slipping MAG

April 26, 2010
By lover-of-nothing GOLD, Dixon, Illinois
lover-of-nothing GOLD, Dixon, Illinois
14 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
you dont kno what you have till it gone


I see you slipping,
Falling from sight,
I try to reach for you,
Try with all my might,
I hear myself call for you,
And that's when I realize
That you don't want me to.
You don't want me to catch you,
You weren't even bumped,
You're not slipping at all,
You jumped



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Dren12 said...
on Apr. 8 2011 at 7:48 am
Dren12, Brevard, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"If you don't love me at my worst, then you don't deserve me at my best"

OH my goodness... that was a great poem. :p

on Mar. 30 2011 at 3:25 pm
ZebraWithoutStripes ELITE, Blue Springs, Missouri
102 articles 8 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
To make a difference in the world, you have to be different from the world.

this. is. AMAZING. you literally took my breath away. dang! this is my favourite!

on Mar. 30 2011 at 7:30 am
very good i like your way of your writing and how you turnd it around

Vespa PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 29 2011 at 10:04 pm
Vespa PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
21 articles 4 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
When once you have tasted flight, you will forever walk the earth with your eyes turned skyward, for there you have been, and there you will always long to return.
~Leonardo Da Vinci

I absolutely loved this! Especially the last line; it conveys both a bone-deep sadness and a helplessness that resonates deep within the reader. Or at least it did with me :)

on Mar. 29 2011 at 8:30 pm
unique4evr SILVER, Wellington, Florida
5 articles 0 photos 5 comments
this was really good! it gave me chills! omg! can you check out my poetry and see what ya think and anybody else! thanks and keep writing!

on Mar. 29 2011 at 5:00 pm
Penfencer BRONZE, Amherst, Massachusetts
4 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I see you have a sword. I have one too. They're very ... manly. And ... tough."
-Mulan

Wow, I have to say, I usually hate poems that have any sort of rhyme scheme. But this gave me shivers. It seems like you used the light-hearted lilting of a rhyming poem to get at something much deeper, maybe even darker. I think this is a fantastic piece.

on Mar. 28 2011 at 8:37 pm
Untouchable-Summer SILVER, Cranford, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Even the best fall down sometimes

This was amazing! Don't know why there aren't more comments on this!

Auburn BRONZE said...
on Mar. 28 2011 at 7:48 pm
Auburn BRONZE, Topeka, Kansas
4 articles 1 photo 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
I tell myself lie after lie and I play the part of a girl with many different hearts but none of them were ever meant to hurt you.

this is pretty amazing :) i like the way you turned it around, the wording you used. keep writing! :)


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