifehouse

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The ending made me laugh. XD I love how you built up the tension and then revealed the fact that these particular soldiers are raindrops. I also love how you used repetition in "tap-tap-tapping." Is there any way you could incorporate more of this?
AsIAm PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 9 2010 at 7:26 pm
AsIAm PLATINUM, Somewhere, North Carolina
48 articles 3 photos 606 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;According to some, heroic deaths are admirable things. (Generally those who don&#039;t have to do it. Politicians and writers spring to mind.) I&#039;ve never been convinced by this argument, mainly because, no matter how cool, stylish, composed, unflappable, manly, or defiant you are, at the end of the day you&#039;re also dead. Which is a little too permanent for my liking.&quot; &mdash; Jonathan Stroud (Ptolemy&#039;s Gate)

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Thanks!  I don't know if anything happens next, I just got inspired by a storm. :)
Healing_Angel SILVER said...
on Nov. 9 2010 at 6:53 pm
Healing_Angel SILVER, Sydney, Other
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I like the flow! You should continue it! The rhyming is good. It ends too abruptly though and I'm wondering what happens next.