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The System

May 8, 2009
By project827 GOLD, Portage, Michigan
project827 GOLD, Portage, Michigan
13 articles 1 photo 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Real Revolution Starts At Learning, If You're Not Angry, Then You Are Not Paying Attention" - Tim McIlrath

bass slams out a thumping beat
drums smash out the rhythm
as everyone tries to dance along
a guy drinks some mountain dew for courage
and makes his way to the girl
in no time at all there holding
each other close

sweating bodies everywhere
energy is off the charts
this is where I live
The System
this is what I am
I turn it up till my ears bleed
and I don’t ever want to stop

he holds his girl close
and doesn’t want to let go
good thing she doesn’t want to either
this is his best day ever
here comes the slow song
they’re the best couple out there

But then the party’s over
everyone empties the room
empty bottles are everywhere
a lonely janitor sweeps it all up
but I’m not disappointed,
they’ll all be here tomorrow

the guy wakes up the next day
he feels like crap
decides he’ll call his girl
and what the heck,
maybe he’ll go to the party today.

They go to the party
the bass is even loader
the drums are faster
and more ears bleed
this is my life
this is The System

The author's comments:
I was looking through some of my old files and found this. I had written it about a year ago, but its still a favorite of mine, even though it’s not a very good sample of my writing (in my opinion) Take your own interpretation.

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This article has 4 comments.

on Aug. 19 2009 at 2:48 am
Sasha-Bear PLATINUM, Lockhart, Texas
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This is one of my favorites as well. It's really interesting and well written.

on Jun. 12 2009 at 5:49 pm
xXsmileXx PLATINUM, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Your dreams only become intangible when you stop reaching" ~me ;)

To me this one is different than a lot of your other poems...i like it though. Nice Job!

on Jun. 6 2009 at 10:58 pm
RainWashed PLATINUM, Park City, Utah
46 articles 1 photo 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Repeat the good and the bad. Do it all again. And pile on the years."

I love this poem and it is kinda dark, but still very, very good. I think you sell your self short, way too short. Your a great writer and i'ver checked some of your other stuff, still good.

RaeRae said...
on May. 23 2009 at 3:19 am
It is still really good! It is one of my favorite poems you have written too. :)