Time Takes a Breath This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

February 27, 2009
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I sit with my feet up on the dashboard,
music bursting from the speakers in rhythmic little puffs,
windows rolled down just enough so I can dangle my left hand over the edge.

I can faintly hear the wind pecking at the cracks on the door,
sending the puddles of water on the ground into frantic ripples
and propelling crackled autumn leaves onto my car windshield.

I close my eyes and listen to the storm battering around me,
enjoying the balmy sensation of the car vents breathing hot air,
warming my skin despite the bitter cold outside.

For once I have nowhere to be, no deadlines to meet, no class to rush to,
and so I stay here just a little while longer while the world races on around me.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Marc S. said...
Oct. 19, 2012 at 11:33 am
I must say this is very good work. You keep it simple and understandable witch I like. In this simplisity you hit many things that many peopel have experanced will driving make it aas though we are with you. This is vary well writen and enjoyable to read.
Hernan G. said...
Oct. 17, 2012 at 1:43 pm
This poem is really good because while I was reading it I was smiling all the time. The poem reminds me of summer because all I do is enjoy my time without any worries and turn my  music up loud.I like the line "enjoying the balmy sensation of the car vents breathing hot air."it  reminds me of the hot days in summer and Im always complaining why is it so hot. I really like the poem because I can relate to it.  
hector123 said...
Oct. 17, 2012 at 1:36 pm
Your poem is good because I can relate to what you wrote. I prefer to be listening to music than doing homework or being in school. I also liked how you used the pronoun I because I can imagine my self doing the same activites you wrote.
Kissdbyangels96 said...
Aug. 14, 2012 at 6:58 pm
I really like this, sometimes I wish I could just erase the world around me for a little while just like this. It's a very good poem and it makes me think(:  
TMarie42 said...
Jun. 9, 2012 at 7:12 pm
Very nice imagery. Good work!
kaciexrose said...
Apr. 26, 2012 at 8:15 pm
I love short poems like this. Very moving. Maybe check out my writings?
Aniqa C. replied...
May 18, 2012 at 12:41 pm
I feel the some way!It's nice and simple!
LovelessWriter1090 said...
Apr. 4, 2012 at 7:07 am
It's so serene and peaceful! I love it.
Estelle18 replied...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 11:39 am
Great job! If you have time read some of mine and comment. :) 
Fia-fia said...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 5:19 pm
Fantastic Poem! Its nice, the calmness of the entire piece. Time rarely does take a breath, so thanks for capturing this moment. It really makes you reflect on all the peaceful times vs the over-energized ones. Thank you :)
SummerBreeze7 said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 3:45 pm
Great poem, it was very well written. I would really appreciate it if you checked out my poem called Time. It is the first poem I've written for TeenInk and I would love if you left a reveiw.
Dreammer said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 8:06 am
great poem! id apreciate it if everyone could read mine and tell me what they think
danyell017 said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 8:29 pm
This is amazing, inspiring and calming. You are a fantastic writer :)
hrf1434 replied...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 6:43 am
I don't get it
minicoolgirl12 said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 7:14 pm
Love this poem! So tranqil.
minicoolgirl12 said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 6:30 pm
Love this!
GirlWhoWrote said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 6:13 pm
This piece is so inspiring and calming! Annnnd... please check out my work?
Mimi15 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 3:00 pm
Check out my poem 'On our Own'
bubblesrfun said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 1:36 pm
Wonderful! The imagery really makes it amazing!
missingxD said...
Dec. 16, 2011 at 12:13 pm
i really like this. its awesome
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