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I sit with my feet up on the dashboard,
music bursting from the speakers in rhythmic little puffs,
windows rolled down just enough so I can dangle my left hand over the edge.

I can faintly hear the wind pecking at the cracks on the door,
sending the puddles of water on the ground into frantic ripples
and propelling crackled autumn leaves onto my car windshield.

I close my eyes and listen to the storm battering around me,
enjoying the balmy sensation of the car vents breathing hot air,
warming my skin despite the bitter cold outside.

For once I have nowhere to be, no deadlines to meet, no class to rush to,
and so I stay here just a little while longer while the world races on around me.

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iLuv2run said...
Dec. 29, 2010 at 9:34 pm:
i really luv that feeling- wish id feel it more often...
 
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zhlenThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 29, 2010 at 12:15 pm:

i wish id feel that way

sigh...

 
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OdysseusMakarov said...
Dec. 7, 2010 at 7:55 pm:
To me, at least, a good poem is really hard to pull off. I even only impress myself around 1/4 of the time. Making a good free verse poem is an art even farther in the realm of the rare, but this definitely has resonance that's tough to beat.
 
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Hazel-daisy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 7, 2010 at 12:46 pm:
this is really excellent, i love the way its so descriptive and when life is stressful, this poem reminds you that there is always an end to a bad situation!! 
 
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Brittney K. said...
Dec. 7, 2010 at 8:08 am:
i love how this artical has so much decription bout how you feel. that is cool u don't exactly know wht goin on until the end
 
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rosei said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 8:37 pm:
got enough time to read another coment? (: that was a really good poem. it did give off a free breeze(: nice job
 
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twizzlesinger said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 8:08 pm:
I LOVE the ending! This is without a doubt, spectacular!
 
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MisteriousAngel said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 6:42 pm:
this is a great poem. and i love being in the car with music playing. it feels like your away from reality. its so calming. great job ;D
 
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misstywaterfall said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 11:33 am:
i really like this peom! :)
 
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MeanPeopleDead said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 9:53 am:
this is rock solid- APLUS
 
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powertree This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 9:21 am:
Great imagery.
 
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D_Beauty said...
Nov. 12, 2010 at 8:59 am:
Wow, this poem would go number one on my list!! I love it! It's quiet but it speaks loudly. I wish my life could paused and enjoy a moment like this. Keep up the good work! =)
 
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EDAWG said...
Oct. 24, 2010 at 11:40 pm:
This poem is so peaceful while at the same time, it mentions the aggressive weather. OUTSTANDING CONTRAST!!!!!!!! Best poem I've read in a long time.
 
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kaileyedelman said...
Oct. 24, 2010 at 7:34 pm:
amazing. i especially love the last few sentences!!
 
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hello said...
Oct. 24, 2010 at 3:25 pm:
how do you vote?
 
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XiniaAngelita said...
Oct. 24, 2010 at 12:12 am:
A unique style with great wording!!! It makes me want to go for a ride in the car.... :P :)
 
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Chacharoo said...
Oct. 2, 2010 at 10:34 pm:
HUZZAH FOR YOU DUDE, you're making us Texans proud! Keep it up, this is awesome!
 
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GuitarGirl92851 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 2, 2010 at 10:04 pm:
Amazing.  This poem makes my heart happy.
 
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hkelsey1 said...
Oct. 2, 2010 at 7:13 pm:
Wow this makes me feel really relaxed. Great job. I like all of the in depth description.
 
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sshortcake963 said...
Oct. 2, 2010 at 12:38 pm:
that is really great work be PROUD!!
 
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