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The Cold-Blooded

August 2, 2010
By AeroAsh87 BRONZE, No., California
AeroAsh87 BRONZE, No., California
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Favorite Quote:
"To be Old & Wise you must first have to be Young & Stupid."

"I have a very odd feeling that this isn't actually a real amusement park." Amy said to her best friend Amanda. "Ha! Maybe it is because it's amusing for THEM!" Amanda responded with a bit of sarcasm in her voice. All the strange stuff started happening when Amy and her best friend Amanda stepped foot in this strange "Amusement Park." Possibly they started figuring out this wasn't a real amusement park when the gates shut up right as they walked in and about 20 locks all got bolted up. There was no way of escaping then. But why were they being locked up in the first place?

The people at the gates charged them 1 cent to enter. That's probably when Amanda and Amy really first figured out this place was nowhere close to being an amusement park. As they walked up the cold, hard, marble steps, Amanda tripped and cut her knee. It seemed as if out of nowhere, a man in a black suit jumped out and graciously said with a smirk "Let me fix that for you!" He bent down and licked her knee. All of the blood was gone in less than a second. Immediately the best friends' gazes met and they both mouthed Vampire.

The man in the black suit lifted Amanda up with one hand and continued to carry her up the steps. He had the strength of the Hulk. As they entered through the large metal doors the man in the black suit asked "Now?" The lady at the front desk said, "Oh they haven't been taken cared of yet? Yes, now!" In a flash he picked up a piece of dark colored wood and knocked both Amy, and Amanda, out.

They awaked about an hour later on metal examining chairs. Both girls' heads were throbbing. Amanda felt completely shut down. As they looked over at each other they finally realized that both their hands, and feet, has been clasped down to the metal examining chairs. "I've arrived." A very strong looking man strode into the room. "Well I guess since I'm going to be the last person you girls ever see, I can tell you we are vampires. That's why you're here in the first place. You humans seem to be taking over the world and we are tired of it. Slowly but surely we are making the human population drop. This is only going to hurt a bit!" He smiled as he held up an at least 6 foot shot.

"Oh girls don't worry. This is going to be fun!" The "doctor" paced across the room. "Oh, please excuse my bad manners. I forgot to introduce myself. My name is Dr. Vessel. You know? As in blood vessel." Dr. Vessel pronounced. He lightly brushed his hand across Amy's cheek. They were as ice cold as ice itself. A chill ran throughout Amy's entire body. BOOOOOM! It was as if everything was rewinding. SWUSH! Amanda's head jerked up. "Oh good. It was only a dream" Amanda sighed with relief. "But, ouch, why is my head throbbing?"

The author's comments:
This piece was written for a school assignment. I would have made it longer but it couldn't be longer than it is. If you guys would like me to write a second chapter then tell me. But sometimes stories are better without a sequel. I like this piece because you get to finish the ending.

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This article has 7 comments.

on Jan. 4 2011 at 9:21 pm
Very well written!!!

on Jan. 4 2011 at 6:44 pm
That's really nice... :)

on Jan. 4 2011 at 2:54 pm
AeroAsh87 BRONZE, No., California
1 article 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To be Old & Wise you must first have to be Young & Stupid."

thank you so much!  :D you're so kind!  & yes I'm thinking about possibly writing a sequel to this short story.  thanks again for the feedback!

AnOpenBook said...
on Jan. 4 2011 at 2:45 pm
I think you should write a second chapter or even another story having to do with the similiar subject... It thrills me that the ending is up to the reader. I really enjoy your work and think you have greatness ahead of you. :D

on Jan. 4 2011 at 2:39 pm


I LUV THAT STORY!! I, too, remember doing this.. That's an awesome story I think you should write more!  :D


on Jan. 4 2011 at 1:55 pm
OMG!! this is a GREAT story!! I remember doing this in school! You should write more stories!! good job!!

on Oct. 8 2010 at 8:53 pm
TheEpicAuthor BRONZE, Dnver, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
For everytime you lose something you gain something else
For everytime you gain something you lose something else
Its all about youre outlook of life
Regret or Rejoice

you should totally continue this