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Immortal Suffering

January 27, 2011
By hxcRocker DIAMOND, Haiku, Hawaii
hxcRocker DIAMOND, Haiku, Hawaii
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Stress the real test
Paying the fee
Pressure the prison
Surrounding me

Happiness the lost emotion
Of what I used to be
Music the truest friend
I have ever seen

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on Feb. 20 2011 at 6:33 pm
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
48 articles 0 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

Try working on your spacing/flow of the poems.  This one is good, but it could use some extra words here and there... or commas.