Time Takes a Breath MAG

February 27, 2009
By Keegan Watters SILVER, Dallas, Texas
Keegan Watters SILVER, Dallas, Texas
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I sit with my feet up on the dashboard,
music bursting from the speakers in rhythmic little puffs,
windows rolled down just enough so I can dangle my left hand over the edge.

I can faintly hear the wind pecking at the cracks on the door,
sending the puddles of water on the ground into frantic ripples
and propelling crackled autumn leaves onto my car windshield.

I close my eyes and listen to the storm battering around me,
enjoying the balmy sensation of the car vents breathing hot air,
warming my skin despite the bitter cold outside.

For once I have nowhere to be, no deadlines to meet, no class to rush to,
and so I stay here just a little while longer while the world races on around me.



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on Oct. 19 2012 at 11:33 am
marc sullivan, Bethlehem, Pennsylvania
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I must say this is very good work. You keep it simple and understandable witch I like. In this simplisity you hit many things that many peopel have experanced will driving make it aas though we are with you. This is vary well writen and enjoyable to read.

on Oct. 17 2012 at 1:43 pm
Hernan Gonzalez, Kansas City, Missouri
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This poem is really good because while I was reading it I was smiling all the time. The poem reminds me of summer because all I do is enjoy my time without any worries and turn my  music up loud.I like the line "enjoying the balmy sensation of the car vents breathing hot air."it  reminds me of the hot days in summer and Im always complaining why is it so hot. I really like the poem because I can relate to it.  

hector123 said...
on Oct. 17 2012 at 1:36 pm
hector123, Kansas City, Kansas
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Your poem is good because I can relate to what you wrote. I prefer to be listening to music than doing homework or being in school. I also liked how you used the pronoun I because I can imagine my self doing the same activites you wrote.

on Aug. 14 2012 at 6:58 pm
Kissdbyangels96 SILVER, Milton, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"You don't have to be the best, you just have to care the most."

I really like this, sometimes I wish I could just erase the world around me for a little while just like this. It's a very good poem and it makes me think(:  

on Jun. 9 2012 at 7:12 pm
TMarie42 SILVER, Orland, California
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Favorite Quote:
Pulvis et umbra sumus.

Very nice imagery. Good work!

on May. 18 2012 at 12:41 pm
stanfordbound, Central, South Carolina
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I feel the some way!It's nice and simple!

on Apr. 26 2012 at 8:15 pm
kaciexrose SILVER, Marathon, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
The future depends on what we do in the present.

I love short poems like this. Very moving. Maybe check out my writings?

on Apr. 18 2012 at 11:39 am
Kparker27 PLATINUM, Groesbeck, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"In the end, it's still best to wait for the one we want rather than settle for what's available. It's still best to wait for the one you love rather than to settle for the one who's around. It's still best to wait for the right person, because life's too short to waste on the wrong one."

Great job! If you have time read some of mine and comment. :) 

on Apr. 4 2012 at 7:07 am
MarieAntoinette2014 DIAMOND, Scottsburg, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Isn't it ironic? We ignore the ones who adore us, adore the ones who ignore us, love the ones who hurt us, and hurt the ones that love us.

It's so serene and peaceful! I love it.

Fia-fia BRONZE said...
on Feb. 20 2012 at 5:19 pm
Fia-fia BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
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Fantastic Poem! Its nice, the calmness of the entire piece. Time rarely does take a breath, so thanks for capturing this moment. It really makes you reflect on all the peaceful times vs the over-energized ones. Thank you :)

on Jan. 29 2012 at 3:45 pm
SummerBreeze7 BRONZE, Ponoka, Other
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Favorite Quote:
To wish you were someone else is to waste the person you are.
Always Love-Love Always.
Live Love Laugh

Great poem, it was very well written. I would really appreciate it if you checked out my poem called Time. It is the first poem I've written for TeenInk and I would love if you left a reveiw.

Dreammer GOLD said...
on Jan. 29 2012 at 8:06 am
Dreammer GOLD, Montrose, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Love is like quicksand the further you fall the harder it is to get out

great poem! id apreciate it if everyone could read mine and tell me what they think

hrf1434 GOLD said...
on Jan. 29 2012 at 6:43 am
hrf1434 GOLD, Collierville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Don't Judge a Girl by Her Cover

I don't get it

on Jan. 7 2012 at 8:29 pm
Danielle.W BRONZE, Plainwell, Michigan
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This is amazing, inspiring and calming. You are a fantastic writer :)

on Jan. 7 2012 at 7:14 pm
Lynnieluv BRONZE, Corona, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"A star doesn't shine unless you're the star..."

Love this poem! So tranqil.

on Jan. 7 2012 at 6:30 pm
Lynnieluv BRONZE, Corona, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"A star doesn't shine unless you're the star..."

Love this!

on Jan. 7 2012 at 6:13 pm
SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
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This piece is so inspiring and calming! Annnnd... please check out my work?

on Jan. 7 2012 at 3:00 pm
Mimi15 PLATINUM, Belfast, Maine
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Check out my poem 'On our Own'

on Jan. 7 2012 at 1:36 pm
bubblesrfun GOLD, Muskego, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Be your own kind of beautiful.

Wonderful! The imagery really makes it amazing!

Art_Trash said...
on Dec. 16 2011 at 3:10 pm
Art_Trash, Frankfort, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Say what you think and think what you want. Because the ones who mind don't matter, and the ones who matter, don't mind." ~Dr.Suess
"Every artist was once an amateur."

I definatly agree about how amazing the imagery is!


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