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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Dec. 10 2010 at 6:07 pm
justsmileanddance PLATINUM, Montgomery, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
Happiness can be found, even in the darkest of times, if one only remembers to turn on the light.<br /> -Albus Dumbledore

 feel kinda blonde but i don't get what this poem's about. could someone please explain?? thnx!

dpsh307 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 10:45 am
dpsh307 BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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Wow! This poem is very intriguing.  I do love the idea of the poem. I love the two lines in the second stanza, "i asked my Father if i could fly"(L.2.1) "and he said, sure, Son - go try"(L.2.2) It reminds me of a time when I was a kid and asked my parents about flying. I would like to know how it felt to for you to have the sky at your level.

sk8sbetrdanu said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 8:02 am
sk8sbetrdanu, Greensboro, North Carolina
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I KNEW IT..... knowing you you probably had a McDonalds in there..

Steelers7 said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 7:58 am
Steelers7, Greensboro, North Carolina
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This poem reminded me of the time I spent in my father's womb. I'll always remember the cold imbrace of his testes

on Dec. 9 2010 at 5:36 pm
brodiephillips, Warsaw, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
if you got one life live it happy!!!!

cute verrrrryyyyy cute

 


stargrl SILVER said...
on Dec. 9 2010 at 4:44 pm
stargrl SILVER, Ballston Lake, New York
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Wow! Very intriguing - I thought the poem was happy and about family interactions until the very ending!

Cmg6604 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 9 2010 at 2:28 pm
Cmg6604 BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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I like this poem, and I love the rhyme. My favorite line is,"and he said that I would drown." This line starts off the problem in the whole poem. I love the efforts the boy did when he tried to fly.

on Dec. 8 2010 at 7:47 pm
dancingintheflames GOLD, Kirksville, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
She stood in the storm and when the wind didn&#039;t blow her away, she adjusted her sails&lt;3

I LOVE this poem, it just flows beautifully!!!!! Please check our my work.....

bjb103 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 6 2010 at 9:23 am
bjb103 BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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I can relate myself to this poem. I asked my father the same questions. It is amazing to know that i am not the only one. I love this poem! It was great. It had great rhythm. I would suggest to make it longer, because I was wanting more, but awesome job.

JSchwartz GOLD said...
on Dec. 3 2010 at 9:11 pm
JSchwartz GOLD, Gainesville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
The problem isn&#039;t always the 1%, but the 99% who fight each other to be the 1%.

very interesting, love the poem. Kinda weird for a boy to write poetry, but i'm a boy who likes poetry also so keep it up.

on Dec. 2 2010 at 8:10 pm
Truelyy44 BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Don&#039;t start nuthin won&#039;t be nuthin.&quot;-Fam quote

That was lik past amazing !!

on Dec. 2 2010 at 5:54 pm
Monkee63 SILVER, Independence, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I want to feel my life while I&#039;m in it&quot;- Meryl Streep<br /> &quot;Live, Life Love&quot;<br /> &quot;Everybody wants happiness, nobody wants pain, but you can&#039;t have a rainbow without a little rain.&quot;

Wow. I really really liked that I love the way that the words just simply flow together.

Jacob44 said...
on Dec. 2 2010 at 4:58 pm
hmmm... interesting. I like the wording, very articulate.

on Dec. 2 2010 at 4:32 pm
extremelymodest5 BRONZE, Califon, New Jersey
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awesome poem! very original!

Duckie430 said...
on Dec. 2 2010 at 12:39 pm
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.&rdquo;<br /> &quot;Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger.&quot;

i agree! i thought i was the only one...there's alot of amazing poetry on this site, but this poem just doesn't hold as much emotion & talent as others, yet it is the most recognized. not that this poem is bad...but i just don't see what is very original or creative about it.

on Dec. 1 2010 at 6:51 pm
AlexisRivera015, Warren, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Here is the test to find whether your mission on earth is finished. If you&rsquo;re alive, it isn&rsquo;t.

wow amazing

this is just wow

lol i love it

check out my writing

cuz u seem like u have experice here

:)


tylerz GOLD said...
on Dec. 1 2010 at 11:11 am
tylerz GOLD, Cheyenne Wells, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
Life is to short to not share it with another person.

Beautiful I loved every bit of it

on Nov. 30 2010 at 11:04 pm
AliMallie BRONZE, Westminster, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I&#039;m selfish, impatient, and a little insecure. I make mistakes. I am out of control and at times, hard to handle, but if you can&#039;t handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don&#039;t deserve me at my best.&quot; -Marilyn Monroe

I was enthralled by the utter unique aspect of this poem. Thank you for sharing this!

on Nov. 30 2010 at 8:21 pm
cmCampbell SILVER, Cedar Grove, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Every minute you spend angry is 60 seconds you lose of happiness!&quot;

So I absolutely loved this! Usually I get distracted in the middle of reading and don't read until the very end, but I read this to the very end without even giving it a second though! phenominal! really!

on Nov. 30 2010 at 7:23 pm
Xeneron00 BRONZE, McDonough, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I will make a difference in this world, you will not strangle me.&quot;

The last four lines gave me chills throughout my entire body.