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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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babygirl792 said...
Jan. 21, 2009 at 8:18 pm
I love this poem..its really nice..u r very talented
angelalynn said...
Jan. 21, 2009 at 1:10 am
Wow! that was really great, your very talented
The Otherworldlies said...
Jan. 20, 2009 at 9:59 pm
Wonderful piece, Carl. Since I have ADHD, my mind sometimes refuses to stay rapt when in class, or reading-- But this poem captivated my attention. It was great. I'd like to also note that I absolutely adored your use of slant rhyme. -Ally
aaron said...
Jan. 20, 2009 at 8:10 pm
hey, check my poem out.
great job!
maylin said...
Jan. 20, 2009 at 8:07 pm
Carl I enjoyed the poem. I especially loved the ending, "then i knew that i was bound." the ending delivers the final punch, and the whole poem prepares one for this powerful and revealing ending.
Jim R. said...
Jan. 20, 2009 at 7:49 pm
Great poem carl. Some people are just mad because their poem isn't number one. Trust me, you won't get any meaningful criticism on here. only a bunch of haterz..
check out my fictional piece:
c.c. said...
Jan. 20, 2009 at 7:06 pm

No, I'm not cocky. I'm simple human! I know I have a lot to learn and a long way to go, but I will not sit quietly by and let anymore take away from my success! By the way, good isn't the best or the greatest! Don't confused arrogance with confidence.

Now can we please just talk about POETRY!
oruga101 said...
Jan. 20, 2009 at 4:31 am

"And yes, I am a junior in college and I’m Editor-In-Chief of my college’s literary magazine and I got a 4.0, and blah blah blah blah blah—so yea, I think I know what I’m doing! I’m a good poet and a good human being. "

All I have to say is WOW. Now I understand why your writing ability is where it is! It's because you let yourself become cocky. Once you decide you are good, you become the worst. It's a good lesson.<... (more »)
Josephine Demme said...
Jan. 19, 2009 at 1:37 pm
Carl, that was AMAZING! it was beautifully written and worded! wow
poetess123 said...
Jan. 18, 2009 at 3:10 pm
Hey R. Gallagher you can back off now. Just because you may be envious doesn't mean that you can go around knocking other people's work.

And, Carl, that poem was lovely, almost lyrical. Keep it up, and consider it as a career!
melinda13 said...
Jan. 17, 2009 at 11:56 pm
don't listen to the people's criticism. you did a great job of writing the poem, better than i could ever write one. my dream is to actually write a poem that's meaningful and that actually makes sense. great job again!
marymoocow said...
Jan. 17, 2009 at 4:22 pm
Wow. That was amazing!I like the emotion in it. You expressed it really well. But, as a reader, am i suppose to think that your dad is protecting you from failing or keeping you from trying?
Jaejae said...
Jan. 16, 2009 at 2:06 am
This is really amazing. I love how at first you put the idea of your earthly father and how he wouldnt let you, but made it in context with your heavenly Father and how he let you go try.

Great work!
Mickey said...
Jan. 15, 2009 at 4:54 pm
I love the poem.I think you did a great job.
c.c. said...
Jan. 14, 2009 at 8:11 pm
Hi RGallagher,

Can we skip the drama please and get back to talking about poetry? Do you have a poem I can read?

P.S. Reread how many times I commented. I wasn’t putting anybody down! If you actually read what I wrote, you’d see that I have no problem with criticism, as long as your argument is developed and can sustain itself. And yes, I am a junior in college and I’m Editor-In-Chief of my college’s literary magazine and I got a 4.0, and blah b... (more »)
RGallagher said...
Jan. 14, 2009 at 4:56 am
"I am a junior in college and I’m Editor-In-Chief of my college’s literary magazine—so I think I know what I’m doing!"

If you're so well "educated", I would expect your writing to be of a much higher quality. It should have more depth and be more thought out. And the writer should be more mature. Instead of putting down every person who tells you something that they don't like, maybe you should listen to them. When you start hearing the sa... (more »)
FireFallon said...
Jan. 14, 2009 at 4:29 am
Okay I get what you are saying. It just seemed unintentional, lazy typing was the first thing that popped in to my mind. And you are right I did speak as if I knew the author/speaker and in the future I shall try to be more clear about my personal opinions. But can I ask you a question? Can you explain to me why things aren't capitalized I just don't understand why they aren't. And another thing relax you're still (or were recently) a teenager yourself. :) I must admit you are more accomplished ... (more »)
Infidus said...
Jan. 14, 2009 at 1:46 am
The concept was beautiful, well explained and understood. I love the uniqueness of it's form.
XeyesclosedX said...
Jan. 13, 2009 at 8:28 pm
I like it, I just finished it, and I'm thinking, why couldn't my father be like that?
Lisa T.92 said...
Jan. 12, 2009 at 6:00 pm
I love this poem it really inspired me to write one just like it. thank you for writing this it is very creative and you are very talented.
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