Chaos Theory MAG

November 14, 2008
By Debbie G., Arlington Heights, IL, Arlington Heights, IL

Carolyn says she believes in angels
while mascara spiders creep thickly along the
heavy baggage beneath her eyes like the
black pitch of the school hallways at night or
the charcoal that she dips her fingernails in and I
remember cheating on my math test that morning
I tell her I believe in people.

Roasted honey nut, the color she was born with but
you really wouldn’t know it because of the midnight L’Oréal
she chooses, tragically highlighted with Punk Pink or
Raging Red from a bottle and 15
minutes of waiting –
It spills limply over her black eyes whenever she leans down to write and
Carolyn says she believes in fate.

In planets aligning in the universe and
Feng shui that keeps mice away and prevents ulcers but also
makes a girl fall in love with a boy but
I know all about chemistry and hormones and catalysts so I
think I believe in science.

In reincarnation, she thinks she’ll come back as a bird
Or maybe a peacock and I say I agree when I
see those striped stockings that come to her knees and
neon earrings lifeless at her shoulders but she only laughs …
tells me I never really see her and to
call her later.

Now with the dial tone in my ear
the cold trembling and I’m suffocating on nothing
because I really see her and I
know she believes in the afterlife but
she doesn’t believe in laughter and
the phone just rings and rings and rings …

Carolyn said she believed in angels.

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Sprit said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 5:27 pm
Sprit, Brielle, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
life is a journey bt you can't find the map

THIS was amazing. I totally get it and you were really descrpitive

on Jun. 17 2010 at 3:02 pm
MeganAnne PLATINUM, Niskayuna, New York
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Favorite Quote:
All my life I've looked at words as if I were seeing them for the first time. ~Ernest Hemingway

Oh my God this was amazing. I cringed when I read that last line.

I loved the way it flowed and how you described things. Amazing, you're amazing.

on Jun. 17 2010 at 2:00 pm
ShenelleCrystal SILVER, M, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out dance in the rain cherish the memories ignore the pain love + learn forget and forgive because remember you only have [one life to live] ♥

GREAT JOB ! Don't ever stop writing :) , Check out some of my poems please :)

on Jun. 17 2010 at 10:31 am
Saudade_indigo PLATINUM, Winnipeg, Other
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wow!!!! i loved it. it was a bit confusing and run-on-sentence-like, but the story it told and the beauty in it made up for that. keep writing- you definitely have talent

on Jun. 17 2010 at 1:53 am
Eternally17 SILVER, Dubai, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"There exists no heaven and no hell, nothing to look forward to after we have gone to ashes; live every moment NOW, and make things happen the way you want to in this lifetime; not the next."

WOW! Now that's what I call talent :D I love the way the poem progresses, the way you have depicted her loss of individuality :) Great job, it's very inspiring :)

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on Jun. 13 2010 at 6:38 pm
love2run GOLD, Star Valley, Wyoming
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Favorite Quote:
"I failed my way to success." Thomas Edison
"What kind of crazy nut would spend two or three hours a day just running?" Pre
"A ship in harbor is safe, but that's not what ships are built for." John Shedd

Great job!!!

Nanner BRONZE said...
on Jun. 10 2010 at 1:42 pm
Nanner BRONZE, Elizabethton, Tennessee
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This left me breathless 'til the very end. Don't ever stop writing. :)

on May. 28 2010 at 11:04 am
JasminePinto BRONZE, Anywhere, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
we make a living by what we get but make a life by what we give- Winston Churchhill

Don't quit while the night is darkest for its just a while till dawn- Jill Wolf

this was truly amazing and touching, dont quit writing you are extremely good. it was heartfelt and full of depth and emotion. amazing job :)!!!

Nosam BRONZE said...
on May. 26 2010 at 8:03 pm
Nosam BRONZE, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"My feet have wheels." --Alex

First Man: "And what was the cause of his death?"
Second Man: "Life."

This is just so good. And the end is so great and satisfying...well done! (:

on May. 26 2010 at 7:34 pm
clauds1215 BRONZE, New York, New York
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This is such an amazing poem. Truly inspiring!

on May. 26 2010 at 7:05 pm
xericaclairex BRONZE, Mahwah, New Jersey
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one word. beautiful(:

on May. 26 2010 at 6:50 pm
MidnightLove BRONZE, Paragould, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
I could live in taco bell

That was truely amazing, I loved it!

on May. 26 2010 at 6:36 pm
waiting_to_be_found GOLD, Conifer, Colorado
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wow. Just wow. I love this. LOVE this, it was so unique and beautiful.

Duckie430 said...
on May. 26 2010 at 3:24 pm
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
“The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.”
"Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger."

i know i've commented on this before, but i have to again just to say how much this poem touches me. It is truly inspiring. Good writing is something that makes you feel something, & that's what this does for me.

on May. 26 2010 at 2:17 pm
Wallflower PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
If you aren't happy alone then you're not going to be happy with anyone else.

chills. this has inspired me to start writing again.

on May. 26 2010 at 1:37 pm
tori-gurl PLATINUM, Norwich, New York
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Favorite Quote:
smile through everything no matter how bad it gets because it could be worse and if it gets worse well then it can only get better. :)

i really liked that was it a true thing that happened because if so i am really sorry she sounds like a good person and i beleive in angels too. i think some angels walk among this earth and leave way to soon like rachel joy scott. if you dont know who she is you should look up her story...

on May. 26 2010 at 1:15 pm
savagivity777, Sante Fe, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"Fo rizzle."

-unique approach/content
-contradictions worked well
-random "real life" details personalized the poem for your readers

on May. 26 2010 at 11:54 am
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which
procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt
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wow thats so good!! very deep i liked it...0.o




***will someone please look at and comment(!!!) on my poem it just got finished pending-thanks


on May. 26 2010 at 10:31 am
blankpages12 BRONZE, Redding, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes you put up walls not to keep people out but to see who cares enough to break them down."

i really love this cause it reminds me what im going through with my best friend..

and the writing is amazing.congrats on being published

on May. 5 2010 at 2:15 pm
Brokenlover GOLD, Albany, Oregon
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I really liked this! You are super talented! I hope you get published!


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