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Again

July 12, 2011
By Odessa_Sterling00 DIAMOND, No, Missouri
Odessa_Sterling00 DIAMOND, No, Missouri
87 articles 108 photos 968 comments

Favorite Quote:
All gave some, some gave all. -War Veterans headstone.


You lied.
Your a liar.
I’m so stupid.
For believing you.
Again.


This repeated in my head over, and over again, till I felt like I might go insane. You promised me the sun and moon you stopped, but you lied. You swore upon your own existence, but your a liar. I should have known you couldn’t quit, but I’m so stupid. You ignored me for 2 weeks and I worried for my sanity, for believing you. Because you went back to all your bad habits and lies, again.


The author's comments:
This is about someone lying about doing drugs and stuff.

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on Jul. 29 2011 at 11:24 am
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

This was okay. It felt pretty repetitive and it was very short. I think you could extend this, add some more details, and break it up into paragraphs.

on Jul. 22 2011 at 8:36 pm
itchyriver PLATINUM, San Diego, California
27 articles 5 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
That's either snow or a bunch of white flowers.

Agree with JustAnotherOwl

for future reference- numbers one through ten should be written out. Numbers higher than that can be left in numerical form or written out (written being more formal) it really depends on the situation.


on Jul. 20 2011 at 6:30 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

This was relatable. I especially liked the line, "You promised me the sun and the moon you stopped, but you lied."

 

When you said "your a liar", it should be "you're a liar". In most writing, you'd want to type out the whole word, instead of just the number (ex. "two" not "2").



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