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I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.



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bbg.101 said...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 3:08 pm
wow i like this alot, i can relate to every single word on this page i love this i can see this in books. good job i can defanetly rate this a 10000000000MAX
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 2:06 pm
Oh wow thank you sooo much:) that's such a compliment! I hope to see it in a book one day:)
 
11fresemily said...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 12:20 pm
I Love this soo much <3 its so very true.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:08 pm
Thank you vry much:D
 
babigerl1194 said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 7:59 pm
this is amzing i get it. it remeinds me of likin a guy and ahving a connectiion then seeing him again and nott.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:06 pm
Wow I never thought of this poem that way but i guess that works too:) thanx for ur comment:))
 
noelleism said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 8:09 am
This has happened to me befofe but not a break up. Never had one of those. I like your poem alot but I'm not so sure it's a sonnet , there supposed to have 14 lines you have 8. but it is a lovely poem. :)
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:05 pm
this poem rly is about a friendship not a bf/gf relationship...I'm glad u enjoyed it:) Thanx
 
xLpoet said...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 4:25 pm
This is very beautiful! I can relate. I love the flow of it-it doesn't sound forced at all.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:03 pm
Thank you so much! This poem is prolly one of my favs because it rly wasn't forced at all it came to me vry naturally :)
 
booboo360 said...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:33 pm
omg i luv ur poems!!!!!! they are so great . i feel like ......... i feel like i no u. ur so great. i relate so much to this poem i am 14 so im going through the break-up stages and this is my new fav
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 1:07 pm
Awe thank u:)
It thrills me to kno u can relate to the poem:)
I'll check out ur work once u submit some;)
 
hollyhottell replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 7:40 pm
thx. ive submitted tons of poetry
 
hollyhottell said...
Feb. 17, 2010 at 10:56 am
i really liked this...it was really good. i loved the story it told... you can kinda relate it to summer love...i loved it. u should see if you like my stuff
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 1:06 pm
Thank u:) I love feedback n expesially wen it's good feedback n ofcoarse i"ll def check out ur work;)
 
CheyCheyLLama said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 8:52 am
This piece, I can really relate to. I love it(:
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 1:05 pm
Thanx I'm glad ;D
 
Emokittiy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 10, 2010 at 3:23 pm
wow this is a great poem. it has happened to me quite a few times. you can relate very well to this. you are an excellent writer
 
tenwords replied...
Feb. 12, 2010 at 10:04 pm
Wow! I love this! It's simplicity makes it so beautiful. This is definitely a 5 out of 5. Please stop by and check out my work. I would highly appreciate it. Thanks and thanks again for this amazing poem! Keep writing! I'd love to hear more by you.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 1:04 pm
Wow thank you :) what a comliment
I'll def check out some of ur work when I have the chance:) n thank u again!
 
VampChick49 replied...
Apr. 1, 2010 at 10:59 am
OMG I love it.
 
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