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Time Takes a Breath MAG

February 27, 2009
By Keegan Watters SILVER, Dallas, Texas
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I sit with my feet up on the dashboard,
music bursting from the speakers in rhythmic little puffs,
windows rolled down just enough so I can dangle my left hand over the edge.

I can faintly hear the wind pecking at the cracks on the door,
sending the puddles of water on the ground into frantic ripples
and propelling crackled autumn leaves onto my car windshield.

I close my eyes and listen to the storm battering around me,
enjoying the balmy sensation of the car vents breathing hot air,
warming my skin despite the bitter cold outside.

For once I have nowhere to be, no deadlines to meet, no class to rush to,
and so I stay here just a little while longer while the world races on around me.

© Kristine M., Indianapolis, IN

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WritingLoverForever PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 8:15 am
WritingLoverForever PLATINUM, Bowling Green, Ohio
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Wow, this is incredible. I'm speechless. Words cannot describe this beautifully written poem. I absolutely love it. Keep writing, and please check out some of my work. :)
gemmmmma GOLD said...
on Jun. 14 2010 at 9:02 pm
gemmmmma GOLD, Leopold, Other
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i've been looking for ages for someone to look to/read their writing and i havn't found anyone i particularly like, until now ! thankyou for posting all this amazing work on here i'm absolutely loving it !
Eilatan GOLD said...
on Jun. 14 2010 at 8:10 pm
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fills me with calm.
freepurplesun SILVER said...
on Jun. 14 2010 at 8:00 pm
freepurplesun SILVER, New City, New York
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Let's calm down, people. If you don't like it, don't leave a comment. No need to destroy each other. "To each his own."

I loved it, personally. The title fit the poem and I felt it in my soul, if that doesn't sound too corny.

Great! :D

Kristen_Jean GOLD said...
on Jun. 14 2010 at 4:21 pm
Kristen_Jean GOLD, Bloomer, Wisconsin
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I had the strongest urge to turn around and come back...again.
But I didn't.
I just kept on walking."

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I like this poem, it describes me!!
ericas2113 SILVER said...
on Jun. 14 2010 at 2:47 pm
ericas2113 SILVER, Congers, New York
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i love this.
Meavescrete SILVER said...
on Jun. 14 2010 at 12:30 pm
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I absolutely love the title of this poem, and the way to describe the title without even mentioning the title in the poem at all.
brysmarie12 PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 14 2010 at 12:06 pm
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Wow, this is really good! Keep it up! :) And if anyone would check out my work and comment, I would love the feedback! Thanks!
carcar11 said...
on Jun. 14 2010 at 1:25 am
well obviously you dont get the true beauty of this poem nor the point of poetry it is self expresion so are you trying to say this person is expressing them selves poorly if so i dont think you should be able to even witness beauty like this if you cant see the true beauty pluse didnt you go to kindergarden if you cant say something nice dont say anything at all
We-R-3 BRONZE said...
on May. 23 2010 at 9:26 pm
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Poetry is writing without rules, it would be a miracle if anyone could look past there preferences and see what the author is trying to say. so umm...shutup just shut up
ThatHair said...
on May. 23 2010 at 8:56 pm
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Yeah, it's called "free verse poetry."
SmileyHaley said...
on May. 23 2010 at 4:48 pm
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Very descriptive!  The poem really creates an image.  Great job. :)
Kels_W. BRONZE said...
on May. 23 2010 at 4:45 pm
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wow guys you all need to lay off on the negative!!! poetry is expressing yourself and your feelings, not focusing on pleasing a bunch of critics like yourselves! i love this peice i don't see why the rest of you don't.
I_Am_Me96 GOLD said...
on May. 23 2010 at 3:45 pm
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Read one of my poems and dont complain. I'm better than a car. :D
Saritarox120 said...
on May. 23 2010 at 2:37 pm
This is not even like a poem
Ummm...shutup said...
on May. 23 2010 at 11:29 am

It would be a miracle if I actually read a poem that was good. Why are yall lying to these "writers" (cough). If someone one of you were good you wouldn't have to beg people to read your work. please read some Mya Angelo, Ee Cumming,Hemminway. God knows you need to.

 

Frog-Prince PLATINUM said...
on May. 1 2010 at 11:16 pm
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great job on this please check out some of my work =) thnks
sparkofheart GOLD said...
on May. 1 2010 at 10:30 am
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wow really great job! loved the mood created and amazing imagery! keep up the great work!
jessa-lynn PLATINUM said...
on May. 1 2010 at 7:36 am
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all i can say is wow you captured the mood beautifuly. i actually felt like i was there! you did an amazing job
Eilatan GOLD said...
on Apr. 9 2010 at 3:11 pm
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wow... i love this! you really caught the mood, i can imagine myself in this situation. amazing.

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