Time Takes a Breath MAG

February 27, 2009
By Keegan Watters SILVER, Dallas, Texas
Keegan Watters SILVER, Dallas, Texas
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I sit with my feet up on the dashboard,
music bursting from the speakers in rhythmic little puffs,
windows rolled down just enough so I can dangle my left hand over the edge.

I can faintly hear the wind pecking at the cracks on the door,
sending the puddles of water on the ground into frantic ripples
and propelling crackled autumn leaves onto my car windshield.

I close my eyes and listen to the storm battering around me,
enjoying the balmy sensation of the car vents breathing hot air,
warming my skin despite the bitter cold outside.

For once I have nowhere to be, no deadlines to meet, no class to rush to,
and so I stay here just a little while longer while the world races on around me.



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on Apr. 18 2011 at 10:24 pm
Tally223 BRONZE, Richfield, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
\"The secret in life is to fall down seven times and get up eight.\"

This is extremely good. Excellent word choice. Keep writing. (:

on Apr. 18 2011 at 4:16 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Totally agree with you heather_marie, this poem has tons of great words. I loved how it painted a perfect image in my head. Wish I could take a drive like that. Btw, if you have time, please check out and comment on my poems The Girl Inside, You Are The Lyrics In Me, and Remembering Spring. Thanks so much! 8)

on Apr. 18 2011 at 10:49 am
heather_marie PLATINUM, Deshler, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
\\\"Meeting you was fate, becoming your friend was a choice, but falling in love with you was beyond my control

your writing is so detailed and i just love to words you chose good job!

on Mar. 27 2011 at 6:40 pm
aubs126 PLATINUM, Charlton, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"We are not now that strength which in old days
Moved earth and heaven, that which we are, we are---
One equal temper of heroic hearts,
Made weak by time and fate, but strong in will
To strive, to seek, to find, and not to yield. "

Tennyson

I really liked this!! I could feel the emotion in the peice. Great job! keep writing.

on Mar. 27 2011 at 5:42 pm
UselessItalian GOLD, Kewaskum, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"'PASTA!!!'"~Italy, Hetalia

Thats weird.. The pic is really strange. But I love the poem, very descriptive.

secrets said...
on Mar. 27 2011 at 9:43 am
I wish i had more of that feelin in my life right now!!!!!!!! great poem

Carly14 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 5 2011 at 9:13 pm
Carly14 BRONZE, Oklahoma
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I agree, the imagery was  my favirite part.

on Mar. 5 2011 at 6:40 pm
thinkofsomethingbetter GOLD, Tallmadge, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
in short, being vegen just makes you better then everyone else.
- scott pilgrim vs the world. best movie ever!

compleatly relateable!! i love it!!!!

on Mar. 5 2011 at 4:34 pm
destined_for_fame BRONZE, Privet Drive, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Shoot for the moon, because even if you miss you'll land among the stars."

I don't think you can choose pictures. I didn't for my story, but it has one anyway.

on Mar. 5 2011 at 10:13 am
to.hold.the.sun SILVER, Maryville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"You spend your whole life stuck in the labyrinth, thinking about how you'll escape it one day, and how awesome it will be, and imagining that future keeps you going, but you never do it. You just use the future to escape the present." -John Green

That has to be the best feeling in the world. I wish I had more of that lately :) But you conveyed it perfectly. Keep up the good work!

on Mar. 5 2011 at 12:01 am
Maracuja BRONZE, Vancouver, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"The most wasted day, is that in which you have no laughed."

Super relaxing :)

Could you possibly help me by giving me feedback? It's cool if not :)


abbymac said...
on Feb. 25 2011 at 8:15 am
abbymac, Easley, South Carolina
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Simply stated I like this. I like the easiness of understanding the message. Great job.

on Feb. 11 2011 at 11:23 pm
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND, Parker, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"If you don't leap you'lll never know what it's like to fly"

wow! this was so descriptive that i felt like i was there and i gelt relaxed from reading this!!! great job!!! :)

MezzyMesmer said...
on Feb. 11 2011 at 5:58 pm
MezzyMesmer, Atlanta, Georgia
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Your writing? Superb. The picture you chose? Dislike.

on Jan. 20 2011 at 6:54 pm
CoOKiEz83 BRONZE, Apopka, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Live life as if you would die tomorrow.

i like it, deffinetly keep writing

on Jan. 20 2011 at 2:42 pm
lucybrown SILVER, Blacksburg, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
The wastebasket is a writer's best friend. ~Isaac Bashevis Singer

First things first, but not necessarily in that order. ~ From Doctor Who

I like it; the imagery is excellent, and I love the words you use!  Keep writing!

hellogirl GOLD said...
on Jan. 20 2011 at 12:05 pm
hellogirl GOLD, La Habra, California
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love your poem it feels so timeless and good read my poems please i would appreciate it even if you only read one that would be great and tell me what you think.

on Jan. 20 2011 at 12:17 am
TheMesserSandman, West Chester, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"If my answers frighten you, then you should cease asking scary questions."

What can I say, I like it.

on Jan. 19 2011 at 7:21 am
shannannonnn BRONZE, Little Egg Harbor, New Jersey
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times like that only last so long, then were thrown back into that race, that life. :(

on Jan. 2 2011 at 8:57 pm
Clarebear101 PLATINUM, Bellbrook, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Nothing we can do can change the past, everything we do can change the future"
"raindrops are like fairy whispers"
"life is not about finding yourself it is about creating yourself"

very impressive!! i love the feeling it had in it!


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