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A Written Silhouette

September 1, 2010
By Alexis Jones BRONZE, Houston, Texas
Alexis Jones BRONZE, Houston, Texas
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She has never been called captivating or fascinating. She does not always feel beautiful. Her brown eyes are sheltered by long lashes. Her brown hair slowly inches its way down her long back. She wears make-up daily to enhance the features she cannot see. She wears clothes that cover her flaws. She has an average frame that can withstand cruel remarks.

She can take criticism but is not fully confident. She sometimes even cries for no reason at all. She laughs as things that aren’t funny. She likes to have fun and do crazy things. She likes to try new restaurants and attempt to use chopsticks. She loves to go to church and quietly pray on her knees. She loves to sing when she is alone and loves to dance when no one is watching.

Her dream is to become a geriatric nurse and help the generation that made hers. She wants to take a random vacation and discover new land. She has no desire to become the first lady or to change things she can’t. She wants to save a life. She wants to be looked up to. She wants to swim with the whales and talk to the lonely kid at the lunch table. She wants to learn a new language and hug a stranger.

After all the obstacles in her life, she can confidently tackle a new chapter in her story. After attending a funeral she can appreciate life. After being in a room full of strangers, she can step outside her comfort zone. After getting a job she can cherish the cost of possessions. After writing essays and doing lots of homework in high school, she can now take on college. Her name is Alexis Elizabeth.

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This article has 16 comments.

Sonza SILVER said...
on Oct. 26 2012 at 3:16 am
Sonza SILVER, Bhubaneswar, Other
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Favorite Quote:
An apple a day, if well aimed, keeps the doctor away. - P. G. Wodehouse

really nice, alexis!!  

TayTay96 GOLD said...
on Oct. 4 2012 at 5:41 pm
TayTay96 GOLD, Lancaster, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes wrong is worth the funny"
-Billy Gardell

I love how you wrote in third person about yourself. I just had to write an essay like this for my English class last week and yours is better than mine :P I'm better at writing in first person

on May. 25 2012 at 9:00 pm
_ella_herondale BRONZE, San Diego, California
4 articles 2 photos 222 comments

Favorite Quote:
"...If the Thames that ran beside them...recalled a night where the moon shone as brightly as a shilling on the same boy and girl... and thought to themselves, 'at last, the wheel comes full circle,' they kept their silence."

Awesome story! I especially love the title you chose(:

on May. 25 2012 at 3:14 pm
i_am_so_very_large_and_towering SILVER, Mililani, Hawaii
5 articles 1 photo 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yet what is any ocean but a multitude of drops?"

you did such a great job with this piece:) loved it!!!

on May. 3 2012 at 8:46 pm
billgamesh11 BRONZE, Grafton, Massachusetts
3 articles 0 photos 278 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's always darkest before the dawn." ~Florence and the Machine

Wow! This is really good! Plus, this sounds a lot like me :)

on May. 3 2012 at 8:40 am
DarkIsThyThought BRONZE, Shishpipkabibble, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I think I know enough of hate- to say that for destruction ice- is also great- and would suffice.

I know nothing about what college essays are about or what they are for. However, this is a really good one. The third person makes it read like a spontaneous story, and I like you're attitude. It is not depressed, but strong.

Fia-fia BRONZE said...
on Mar. 19 2012 at 9:30 pm
Fia-fia BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
4 articles 1 photo 157 comments

THis is really really good and creative!!! Thank you soooooo much! I really like how you look and analzye the character! Esp in teh third person! THank you and keep up the good work!!!


BrianaK BRONZE said...
on Mar. 19 2012 at 2:31 pm
BrianaK BRONZE, Waterford, Wisconsin
1 article 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Keep Believing"

I really liked the third person. It was good and on a scale 1-10, I would give you a 10. Fantastic Job!

Elizabeth said...
on Mar. 17 2012 at 6:28 pm
No, Her name is Elizabeth, this story is like written about me haha. I like it!

irishlass317 said...
on Mar. 17 2012 at 5:52 pm
irishlass317, Jefferson City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"I asked Jesus 'How much do you love me?' He answered 'This much.' And He streched out His arms and died."

Oh my goodness this is amazing!!!!! :D Great job!! I can totally relate!!!!!!!

on Mar. 17 2012 at 12:36 pm
Sophia_Cornwall BRONZE, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I cannot change the outcome...let me change the world."

This is fabulous!  I love the way it reads smoothly yet seems to delve so deeply into personality.  Very unique, and a treat to read!

firecleansed said...
on Feb. 23 2012 at 11:03 am
firecleansed, West Jordan, Utah
0 articles 1 photo 60 comments
The third person use is great. The warm usage of words makes it read like a story not an essay

eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 20 2011 at 7:57 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
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I love the idea of using third person. Very unusual, especially because college essays are personal.

on Jun. 7 2011 at 11:25 pm
cdmswimmer9 GOLD, Costa Mesa, California
17 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Faith is taking the first step when you can't see the whole staircase." -MLK Jr.

I loveee how you wrote it so differently than the average essay. Really cool idea!

berryxd said...
on Nov. 1 2010 at 5:33 pm
i liked this alot and i wonder it its ok if i take your idea and lay out my essay as you did

anonymous said...
on Sep. 27 2010 at 7:33 pm
A very captivating essay.