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Atop a Sinking Sun

March 3, 2023
By joshleader BRONZE, Redmond, Washington
joshleader BRONZE, Redmond, Washington
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Lost rays of light, a dying dawn,
The sanguine scent of summers gone.
Abyssal lands, not once so proud,
Bequeath Her warmth with mocking shroud.

And like the Moon that doth recede,
The blazing star shall wane, then bleed—
Her crimson lips, immortal, stain
The placid depths, Poseidon’s plain.

Within the fading light shall flee
The huddled masses—breathe ye free?
O joy! How fair it is to slay
Thee, Sun—how fleeting is the Day!

Among the swells of waters deep
I rest now lone and find for cheap
The whispered taste of grapefruit flesh,
What marvel for a life refreshed!

The tender silence of the dark
Is then but sheets of slate to spark
The thoughts which sole the heart dare fear
While plunging thro’ this time-stripped sphere.


The author's comments:

When composing this poem, my primary intent was to communicate the Romanticists’
response to The Enlightenment and succeeding shift from reason to emotion. The title, “Atop a Sinking Sun,” illustrates this idea, where the sun embodies the strive for knowledge and truth consequently fading away. Stylistically, I wanted the structure of the poem to reflect this hallmark of the Romantic movement. To accomplish this, the first two stanzas feature caesura and an absence of enjambment on nearly every line, conveying the prominent logic and order the movement reacted against, which is further bolstered by the emphasis on purposeful alliteration throughout these stanzas. Between lines 10-11, this rational style is juxtaposed with the spontaneity encouraged by Romanticism. A question is directly followed by an exclamation, and the prevalence of enjambed lines in the fourth and fifth stanzas suggests a more flexible structure, although the poem remains in a consistent iambic tetrameter.


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Afra ELITE said...
on Mar. 5 2023 at 10:07 am
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Favorite Quote:
"A writer must never be short of ideas."<br /> -Gabriel Agreste- (Fictional character- Miraculous)

This is so good!!! Captivating diction!!!