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Chaos Theory This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category.

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Carolyn says she believes in angels
while mascara spiders creep thickly along the
heavy baggage beneath her eyes like the
black pitch of the school hallways at night or
the charcoal that she dips her fingernails in and I
remember cheating on my math test that morning
So
I tell her I believe in people.

Roasted honey nut, the color she was born with but
you really wouldn’t know it because of the midnight L’Oréal
she chooses, tragically highlighted with Punk Pink or
Raging Red from a bottle and 15
minutes of waiting –
It spills limply over her black eyes whenever she leans down to write and
Carolyn says she believes in fate.

In planets aligning in the universe and
Feng shui that keeps mice away and prevents ulcers but also
makes a girl fall in love with a boy but
I know all about chemistry and hormones and catalysts so I
think I believe in science.

In reincarnation, she thinks she’ll come back as a bird
Or maybe a peacock and I say I agree when I
see those striped stockings that come to her knees and
neon earrings lifeless at her shoulders but she only laughs …
tells me I never really see her and to
call her later.

Now with the dial tone in my ear
the cold trembling and I’m suffocating on nothing
because I really see her and I
know she believes in the afterlife but
she doesn’t believe in laughter and
the phone just rings and rings and rings …

Carolyn said she believed in angels.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category. This piece won the January 2009 Teen Ink Poetry Contest.




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ThisGirlRightHere This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 3:02 pm:

Oh my God this was amazing. I cringed when I read that last line.

I loved the way it flowed and how you described things. Amazing, you're amazing.

 
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ShenelleCrystalx3 said...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 2:00 pm:
GREAT JOB ! Don't ever stop writing :) , Check out some of my poems please :)
 
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IndigoE said...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 10:31 am:
wow!!!! i loved it. it was a bit confusing and run-on-sentence-like, but the story it told and the beauty in it made up for that. keep writing- you definitely have talent
 
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SKN17 said...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 1:53 am:
WOW! Now that's what I call talent :D I love the way the poem progresses, the way you have depicted her loss of individuality :) Great job, it's very inspiring :)
 
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love2runThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 13, 2010 at 6:38 pm:
Great job!!!
 
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Nanner said...
Jun. 10, 2010 at 1:42 pm:
This left me breathless 'til the very end. Don't ever stop writing. :)
 
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JasminePinto said...
May 28, 2010 at 11:04 am:
this was truly amazing and touching, dont quit writing you are extremely good. it was heartfelt and full of depth and emotion. amazing job :)!!!
 
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Nosam said...
May 26, 2010 at 8:03 pm:
This is just so good. And the end is so great and satisfying...well done! (:
 
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clauds1215 said...
May 26, 2010 at 7:34 pm:
This is such an amazing poem. Truly inspiring!
 
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xericaclairex said...
May 26, 2010 at 7:05 pm:
one word. beautiful(:
 
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MidnightLove said...
May 26, 2010 at 6:50 pm:
That was truely amazing, I loved it!
 
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that_one_kid said...
May 26, 2010 at 6:36 pm:
wow. Just wow. I love this. LOVE this, it was so unique and beautiful.
 
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Duckie430 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 26, 2010 at 3:24 pm:
i know i've commented on this before, but i have to again just to say how much this poem touches me. It is truly inspiring. Good writing is something that makes you feel something, & that's what this does for me.
 
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Wallflower This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 26, 2010 at 2:17 pm:
chills. this has inspired me to start writing again.
 
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tori-gurlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 26, 2010 at 1:37 pm:
i really liked that was it a true thing that happened because if so i am really sorry she sounds like a good person and i beleive in angels too. i think some angels walk among this earth and leave way to soon like rachel joy scott. if you dont know who she is you should look up her story...
 
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savagivity777 said...
May 26, 2010 at 1:15 pm:
-unique approach/content
-contradictions worked well
-random "real life" details personalized the poem for your readers
-WORD.
 
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alwayskelley This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 26, 2010 at 11:54 am:

wow thats so good!! very deep i liked it...0.o

 

 

 

***will someone please look at and comment(!!!) on my poem it just got finished pending-thanks

 

 
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blankpages12 said...
May 26, 2010 at 10:31 am:

i really love this cause it reminds me what im going through with my best friend..

and the writing is amazing.congrats on being published

 
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SweetlySour15 said...
May 5, 2010 at 2:15 pm:
I really liked this! You are super talented! I hope you get published!
 
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emilyanne said...
May 4, 2010 at 5:54 pm:

WoW. 

you are one of the most talented people I have ever seen.

 
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