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Apartment Girl

August 26, 2009
By beautifulpeople SILVER, Houston, Texas
beautifulpeople SILVER, Houston, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want to do but be ready for the consequences."

My date walked me up my apartment stairs. He was saying something about a great night, I don’t know. I was tuning him out, thinking about a nice warm bath with lilac-smelling bubbles. It was rude to do that, trust me I know. But he was boring.
“So I really enjoyed your company. And I had a great night. I thought the movie was good. And the food tasted really good.” Blah, blah, blah. I tried not to roll my eyes. Every guy has said the same thing.
“Oh yeah, me too. You are so funny!” I smiled and touched his arm, trying to be nice but this guy was a pain. Sure he could make me laugh but that’s not exactly hard to do. A lamp can make me laugh. The smile didn’t reach my eyes, I could feel it. He takes my hand. It was sweaty and gross. I sound like a total brat. Gosh, someone should seriously slap me. I mean the guys nice but if I stopped liking him in the middle of the date that’s bad, right? A second date wouldn’t go very well. We stop at the top of the stairs and he leans forward, waiting for a kiss. I give him a quick peck, say bye, and walk into my apartment building.
“Another date, Ms. Kristabel?” The front desk guy asks me. He always sees me with different men. I’m not a slut, though. Just a girl looking for love.
“Yes, but this one didn’t go well either. Personally, I don’t think there’s a guy out there for me. I’ve dated almost every freakin’ fish in the sea.” I sigh and push the button for the elevator. This apartment strikes me as interesting. Their front entrance looks so grand, I mean the floors actually look like real marble and the maroon walls and fancy couches add zest to the place. They have three floors that go up, and three floors that go down. I just think that’s so cool.
“Well, Ms. Kristabel there’s always someone out there. Just don’t give up.” I look back at him and pray with my eyes that he is right. He just smiles and nods his head at me, while the doors slide open. I walk in and press 2D so I can go two floors down away from the guy that I almost fell for. The memory pops into my head. When I first moved here, he was working there. The desk guy was stunningly handsome. Sharp cheek bones, a prominent jaw, black wavy hair, and these brown eyes that melted you when you looked into them, no matter how cold your heart was.
I was holding a box full of my crap when he caught my gaze, and perhaps my feet because the next thing I know I went skidding onto the floor and my crap fell out. His deep chuckle came from beside me as he started picking up the clothes. Bras, panties, you name it, it was on that floor. I get off the elevator and amble over to my door, number 52.

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This article has 114 comments.

Gigi- BRONZE said...
on Jul. 16 2010 at 2:30 pm
Gigi- BRONZE, Ann Arbor, Michigan
1 article 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
Never give up without a fight.- some old guy

i really enjoyed it but i do think it ended a bit to abrubtly.


Apollo26 said...
on Jun. 24 2010 at 9:20 pm
Apollo26, Abington, Massachusetts
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It ends really abrubtly, and is very subtle. I feel like it could hav been a lot better with some more editing, and some focus.

on Jun. 24 2010 at 3:46 pm
AelitaReloaded PLATINUM, Scottsdale, Arizona
22 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The pen is mightier than the sword" author unknown (to me)

Good job, though I would've liked it better if you'd said "a box full of my stuff." Using the other word made it sound like your character was carrting something rather unappealing.

on Jun. 24 2010 at 11:19 am
Chinadoll BRONZE, Dallas, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 172 comments

That was awesome! So cute. Are you gonna write some more? Keep writing!

Could you look at some of my work? Thanks!


on Jun. 13 2010 at 8:08 pm
JamieStarr GOLD, Sevierville, Tennessee
11 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
o! thats why i love you. :) i love you.

this was cute/funny. keep writing

on Jun. 2 2010 at 10:20 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Very nice, and an interesting dynamic between the girl and the desk guy.  Keep writing.

on May. 24 2010 at 6:10 pm
temptedrose SILVER, Kent, Washington
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be who you want to be!

You did a totally awesome job.

lovestruck said...
on May. 13 2010 at 10:03 pm
it's great. i think you have serious talent!!!

on May. 11 2010 at 8:07 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

Great job-i really like it!!1

on May. 11 2010 at 5:16 pm
evrycloudyday7 PLATINUM, Wappingers Falls, New York
28 articles 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"As is a tale, so is life: not how long it is, but how good it is, is what counts." Seneca
"I'll just read a book instead. I don't care if we're just friends. I can hang out with myself I'm old enough now to pretend. Bam ba dum ba dum ba dum." kate n

pretty good so far. continue! =)

on May. 11 2010 at 12:32 pm
chartothalatte GOLD, Cleveland Heights, Ohio
10 articles 1 photo 62 comments
really good! sounds like me and my best friend. he's seen all of my stuff like that, but i actually fell for him. we got past it, though, which is why he's my best friend. so i can totally relate! great story!

on May. 11 2010 at 12:06 am
weebnini DIAMOND, San Diego, California
55 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Done & Over"

"Anyone can give up, it's the easiest thing in the world to do. But to hold it together when everyone else would understand if you fell apart, that's true strength."

"People should be able to say how they feel. How they really feel. Not, you know, some words that some strangers put in their mouth."

i agree with soccercrazy!! plz continue!! i will beg along with soccercrazy!! just PLEASE:)

on Apr. 19 2010 at 10:46 pm
CanYouSeeTheCrazy PLATINUM, Cle Elum, Washington
21 articles 0 photos 125 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I know why everyone in this world is so desperate to find love."
"Oh yeah? Why then?"
"Because, it's the closest thing we have to magic."

oh my god, please please please continue this story! i'm itching to hear more, please!! you're a talented writer, and i saw that in how many short paragraphs? lol

keep writing on this storyline! please!! =D

Shae.xD said...
on Apr. 19 2010 at 9:33 pm
Shae.xD, Odessa, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We're just portions, not a prize."
"Pain is inevitable, but suffering is optional."

Wow!! That was really really good!!! u should really "run with that" cause you could get pretty far, i imagine.

on Apr. 19 2010 at 6:56 pm
writergirl13 GOLD, Cherry Hill, New Jersey
11 articles 8 photos 261 comments

Favorite Quote:
All are lunatics, but he who can analyze his delusions is called a philosopher.
Ambrose Bierce

Wow! I really like this. I especially loved the part where the guy at the front desk encourages her! lol! :) Great Job!! Please look at and comment on some of my work. :)

on Apr. 19 2010 at 4:37 pm
Lost-In-Life GOLD, Whitby, Other
11 articles 0 photos 299 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's never to late, if it weren't for the last minute many things would never get done!

This is a really good piece although I'm not quite sure where you're trying to go with this. Maybe a continuation would help.

on Apr. 19 2010 at 12:14 pm
sidneynicole BRONZE, McKinney, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When life knock you down to your knees, just know you are in a perfect postition to pray."

omg this is soo good ur need to write more! (:

on Mar. 28 2010 at 2:25 pm
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
2 articles 0 photos 534 comments

Mooooreee More more

When is saw it im like dude the door guy and her are getting married 

not to be blunt :))))) (double chin smiley)

on Mar. 6 2010 at 11:26 pm
Green8a8 SILVER, NY, New York
8 articles 1 photo 161 comments

Favorite Quote:
im the author of my life, unfortunately im writing in pen therefore i can't erase nothing about it.-by some crazy friend of mine

omg i seriously want more

on Jan. 19 2010 at 11:52 pm
pfeferminz SILVER, Sebastopol, California
9 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everyone has the right to be stupid but some people abuse the privilege......

That's a great beginning, of a book a mean! The best relationships come out od friendships right?