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Over the Hills

April 23, 2012
By satellite23 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
satellite23 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Show me how,
through way of love,
to get past my selfish pride.

Over the hills I sadly ride
to fill my gaping heart.

Afar you are,
my beautiful love,
until I must arrive.

Over the hills I sadly ride
to fill my gaping heart.

Rest alone
without a love
while I wither away and die.

Over the hills I sadly ride
to fill my gaping heart.

Another day,
still no love
from the rose of my eye.

Over the hills I sadly ride
to fill my gaping heart.

How can I live
holding a love
in which you can’t confide?

Over the hills I sadly ride
to fill my gaping heart.



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on Feb. 1 2013 at 2:09 pm
satellite23 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Haha applesauce,   I don't even keep track of who I've commented on really....don't feel bad LOL. Thansk for commenting!

on Dec. 19 2012 at 9:22 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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Oh im sorry!!quite a long ways a ways, you replied to a poem of mine, and asked for reviews of your stuff in return. at the time, i stopped going on teenink, dont know why but i did! Soo anywhoo, this was a very wondreful poem! its so sad but a wonderful poem indeed!

on Jun. 2 2012 at 5:29 pm
satellite23 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Sure. Thanks for commenting.

on May. 31 2012 at 8:58 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Very good, very moving! The words fit together well, the rythem is smooth, it makes sense, it has the ability to draw the reader in emotionally.  Great! 5/5! I'll check more of your work later, can you look at mine?

on May. 25 2012 at 12:06 pm
satellite23 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
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thanks for commenting

butterfly123 said...
on May. 22 2012 at 6:12 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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me too. the imagery iin the beginning was very good . i like the way the poem was split and the repetetion of the last two lines. also, the way you moved along from one thought to the other really helped the fluidity of the poem. great work and keep writing :D

on May. 12 2012 at 7:56 am
satellite23 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
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thanks DanielM

DanielM. said...
on May. 11 2012 at 6:57 pm
That was an awesome poem. I liked how you used imagery in the beginning