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Smidgen Smile

April 4, 2014
By Promethean SILVER, Kanpur, Other
Promethean SILVER, Kanpur, Other
8 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye will make the whole world blind....


Leave, what others know
Leave, what others feel
Let go with what I know
Tis my time thee to reveal

Unveiling portrait

Thy smidgen smile is sine qua non
Jovial nature as Sophia’s angel
Stylish style, dullness unknown
My thundering heart, beseeching to mingle

Elsewhere, my world is completely dark
Whilst thy face illumine tis world and grins
My happiness silently stark
Meh life as true fir, with unfoiled fins

Clothed black on grey, grey on white light
Now not that roving plover
But thee beloved lover
Cease hide an hide, Our Plight ?


The author's comments:
Describing one isn't easy. Poem makes it little bit easy but keeping nice tone isn't easier. This is my third poem and I know I have made the rhymes well this time. I hope that this time editors may understand my talent and it get published in TI magazine. Although I don't know if its good for others but its surely good enough for me so up til now its my best work.

In the first para, I am basically describing a girl's photo and her sweet smile. I started with a clear statement that I will only tell what I know . I will not say anything that others say about her. I have realized that I must reveal what I feel about her.

In the second para, I am telling that if someone wants to think of her portrait then a tiny tiny smile on her face is very important precondition. She is always smiling. I haven't seen her sad. She is very good towards to me. Her nature is as good as an angel called Sophia who is the goddess of love. She looks stylish and one can never portray dullness on her face. Lastly my heart wants to tell something very important. It want us to be one, as a whole. We both are incomplete without each others.

Second para reveals about my world which is full of sadness. My heart is all dark with no hopes remaining but when she smiles her face illuminates with light and this consoles me. Her smile fills me with delight and happiness. Her smile makes my life as an evergreen tree which is full of success.

In her portrait, she usually wears grey color. her skin is white and her hairs are dense black. I now comes to main point that tells what I was without her. I was like a man with no house, no success and no reason that could impel me to live this life. Her smile made me fall in love with her and thus finally I asks her to cease her shyness and also about our old promise which she made in my dream. The promise to be life long partners.

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on Jun. 22 2015 at 1:06 pm
HayatC. PLATINUM, Louisville, Kentucky
25 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not pray for an easy life, pray for the strength to endure a difficult one."

This is a wonderful piece! I really enjoyed reading it!

on Oct. 14 2014 at 7:40 pm
Promethean SILVER, Kanpur, Other
8 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye will make the whole world blind....

lol thankyou. 

on Oct. 14 2014 at 7:35 pm
Trin_Freckles GOLD, Troutman, North Carolina
11 articles 12 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
When your sad, stop being sad and be awesome instead

You have this way with words, that is amazing!!!

on Oct. 14 2014 at 7:35 pm
Promethean SILVER, Kanpur, Other
8 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye will make the whole world blind....

thanks you feather and emily.

feathertail said...
on Oct. 8 2014 at 11:21 am
feathertail, London, Pennsylvania
0 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All around me there are people telling me who I should be. I hate to disappoint you but these are the colours that I see. If there's just as many colours, as there are human beings, maybe I'm just colour-blind and missing out on everything!" -Nano

Nice poem! You're really talented Promethean. Keep it up! :)

on Oct. 6 2014 at 3:57 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Wow. This is really and very well-written. I hope more of your work is coming. You really do have a lot of talent and greatness in you. You are a wonderful and amazing writer and person. This is beautiful, your poem. Thank you so much, sharing this. :)

on Sep. 6 2014 at 7:26 am
Promethean SILVER, Kanpur, Other
8 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye will make the whole world blind....

thankyou friend.

on Aug. 1 2014 at 7:12 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Yay! I am excited to read more ;)

on Aug. 1 2014 at 12:30 pm
Promethean SILVER, Kanpur, Other
8 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye will make the whole world blind....

yes, I will be writing much more. thankyou  very much. 

on Jul. 7 2014 at 12:53 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

I really like this! Keep writing please! o^_^o

on Jun. 29 2014 at 10:43 pm
Promethean SILVER, Kanpur, Other
8 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye will make the whole world blind....

thanskyou ghosssssssssst beam

on Jun. 24 2014 at 8:35 am
Sunshine2420 SILVER, Unknown, Other
9 articles 0 photos 173 comments

Favorite Quote:
A smile hides everything.

You're welcome :)

on Jun. 22 2014 at 7:49 pm
Promethean SILVER, Kanpur, Other
8 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye will make the whole world blind....

thank you thankyou :D :) 

on May. 16 2014 at 10:28 am
Sunshine2420 SILVER, Unknown, Other
9 articles 0 photos 173 comments

Favorite Quote:
A smile hides everything.

Hmm... impressive and well written ;)

on May. 10 2014 at 11:21 pm
Promethean SILVER, Kanpur, Other
8 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye will make the whole world blind....

thanks, will not do that in future. 

on May. 4 2014 at 9:04 pm
Ray--yo PLATINUM, Kathmandu, Other
43 articles 2 photos 581 comments

Favorite Quote:
God Makes No Mistakes. (Gaga?)
"I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right." -Liesel Meminger via Markus Zusac, "The Book Thief"

Ok, really, really good work. I know the old English adds a fresh dimension to the poem, but was that really necessary? I really like some of the structures used, like 'my Thundering heart'. However, my biggest problem here is your description. You readers have the right to interpret it freely, which the description kinda distorts. But the poem, in itself, is great. I'm happily rating it 5/5. Keep up the good work.

on May. 4 2014 at 6:29 am
Promethean SILVER, Kanpur, Other
8 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye will make the whole world blind....

Thank you Phoenix!!!!!

on May. 4 2014 at 6:28 am
Promethean SILVER, Kanpur, Other
8 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye will make the whole world blind....

Thank you. I am very happy but  why my wording are odd, can you explain me?

HudaZav SILVER said...
on May. 2 2014 at 7:54 pm
HudaZav SILVER, Toronto, Other
8 articles 6 photos 392 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible; the word itself says 'I'm possible'!" -Audrey Hepburn

The wording is a little bit odd, but other than that, amazing poem! great meaning and depth to it

on Apr. 24 2014 at 12:39 am
PhoenixTears GOLD, Stansbury Park, Utah
11 articles 6 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life sucks. And then you die." ~Jacob (Twilight)

Wow! Wonderful work within! It's immediately eye-catching! :) wonderful