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A Message from the heart

April 2, 2015
By WordReveler BRONZE, N/A, Washington
WordReveler BRONZE, N/A, Washington
3 articles 8 photos 9 comments

The sky darkens in
its hazy way,
my gloomy heart
just meets the pace;
the rain plummets
to the yielding earth,
full of corruption,
and it just gets worse;
I cannot stand,
I'll fall down,
past bare cement,
below the ground;
sadness is filler,
in the crevasse of the heart,
but it does not fix,
just tears apart.
I don't know how
I can heal this gap,
every new road
is just a trap;
the inconsistency
of mind and heart
has overwhelmed,
from the start;
but there's a way
around this mess,
yet it won't just happen,
it starts with us.



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on Jan. 18 2017 at 7:35 am
LeisurelySketches GOLD, Tricity, Other
10 articles 1 photo 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your life has a limit but knowledge has none. (Zhuangzi)

Great rhyme scheme and flow, it's wonderful how many images your poem conjures up. All the lines fit so harmoniously into one another, and have an original feel.

on Nov. 25 2015 at 3:36 pm
BabySnickers15 SILVER, Columbus, Ohio
9 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can accept failure, but I can't accept not trying" ~Michael Jordan~
"The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams" ~Franklin Delano Roosevelt~

LOVES IT TIMES 1MILLION!!!!

on Nov. 25 2015 at 3:11 pm
CNBono17 SILVER, Rural, South Carolina
5 articles 0 photos 248 comments

Favorite Quote:
Lego ergo sum (Latin—I read, therefore, I am)
The pen is mightier than the sword—unknown
Don't let anyone look down on you because you are young, but set an example for believers in speech, in conduct, in love, in faith, and in purity—1 Timothy 4:12

The last line gets you. Nice job!

on Jun. 1 2015 at 8:19 pm
WordAddict GOLD, Montclair, New Jersey
13 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Timshel!"

That was a beautiful poem! I agree the last line was so nice, and it wrapped up the poem with a hopeful way. yay

on Apr. 29 2015 at 10:38 am
WordReveler BRONZE, N/A, Washington
3 articles 8 photos 9 comments
Thanks! :)

on Apr. 29 2015 at 10:37 am
WordReveler BRONZE, N/A, Washington
3 articles 8 photos 9 comments
@ Thanks for the feedback, I'll do that. :)

on Apr. 28 2015 at 2:49 pm
The_DoctorDonna PLATINUM, Anytown, Iowa
44 articles 2 photos 105 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible. The word itself says 'I'm Possible'"

This is a beautiful poem. You are really talented. Great job :)

on Apr. 28 2015 at 10:28 am
AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD, WHOOP, New York
18 articles 0 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It takes more strength to cry at mid-defeat."
-Susan Boyle
"The closer you get to the light, the bigger your shadow becomes."
-Kingdom Hearts

Great last line, you're on a good start! Check your rhythm and stresses in a few lines, but other than that it was good.:P