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Apartment Girl

August 26, 2009
By beautifulpeople SILVER, Houston, Texas
beautifulpeople SILVER, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want to do but be ready for the consequences."

My date walked me up my apartment stairs. He was saying something about a great night, I don’t know. I was tuning him out, thinking about a nice warm bath with lilac-smelling bubbles. It was rude to do that, trust me I know. But he was boring.
“So I really enjoyed your company. And I had a great night. I thought the movie was good. And the food tasted really good.” Blah, blah, blah. I tried not to roll my eyes. Every guy has said the same thing.
“Oh yeah, me too. You are so funny!” I smiled and touched his arm, trying to be nice but this guy was a pain. Sure he could make me laugh but that’s not exactly hard to do. A lamp can make me laugh. The smile didn’t reach my eyes, I could feel it. He takes my hand. It was sweaty and gross. I sound like a total brat. Gosh, someone should seriously slap me. I mean the guys nice but if I stopped liking him in the middle of the date that’s bad, right? A second date wouldn’t go very well. We stop at the top of the stairs and he leans forward, waiting for a kiss. I give him a quick peck, say bye, and walk into my apartment building.
“Another date, Ms. Kristabel?” The front desk guy asks me. He always sees me with different men. I’m not a slut, though. Just a girl looking for love.
“Yes, but this one didn’t go well either. Personally, I don’t think there’s a guy out there for me. I’ve dated almost every freakin’ fish in the sea.” I sigh and push the button for the elevator. This apartment strikes me as interesting. Their front entrance looks so grand, I mean the floors actually look like real marble and the maroon walls and fancy couches add zest to the place. They have three floors that go up, and three floors that go down. I just think that’s so cool.
“Well, Ms. Kristabel there’s always someone out there. Just don’t give up.” I look back at him and pray with my eyes that he is right. He just smiles and nods his head at me, while the doors slide open. I walk in and press 2D so I can go two floors down away from the guy that I almost fell for. The memory pops into my head. When I first moved here, he was working there. The desk guy was stunningly handsome. Sharp cheek bones, a prominent jaw, black wavy hair, and these brown eyes that melted you when you looked into them, no matter how cold your heart was.
I was holding a box full of my crap when he caught my gaze, and perhaps my feet because the next thing I know I went skidding onto the floor and my crap fell out. His deep chuckle came from beside me as he started picking up the clothes. Bras, panties, you name it, it was on that floor. I get off the elevator and amble over to my door, number 52.

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on May. 6 2011 at 9:30 am
Valhalla-is-calling GOLD, Waterboro, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"No parent should have to bury their own child." -Theodin

do you mean MR. right??

brittany said...
on Apr. 28 2011 at 10:51 pm
I completely agree!

on Apr. 28 2011 at 7:17 am
babagirl BRONZE, Jackson, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
If you never fail. You never try. If you never try. You never make a diffrance.

well i liked it sounds fimilure similar to my life fall for the guy nextdoor but you need to add the ending make it sparkle


on Apr. 26 2011 at 9:20 am
Valhalla-is-calling GOLD, Waterboro, Maine
13 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No parent should have to bury their own child." -Theodin

do u mean mr. right??

smith said...
on Apr. 6 2011 at 9:56 pm
this is beautiful. mrs. right will come soon

on Apr. 6 2011 at 12:04 am
everything_shane BRONZE, Manila, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Don't rush things. Good things will come to those who wait.

the story was nice but i  think u need to add some details to make it more beautiful.. that's all :) great job.. :)

on Mar. 15 2011 at 5:18 pm
rom.writer96 BRONZE, IGH, Minnesota
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I found it very well written but it ended abruptly...I would love moreee!!!

Pickles-29 said...
on Mar. 15 2011 at 4:23 pm
Pickles-29, Boise, Idaho
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I thought it was good but ended abruptley needs more detail.

secrets said...
on Mar. 15 2011 at 12:55 pm
It started off really funny, but I don't get it?? What happened?? She noticed the guy at the desk and then....you stopped without a conclusion.

AshleeH GOLD said...
on Mar. 15 2011 at 10:59 am
AshleeH GOLD, Enterprise, Utah
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Great way to really describe feelings in a way the reader can relate to. It ended too soon, though! I am hungry for more!

lady gagag said...
on Mar. 15 2011 at 9:22 am
ende to soon need more description

on Feb. 21 2011 at 2:37 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

I liked it well enough...Your writing is great! (: But it ended way too soon!

Lex2011 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 21 2011 at 10:51 am
Lex2011 BRONZE, Washington, Pennsylvania
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this was adorable. i just wish there was more *tear* but hey, keep on writing and check out my book. i need some advice :)

MKimmi said...
on Feb. 21 2011 at 10:17 am
MKimmi, NY, New York
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wasn't one wat? i dont understand it... i menat the comment,

btw, story's pretty good, like a good start but it left me hanging a little, like "Hey whats next?"

on Feb. 21 2011 at 1:38 am
abottleofcreativeness BRONZE, Rancho Cucamonga, California
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Favorite Quote:
it takes guts to love. but it takes nerve to go back to the one who broke you.

this was really cute. u should add more cuz it's so cute. :D

tanaya BRONZE said...
on Feb. 10 2011 at 6:17 pm
tanaya BRONZE, Edison, New Jersey
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Yeah, you shouldn't be insulting the writer like that

on Jan. 31 2011 at 9:12 am
beautifulpeople SILVER, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want to do but be ready for the consequences."

That was rude of you to say

on Jan. 30 2011 at 6:33 pm
singinginthegardn GOLD, Cowell, Massachusetts
16 articles 2 photos 158 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anaïs Nin

Liked it..but will there be more? :)

Tinyosi said...
on Jan. 30 2011 at 11:44 am
Nice story, but...oh waiit, there wasn't one

on Jan. 8 2011 at 11:31 pm
Mortie PLATINUM, Oak Run, California
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Favorite Quote:
Whats The Point?

this was really good!!!!!!