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I sit with my feet up on the dashboard,
music bursting from the speakers in rhythmic little puffs,
windows rolled down just enough so I can dangle my left hand over the edge.

I can faintly hear the wind pecking at the cracks on the door,
sending the puddles of water on the ground into frantic ripples
and propelling crackled autumn leaves onto my car windshield.

I close my eyes and listen to the storm battering around me,
enjoying the balmy sensation of the car vents breathing hot air,
warming my skin despite the bitter cold outside.

For once I have nowhere to be, no deadlines to meet, no class to rush to,
and so I stay here just a little while longer while the world races on around me.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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passion.fable14 said...
Oct. 2, 2010 at 11:03 am
Wow that was awesome. :) Love the mood it sets for me. That was really neat.
 
CammyLashay said...
Oct. 2, 2010 at 8:43 am
Enjoyed the poem kind of remind me of myself
 
Gothgirl said...
Sept. 23, 2010 at 9:57 am
I really enjoyed reading this one out of all of the otheres I have read. It has great meaning to it from the way this person talks about the world racing around him as he sits still.
 
annexgrey This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 10, 2010 at 6:48 am

This is great! 

I love the words you chose to use and the way you set up the poem :)

 
winy.coronadoo said...
Aug. 19, 2010 at 11:07 pm
I love this! I can totally relate to thses feelings! Keep writing :)
 
olican16 said...
Aug. 19, 2010 at 2:05 pm
this has sooo much detail love it!!
 
Shminkanator5000 said...
Aug. 19, 2010 at 9:19 am
wow you have a knack for great description! I felt like I was there! nice piece, read some of mine if you get a sec? Thanks =)
 
Austy said...
Aug. 19, 2010 at 2:17 am
I loved how humanly it is. The line about how you can hear the wind through the cracks of the door was spectacular
 
Marlyre This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 16, 2010 at 6:42 pm
what i would give for such a moment, great snapshot! read some of mine?
 
BSW13 said...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 7:44 pm
that is really well written!! great job!! you really feel like you were there.
 
silent_reader said...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 5:04 pm
i loved it!
 
poetry_addict said...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 1:16 pm
Really good. Keep writing!
 
Write139 said...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 12:51 am
This is very well developed!
 
KristaCarlynn said...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 12:32 am
i can see how this peice got top rank. i have a question tho, how long does it take 4 peices 2 be approved?
 
Teardrops replied...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 4:40 pm
About 27 days not that i was counting. I agree with you about this poem please post comments and rate my work
 
ViaThePurpleCrayon said...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 12:04 am
Fanstastically written, abite not being my type. Great job!
 
lovetowriteandwatchTV said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 8:44 pm
good job, detail excellent, all around good
 
Hippiechick10 said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 3:55 pm

Great work! Loved your description.

 

 
zobo929 said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 2:23 pm
ya me 2 it wasnt my type
 
zobo929 said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 2:22 pm
good poem i could picture it in my mind and i can totally relate
 
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