Cinderella

May 15, 2008
By grace moore, Dixon, KY

Cinderella was usually a very sweet, innocent girl. She always loved being so nice, perfect, and mannerly. But one day she hit a mean streak that seemed as if it would never end. She was cleaning her kitchen when one of her nice step sisters came into the room. She wanted to help Cinderella make lunch for the 12 guest they would be serving, and that’s when Cinderella’s mean streaks start.

Cinderella went off the deep end. She yelled, scratched, fussed and fought, then she begin to yell “I CAN DO IT ON MY OWN, I DON’T NEED YOUR HELP!” by the time Cinderella got done with here step sister, Anastasia, she was crying her eyes out. Anastasia figured that Cinderella had been under some pressure, and had took it out on her, and that she would apologize, but she was wrong. Instead she called Anastasia a whiney baby, and told her to stop crying.

Cinderella next victim was her other nice step sister, Drusilla. Drusilla heard some yelling coming from the kitchen, she went to check on Cinderella and Anastasia to make sure everything was alright. When she got to the kitchen what she saw startled her. Anastasia was in the corner with her face red and eyes bloodshot. Anastasia was begging for Cinderella to stop yelling. Drusilla asked Cinderella what she was doing, but she did not give an answer. Instead what she got was Cinderella yelling at her to “mind her own business”. Cinderella got so mad that her mother had to ask them to stop 10 times, then had to pull Cinderella off of them and locked her in her room.

Somehow Cinderella got out of her room and started a food fight at lunch with the 12 guest that were over for lunch. Her mother, Cassandra, was usually a very, calm person. But she got so mad at Cinderella she grounded her until she deiced that she was un-grounded.

When her grounding was over, she and her mother fought constantly. Although she and her mother fought constantly, her sisters no longer talked to Cinderella. They were afraid that she would hurt them. One day Cinderella got so mad at her mother she ran away. She took her horse and settled down in another place. She Decided to live there the rest of her life. She thought it was just as good or better than her home town. Then her mother heard of where she was and had to drag her home.

Although it seems as if Cinderella would have learned her lesson, she didn’t. Again and again she fought with her mother until her mother could no longer take it. She wouldn’t do anything her mother asked her too. She wouldn’t clean her room, wash the dishes, do her chores, or even ride her horse to the local shop to get some flour. Her mom decided to send her to her uncle’s house. Cinderella’s uncle was a very strict man, he never took no for an answer. Cinderella’s mom knew that was just what she needed.


When Cinderella got back from her uncle’s house 5 week’s later, it was as if she was a different child. To Cinderella’s surprise she wasn’t the only on to change. Her mother and step sisters had turned very mean because of Cinderella torturing them. Instead of Cinderella torturing them, they were torturing her.

Cinderella was forever known as the mistreated girl, but that’s a whole other story.


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on Jul. 17 2017 at 6:37 pm
Artistic_Geek_Roo_10 SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"Happiness can be found in the darkest of places, but only if one remembers to turn on the light."
Albus Dumbledore

This was pretty good, I just think that you could have included more details about why Cinderella had a mean streak and what happened at the uncle's house to turn her nice again and why her family turned so vicious when she was gone. It has lots of potential though!

on Apr. 17 2017 at 10:01 am
karleyholleman BRONZE, Grandville, Michigan
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Very creative twist on the real story. Nice Job!

annacook said...
on Nov. 6 2015 at 9:07 am
annacook,
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Cinderella is one of my favorite movies as a kid. As I read your fan fiction I get confused cause you put a lot of twist in the story but I really like the way they are. I liked the part where you say “, she and her mother fought constantly”. Because she never fought for her self in the movie.

on Oct. 1 2014 at 9:00 am
Pieric123456789 SILVER, West Windsor Township, New Jersey
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!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Oct. 1 2014 at 8:59 am
Pieric123456789 SILVER, West Windsor Township, New Jersey
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UNFAIR

on Oct. 1 2014 at 8:58 am
VishalRaman_W4TRW BRONZE, Plainsboro, New Jersey
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Guest is plural in the first paragraph!!!

on Jun. 27 2011 at 9:07 pm
Healing_Angel SILVER, Sydney, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Live for today, not for tomorrow

This needs work, but it's a good plot. 

Aamna BRONZE said...
on Jun. 5 2011 at 3:50 pm
Aamna BRONZE, Burlington, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Happiness come to those who wait"

I love the idea of this being Cinderella's 'back ground' story. Its very creative. Check out my story called the precarious pursuit

on May. 14 2011 at 6:28 pm
SilentlyRising GOLD, Decatur, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"My pen is the barrel of the gun. Remind me which side you should be on."

The story had a good plot, but it lacked details like feelings, dialogue, etc.  It all felt kinda rushed.  Other than that, it was a good start.  Write on!

Alia_Tan GOLD said...
on Jan. 24 2011 at 6:15 pm
Alia_Tan GOLD, Elk Grove, California
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Favorite Quote:
"I gotta right to sing the blues/
gotta right to moan and sigh/
I gotta right to sit and cry" From "I gotta right to sing the blues" By Louis Armstrong

nice job :) it was a nice additon to the original story! Plz rate and comment on mine! thanks!  its called gregor the overlander epilogue chapter one. Again nice job and keep it up!

on Jan. 2 2011 at 10:46 pm
DaydreamBeliever GOLD, Lockport, Other
15 articles 4 photos 140 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you live to be one hundred, I want to live to be one hundred minus one day, so that I'll never have to live without you. -Winnie the Pooh

  I agree, it needs way more detail and description. it has potential, though :)

on Dec. 11 2010 at 4:13 pm
Underhill BRONZE, Olathe, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
"Sanity is just another way of describing people with no vision."—Anonymous

I agree.  It's a fun satirical idea that I find bitter truth in.  It just needs editing and detail.

LastChapter said...
on Jul. 10 2010 at 7:23 pm
LastChapter, Hempstead, New York
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Favorite Quote:
(couldn't think of anything better at the time) "Take the first step in faith. You don't have to see the whole staircase, just take the first step."-Dr.Martin Luther King Jr.

good. but you could deff make it better with more detail. it was cute, but it left me a little empty handed. maybe do more with it? aaaaanywho, nice job.

on Mar. 18 2010 at 7:05 am
missca1229 GOLD, North Tonawanda, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Life makes my heart sing

I loike the twits, Awesome!~

on Feb. 28 2010 at 10:08 am
Waterlogged BRONZE, Grapevine, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Winston, you are drunk." To which Churchill responded, "and you, madam, are ugly. But in the morning, I'll be sober,"-Lady Astor and Winston Churchill

It was a very good idea, but I would add some more description. It would also be better if you had fewer grammatical errors.

Amaya SILVER said...
on Dec. 2 2009 at 1:39 pm
Amaya SILVER, Kapolei, Hawaii
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Favorite Quote:
"Alice, you're terribly late you know. You naughty!" - Johnny Depp (Mad Hatter: Alice in Wonderland)

very nice. the "before" story. that's very interesting. i wouldn't have thought of that. 5 stars!

on Oct. 19 2009 at 3:38 pm
Aitana Libreros BRONZE, West New York, New Jersey
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I love the way you emphasise how it was never the step-mother's ar step-sister's fault. it really grabed my attention

Fryee said...
on Oct. 11 2009 at 10:34 am
What I liked about this peice was that you showed the readers the otherside of the common Cinderella story and made it seem as though Cinderella was the one who turned her stepsisters and her stepmother around. In the beginning, however I was confused because of a few grammatical errors such as, "Cinderella got done with here step sister" I did not know what that meant. You did though really grab my attention by turning the story of kind, innocent Cinderella around to mean, guilty Cinderella. I think you should write another story on what happened afterwards. Keep up the good work!

Keaira BRONZE said...
on Oct. 8 2009 at 4:36 pm
Keaira BRONZE, Edmond, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
In a world of CooCoo Puffs, dare to be a Fruity Pebble.

Interesting. in a good way

Sabryth GOLD said...
on Sep. 17 2009 at 10:17 am
Sabryth GOLD, Lawrence, Kansas
18 articles 1 photo 25 comments
ooh, the other side of the story. i like it!




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