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You & Me

October 8, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.


The author's comments:
Isn't it so sad when you see an old friend and their whole personality and outlook on life has changed...and not for the good. Well that's what inspired me for this poem...I hope you enjoyed it

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AMAWHI said...
on May. 21 2012 at 10:37 am
This poem is so beautiful. You use good metaphors with a golden heart. You are definitely an amazing poem writer. Definitely keep writing.

on May. 18 2012 at 11:39 am
Nicole67 PLATINUM, Indianola, Washington
25 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Someday, someone will walk into your life and make you realize why it never worked out with anyone else."
"we often put up walls not to keep people out, but to see who cares to get through"
“Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind.”

I have already commented on this before but i love it so much haha. I can relate to it a lot because i used to have a friend and he changed but i never did.

stephan95 said...
on May. 18 2012 at 9:13 am

i felt the same way too about my so called _best friend_ this...

i totally get what u r going through

+great poem


on May. 17 2012 at 6:14 am
QueenOfMars GOLD, Mumbai, Texas
13 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep,
But I have promises to keep.
And miles to go before I sleep
And miles to go before I sleep"

I've felt the same way about my so-called best friend. I can connect to each line in your poem... Absolutely good. 

on May. 16 2012 at 7:32 am
AmieeHope-Sierra GOLD, Royston, Georgia
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments

Favorite Quote:
And There Will Come A Time, You'll See, With No More Tears. And Love Will Not Break Your Heart, But Dismiss Your Fears.

I love this poem so much i'm gonna tattoo this on my wrist for sure.

on May. 16 2012 at 7:16 am
mindless_dreaming BRONZE, Wyckoff, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"May make my heart as a millstone, set my face as a flint, Cheat and be cheated, and die: who knows? We are ashes and we are dust." -Alfred, Lord Tennyson, 'Maud'

This is extraordinary, it touched me. 

TTTeeSS GOLD said...
on May. 16 2012 at 7:12 am
TTTeeSS GOLD, La Porte, Colorado
17 articles 6 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is no such thing as nothing, yet there is such thing as nothing, simply because there is nothing such as nothing.

This is really amazing. It touched me.

Special Me said...
on May. 1 2012 at 12:49 pm
I think it was a great poem. You used a great simile comparing how he changed to how the leaves fall off a tree. Also I could hear the Rhythm of the poem. It was a great poem.

erin m said...
on Apr. 30 2012 at 8:11 am

I liked this poem because it had good rhythm and flowed well.

I also liked it because it had personification


on Apr. 28 2012 at 7:02 am
MiaUnwritten GOLD, West Palm Beach, Florida
11 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Let the eyes seek what the mind cannot
Let the eyes judge what the mind cannot
Let the eyes believe what the mind failed to"

Somehow I feel this piece was written for me. I so can relate, I mean really relate to what you wrote. So true too, I love it.

on Apr. 27 2012 at 8:35 pm
MusicRox1310 BRONZE, St. Charles, Missouri
1 article 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It aint over 'till it's over" -Yogi Berra
"Don't Blink. Blink, and you're dead" -Dr. Who

This is such a truthful poem.  You conveyed your idea well and I can relate to this so much! Awesome job! This is going to my favorites!

on Apr. 27 2012 at 7:38 pm
LordOfTheStrings PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
21 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Believe deep down in your heart that you are destined to do great things because you don't succeed by "It is what it is", you succeed by "It is what you make it".

I can really relate to this. I really hate when that happens, especially when it's happening right before your eyes and you can't do anything to stop it.

demos SILVER said...
on Apr. 25 2012 at 7:49 am
demos SILVER, Central Square, New York
6 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"real is what you are when you let your actions discribe you"
me

most truthful poem ive seen inna min

on Apr. 2 2012 at 10:42 pm
HouseofYork GOLD, Powhatan, Virginia
12 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"...Time and Chance happened to them all." Ecc 9:11

Very well doneand easily relateable, good work

on Apr. 2 2012 at 6:41 pm
Gypsyroses SILVER, Lower Merion, Pennsylvania
7 articles 2 photos 17 comments
I can relate to this poem so much. One of my best friends has changed so much, I don't even think we relate anymore. 

on Mar. 22 2012 at 9:38 am
Jaycee92 PLATINUM, Lincoln, Nebraska
27 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Expect the Unexpected"

Great poem!

Kianie GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 1:57 pm
Kianie GOLD, Westphalia, Kansas
10 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are the music as the music lasts" - Stevie Wonder

I dislike it when my friends change for the worse. ]: Totally relatable sonnet! Nice job!

on Feb. 7 2012 at 7:31 pm
nauset.johnson BRONZE, Brewster, Massachusetts
1 article 0 photos 1 comment
Whats good about this poem is that it will always be true, like much of Shakespeare's work. Although like his, it's not in Shakespearean Sonnet form, or any other form I am aware of. With that said, I think this poem is great and the rhyming that it does have is perfect. Personally, I am not a fan of poems that every line rhymes somewhere; I like ones where there is a little rhyme here and there, giving it a definite song sense. Overalll, a job well done.

TrishhG BRONZE said...
on Feb. 4 2012 at 12:55 pm
TrishhG BRONZE, Vaughan, Other
3 articles 0 photos 1 comment
This poem was really good and I feel relevant as well. I really do feel as if it describes my relationship with some people. Really Good :)

DaiDaii said...
on Jan. 27 2012 at 11:07 pm
DaiDaii, New Rochelle, New York
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
Elizabeth Bishop

'It took me fifteen years to discover I had no talent for writing, but I couldn't give it up because by that time I was too famous.'

Hey, This is really good this is my first time on the site and I already see awesome things you have a talent!! Cherish it


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