Gravity | Teen Ink


April 5, 2009
By MattRgrs PLATINUM, Maplewood, New Jersey
MattRgrs PLATINUM, Maplewood, New Jersey
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I fall. I climb. I climb and I fall.
But I climb to fall.
I build so I can watch what I make crumble to pieces.
I watch the sand sift through my open fingers.
I let the wave claim my castle as its own.
I let it all come down on me, earth and ocean.
I have just enough power to watch myself fail,
Just enough hope to let my dreams die in my arms,
Over and over.
I am gravity and I pull everything down.

The author's comments:
I wrote this to reflect self sabotage

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on Aug. 13 2009 at 6:53 pm
allison99 BRONZE, Lewisburg, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Just because you don't understand it doesn't mean it isn't so."

This is amazing. Really, beautiful job.

Schubster said...
on Aug. 13 2009 at 3:53 pm
wow...alot of ppl commented. Awesome job. I love the idea and how you executed it.

socalledlife said...
on Aug. 13 2009 at 10:04 am
wow this is amazing!

on Aug. 13 2009 at 5:36 am
Damilola BRONZE, Baldwin, New York
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Like everyone else said this poem is very relatable

lovebites said...
on Jul. 30 2009 at 4:11 am
excellent poem very relatable i can totally understand. ur a great writer

on Jul. 21 2009 at 12:37 am
awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground"
~Theordore Roosevelt

I know I am saying the same thing as everyone else but...

I really liked all of the truth portrayed by this poem- very creative theme of the sand castle and the ocean

Also, it was nice of you to use "i" but everyone is guilty of this... great work- infact, I think I'll go look at some of your other pieces

~I'd love any feedback that anyone might have on my poems and stories~

on Jul. 20 2009 at 10:20 pm
Twilightnme SILVER, Anchorage, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"You dont know what you have until its gone"

this is... good. I dont really understand though. The poem doesnt flow together as well... but i enjoyed reading it...

on Jul. 20 2009 at 6:11 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Wow! This is so beautiful. I loved it.

poetman said...
on May. 6 2009 at 11:58 am
This is a very strong and moving poem. I particularly like the way you help the reader visualize the hopelessness.

traveler said...
on Apr. 28 2009 at 12:35 pm
Wow. I can really see this poem. Nice piece of work.

rachel555 said...
on Apr. 28 2009 at 12:32 pm
this one is great!

lisadel said...
on Apr. 27 2009 at 11:53 am
inspiring and true. great imagery

This Guy said...
on Apr. 25 2009 at 10:08 pm
Wow, that makes me want to smile and cry at the same time. Good work.

maryq1456 said...
on Apr. 25 2009 at 10:03 pm
Nice job. This is a great peom. Lots of truth here.

Ricky said...
on Apr. 24 2009 at 11:08 pm
That is me man!

Random415 said...
on Apr. 24 2009 at 12:03 pm
everyone does this to themselves at one time or another so we can all identify with this poem.

quixote said...
on Apr. 23 2009 at 2:35 pm
i like your poem; especially the line: I let the wave claim my castle as its own.

elliott said...
on Apr. 23 2009 at 10:53 am
this is exactly what i seem to be doing in my life right now. good to know that there are others who go thru the same thing.

Keenan said...
on Apr. 22 2009 at 1:45 pm
Wow! I could close my eyes and imagine this as a film, soundtrack and all! To me, at this time, watching something you create (be it physical or mental) and then turning around and watching it crumble and then have the guts to repeat it. Not insane, it captures the paradox of hope and despair. What wins? True genius!

moonstone said...
on Apr. 22 2009 at 11:24 am
this is a truly amazing poem. you speak to me.