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You & Me

October 8, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.


The author's comments:
Isn't it so sad when you see an old friend and their whole personality and outlook on life has changed...and not for the good. Well that's what inspired me for this poem...I hope you enjoyed it

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on Aug. 2 2014 at 3:02 pm
OzymandiasAengus PLATINUM, Bronx, New York
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OK, as an actual answer (There are a lot of restrictions on a true sonnet so this is gonna be a little long.)
  Each line of a sonnet has five (penta) units, each of which is an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable (an iamb). 
There are 14 of these lines, 3 "groups of 4" (quatrains), where the 1st & 3rd as well as the 2nd & 4th lines rhyme. Then, at the end is a rhyming couplet, which usually sums up the poem.  Make sense?

on Jun. 19 2014 at 6:21 pm
Westiera SILVER, Wasilla, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream. - Edgar Allan Poe

An elizabethan sonnet actually contains 14 lines with 3 quatrains and one couplet each line must have 10 syllables making it have an iambic pentameter

on Jun. 9 2014 at 4:20 pm
mylifeasapincushion GOLD, Redlands, California
14 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Extremist have shown what frightens them most: A girl with a book"
-Malala Yousafzai

A four stanza, sixteen line poem consisting of the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg

on May. 23 2014 at 6:03 am
HermioneHainsworth PLATINUM, Leeds, Other
23 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There's always another book to read, and if not, write one."-me ;)

Amazing.. thats all I can say!

kayla will said...
on May. 19 2014 at 9:48 pm
It's a sonnet... and it's supose to be fourteen lines. That's what a sonnet is. :)  ...I love them!

kayla will said...
on May. 19 2014 at 9:46 pm
A sonnet is a 14 lined poem... it's a literary device that poets use and is my favorite type of poems to write, it's almost all that I do write. I love reading them even more for even greater ideas!!

seriously said...
on May. 4 2014 at 9:22 pm
Will someone please tell me what a sonnet is?

on Mar. 30 2014 at 9:09 pm
Laugh_Live_Write BRONZE, Mukilteo, Washington
4 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All our dreams can come true, if only we have the courage to pursue them." -Walt Disney

This is a great poem! Short, sweet, and relatable.

on Feb. 27 2014 at 8:20 pm
thedakota127 BRONZE, Davisburg, Michigan
2 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes its right to do the wrong thing." -Dr. Jeffery Squires

Try making it longer. It's good so far though :)

on Feb. 17 2014 at 10:26 am
micshea99 PLATINUM, Matthews, North Carolina
47 articles 0 photos 72 comments
Great poem! Try working on keeping around the same number of syllbales in each rhyming line to give it a more constant rythem!

on Jan. 25 2014 at 10:54 am
Ms.Grossi PLATINUM, Malden, Massachusetts
25 articles 2 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I wasn't an actor, I would have been a secret agent." - Thornton Wilder

@xG4RY, I agree. It's a great poem, but I wouldn't call it a sonnet. 

on Jan. 12 2014 at 9:43 am
LittleMissFire BRONZE, Saint Catharine, Missouri
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Your poems very relatable. I like it a lot  

Terry_A BRONZE said...
on Oct. 30 2013 at 12:28 pm
Terry_A BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
"who you choose to be around you, let's you know who you are."

I feel like I can relate to this since I saw an old friend a few days ago. They were really different from what I remember them as. Overall, great poem!

Buurrry said...
on Oct. 30 2013 at 12:21 pm
Buurrry, Las Vegas, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
Time is a slut. She screws everybody. - John Green, The Fault in our Stars

The poem is very relatable. You convey the disapointment of seeing someone change with out you very well. I enjoyed this poem.

Annneee BRONZE said...
on Oct. 18 2013 at 12:24 pm
Annneee BRONZE, Mandeville, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Life isn't about finding yourself. Life is about creating yourself."
George Bernard Shaw

I love this poem so much. I loved the theme of fall incorporated into this. Also, I can most definitely relate to how people change, and not for the better. Great poem overall.

Razzy said...
on Oct. 17 2013 at 8:41 pm
Razzy, Somewhere, California
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Favorite Quote:
"What great thing would you attempt if you knew you could not fail?" ~Robert H. Schuller

Really great poem! ^_^ I love it!

xG4RY GOLD said...
on Oct. 17 2013 at 7:01 pm
xG4RY GOLD, East Falmouth, Massachusetts
19 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The shorter it is, the more well said it is."

Why did you call this a sonnet? What type is it? It is written in Iambic Pentameter, tretrameter, monometer, ect? Did you even pick A Iamb, trochee, dactyl or anapest to start from? The rhyme scheme doesn't even really match a form of any sonnet.

on Oct. 15 2013 at 4:49 pm
DreamWeaver BRONZE, Coarsegold, California
3 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Writing is nothing more than a guided dream.
Jorge Luis Borges

I've been looking for a poem that described how I felt on this subject. Couldn't find a good one until this one! It's beautiful. 

Merla said...
on Sep. 11 2013 at 9:55 am
Merla, Reykjavík, Other
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I liked this poem. It was simple and beautiful. I liked the flow, the spaces, the feeling. Good work.  

on Jul. 31 2013 at 12:24 pm
catwithglasses SILVER, Sewickley, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm selfish, impatient, and a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control and at times hard to handle. But if you can't handle me at my worst, then you don't deserve me at my best."
-Marilyn Monroe

I'm not able to relate to this, but your poem is very well written. I can picture it.


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