Tonight | Teen Ink


April 5, 2010
By ZebraWithoutStripes ELITE, Blue Springs, Missouri
ZebraWithoutStripes ELITE, Blue Springs, Missouri
102 articles 8 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
To make a difference in the world, you have to be different from the world.

Tonight there is a girl alone
left in the dark that chills the bone
she walks the road her shadows foe
each step is took to greater woe

Home is every twisted street
she travels through on weary feet
her heart was lost some years ago
and now is hard and cold as stone

Her friends consist of shadows that
she meets in alleys to brush past
as one more joint is handed off
to numb reality's harsh grasp

She used to care for more than this
but then was broken by Life's fist

alone a lost and haunted soul
she is of now and knows no more

The world's an unforgiving beast
that drinks the blood of all the least
she tells herself this as she sleeps
to stay the tears longed to release

And as a ruined girl she lays
left nothing but to weep and pray
you hold a hope inside yourself
that secretly is untold wealth

If she dies tonight I ask
did you do your own life's task
to make a soul a better one
or did you fail as out time runs

For tonight that girl lies dead
who's fault is that is left unsaid
but now I leave you this to right
there is a boy alone tonight

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on May. 10 2010 at 8:37 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

great job-this is awesome!!!


on May. 4 2010 at 2:09 pm
Paul_James PLATINUM, Plainsboro, New Jersey
24 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The only true love I ever knew
Was behind those downcast eyes
The only comfort I ever felt
Was during those long hours of loneliness
When I felt for you
I do believe
Only innocence can save the world..." -Ocean Soul

I really like this one...granted it is a very dark sounding poem, but it's very beautiful...the imagery you used is a wonderful one in my opinion...the white rose symbolizing innocence, and the burning of the rose indicates the demise of the innocence, as is the theme of this poem. I also like how the rhyme scheme works in this poem. I personally dislike forced rhyme schemes that detract a work from its meaning and point and end up sounding cheesy for it, but this one isnt distracted by it. Good work!

on May. 3 2010 at 10:13 am
effortlesslove BRONZE, Westminster, Maryland
3 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A friend is someone who can sing the song in your heart when you have forgotten the words"i

This i put as one of my favitores so far, i love this poem great job!