You & Me

October 8, 2009
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I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.

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Johaa said...
Mar. 5, 2010 at 4:35 pm
Really good! I loved it.
I know exactly what you mean.
this has happened to me more than once!
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 12:16 pm
Ya sadly it happens too often...
Saidah. said...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 3:12 pm
Omg, this poem is really niceee,
I really enjoyed readinqq it.
You shud check outt some of mhy pieaces,
Hopee you injoy them.??
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 12:15 pm
Thank u thank u:):)
Yes ofcoarse i"ll def check out ur stuff!
Wolfayne said...
Mar. 3, 2010 at 12:01 pm
It makes a good poem, I admit. However, It isn't exactly a true sonnet.
Sonnets have 4 stanzas, the first 3 of which have 4 lines each, and the 4th of which has only 2 lines. it goes in the abab,cdcd, efef, gg rhyme sceme. AND each line is supposed to have 10 syllables.
I'm not saying it isn't good, just that it's not exactly a sonnet.
Please look at my poetry and story! Thanx! ;D
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 2:08 pm
Thanx ya everyone keeps tellin me it's not a sonnet but there rly isn't anything i can do about it atleast u think its good lol =P
bmmskh said...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 10:34 am
i like this poem alot and i proble could never right one as good as this one so keep righting.......
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 2:07 pm
Thanx:) I'm sure u could n prolly alrdy have:)
bbg.101 said...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 3:08 pm
wow i like this alot, i can relate to every single word on this page i love this i can see this in books. good job i can defanetly rate this a 10000000000MAX
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 2:06 pm
Oh wow thank you sooo much:) that's such a compliment! I hope to see it in a book one day:)
11fresemily said...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 12:20 pm
I Love this soo much <3 its so very true.
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:08 pm
Thank you vry much:D
babigerl1194 said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 7:59 pm
this is amzing i get it. it remeinds me of likin a guy and ahving a connectiion then seeing him again and nott.
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:06 pm
Wow I never thought of this poem that way but i guess that works too:) thanx for ur comment:))
noelleism said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 8:09 am
This has happened to me befofe but not a break up. Never had one of those. I like your poem alot but I'm not so sure it's a sonnet , there supposed to have 14 lines you have 8. but it is a lovely poem. :)
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:05 pm
this poem rly is about a friendship not a bf/gf relationship...I'm glad u enjoyed it:) Thanx
xLpoet said...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 4:25 pm
This is very beautiful! I can relate. I love the flow of it-it doesn't sound forced at all.
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:03 pm
Thank you so much! This poem is prolly one of my favs because it rly wasn't forced at all it came to me vry naturally :)
booboo360 said...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:33 pm
omg i luv ur poems!!!!!! they are so great . i feel like ......... i feel like i no u. ur so great. i relate so much to this poem i am 14 so im going through the break-up stages and this is my new fav
bluemagnet22 replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 1:07 pm
Awe thank u:)
It thrills me to kno u can relate to the poem:)
I'll check out ur work once u submit some;)
hollyhottell replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 7:40 pm
thx. ive submitted tons of poetry
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