Well, honestly, I can see your point, and I agree; I should have put a little more time improving it. But for the subject, I had made this poem for my grandmother before she died of liver cancer. It was kind of disappointing considering when I told her I had made it for her, she didn't want to read it. And the next day prior of making the poem for her, she passed. She never got to hear it. But, anyway, thank you very much for reading this and hope you read my others. And sorry for not responding back to you right away, for the longest time I have had a lot of stress and didn't go on this site very much. But I did post a couple of other poems so please feel free to read them. Thank you. Goat Green

Ehm... This was truly good, although I saw a few points that made me get rather confused... For one, I saw a few "errors", perhaps in spelling/grammar... Was the first line, "In those we love"? I also saw that there was no punctuation, and, although it is not always needed, periods mark the end of a thought, and I saw you giving several thoughts within this poem... Perhaps one of the lines should be "The heart's words" or "Heart's words"? It made absolutely no sense to me... I gave this three out of five stars, only because I wasn't exactly sure of the subject... Don't let this discourage you; this was really good, and you have talent, as I can see... Keep writing! -Kait[lyn]