May 15, 2008
Cinderella was usually a very sweet, innocent girl. She always loved being so nice, perfect, and mannerly. But one day she hit a mean streak that seemed as if it would never end. She was cleaning her kitchen when one of her nice step sisters came into the room. She wanted to help Cinderella make lunch for the 12 guest they would be serving, and that’s when Cinderella’s mean streaks start.

Cinderella went off the deep end. She yelled, scratched, fussed and fought, then she begin to yell “I CAN DO IT ON MY OWN, I DON’T NEED YOUR HELP!” by the time Cinderella got done with here step sister, Anastasia, she was crying her eyes out. Anastasia figured that Cinderella had been under some pressure, and had took it out on her, and that she would apologize, but she was wrong. Instead she called Anastasia a whiney baby, and told her to stop crying.

Cinderella next victim was her other nice step sister, Drusilla. Drusilla heard some yelling coming from the kitchen, she went to check on Cinderella and Anastasia to make sure everything was alright. When she got to the kitchen what she saw startled her. Anastasia was in the corner with her face red and eyes bloodshot. Anastasia was begging for Cinderella to stop yelling. Drusilla asked Cinderella what she was doing, but she did not give an answer. Instead what she got was Cinderella yelling at her to “mind her own business”. Cinderella got so mad that her mother had to ask them to stop 10 times, then had to pull Cinderella off of them and locked her in her room.

Somehow Cinderella got out of her room and started a food fight at lunch with the 12 guest that were over for lunch. Her mother, Cassandra, was usually a very, calm person. But she got so mad at Cinderella she grounded her until she deiced that she was un-grounded.

When her grounding was over, she and her mother fought constantly. Although she and her mother fought constantly, her sisters no longer talked to Cinderella. They were afraid that she would hurt them. One day Cinderella got so mad at her mother she ran away. She took her horse and settled down in another place. She Decided to live there the rest of her life. She thought it was just as good or better than her home town. Then her mother heard of where she was and had to drag her home.

Although it seems as if Cinderella would have learned her lesson, she didn’t. Again and again she fought with her mother until her mother could no longer take it. She wouldn’t do anything her mother asked her too. She wouldn’t clean her room, wash the dishes, do her chores, or even ride her horse to the local shop to get some flour. Her mom decided to send her to her uncle’s house. Cinderella’s uncle was a very strict man, he never took no for an answer. Cinderella’s mom knew that was just what she needed.

When Cinderella got back from her uncle’s house 5 week’s later, it was as if she was a different child. To Cinderella’s surprise she wasn’t the only on to change. Her mother and step sisters had turned very mean because of Cinderella torturing them. Instead of Cinderella torturing them, they were torturing her.

Cinderella was forever known as the mistreated girl, but that’s a whole other story.

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Artistic_Geek_Roo_10This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 17 at 6:37 pm
This was pretty good, I just think that you could have included more details about why Cinderella had a mean streak and what happened at the uncle's house to turn her nice again and why her family turned so vicious when she was gone. It has lots of potential though!
karleyholleman said...
Apr. 17 at 10:01 am
Very creative twist on the real story. Nice Job!
annacook said...
Nov. 6, 2015 at 9:07 am
Cinderella is one of my favorite movies as a kid. As I read your fan fiction I get confused cause you put a lot of twist in the story but I really like the way they are. I liked the part where you say “, she and her mother fought constantly”. Because she never fought for her self in the movie.
W4TRWMan said...
Oct. 1, 2014 at 8:58 am
Guest is plural in the first paragraph!!!
Pieric123456789 replied...
Oct. 1, 2014 at 8:59 am
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Oct. 1, 2014 at 9:00 am
Healing_Angel This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 27, 2011 at 9:07 pm
This needs work, but it's a good plot. 
Aamna said...
Jun. 5, 2011 at 3:50 pm
I love the idea of this being Cinderella's 'back ground' story. Its very creative. Check out my story called the precarious pursuit
DinoNugget said...
May 14, 2011 at 6:28 pm
The story had a good plot, but it lacked details like feelings, dialogue, etc.  It all felt kinda rushed.  Other than that, it was a good start.  Write on!
Alia_Tan said...
Jan. 24, 2011 at 6:15 pm
nice job :) it was a nice additon to the original story! Plz rate and comment on mine! thanks!  its called gregor the overlander epilogue chapter one. Again nice job and keep it up!
DaydreamBeliever This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 2, 2011 at 10:46 pm
  I agree, it needs way more detail and description. it has potential, though :)
LastChapter said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 7:23 pm
good. but you could deff make it better with more detail. it was cute, but it left me a little empty handed. maybe do more with it? aaaaanywho, nice job.
missca1229 said...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 7:05 am
I loike the twits, Awesome!~
Waterlogged said...
Feb. 28, 2010 at 10:08 am
It was a very good idea, but I would add some more description. It would also be better if you had fewer grammatical errors.
Underhill replied...
Dec. 11, 2010 at 4:13 pm
I agree.  It's a fun satirical idea that I find bitter truth in.  It just needs editing and detail.
Torianne said...
Dec. 2, 2009 at 1:39 pm
very nice. the "before" story. that's very interesting. i wouldn't have thought of that. 5 stars!
Aitana L. said...
Oct. 19, 2009 at 3:38 pm
I love the way you emphasise how it was never the step-mother's ar step-sister's fault. it really grabed my attention
Fryee said...
Oct. 11, 2009 at 10:34 am
What I liked about this peice was that you showed the readers the otherside of the common Cinderella story and made it seem as though Cinderella was the one who turned her stepsisters and her stepmother around. In the beginning, however I was confused because of a few grammatical errors such as, "Cinderella got done with here step sister" I did not know what that meant. You did though really grab my attention by turning the story of kind, innocent Cinderella around to mean, guilty Ci... (more »)
Keairakash said...
Oct. 8, 2009 at 4:36 pm
Interesting. in a good way
StarSister7 said...
Sept. 17, 2009 at 10:17 am
ooh, the other side of the story. i like it!
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