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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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Merlin the Gerlin said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 12:40 pm
How is this a hot poem? What kind of poetry is this?
 
inspiredbytheworld replied...
Apr. 8, 2011 at 8:19 pm
What kind of poetry is this? The good kind.
 
drmstarlet21 replied...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 7:08 pm
Leave Merlin to their opinion and we'll leave you to your own.
 
CarolineLover<3 said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 8:13 pm
This is a really great poem. Nice job and well done(: 
 
FRED VS CHEESE said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 11:23 am
Hi my name is blanka fatu and this guy is really stupid and fat (colton) but stop copyin my work artard.
 
fred fredburger yes said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 11:16 am
shut up cityboy 13 ur makin fun of my comment... YES!
 
LIL(E) CHERRY said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 9:35 am
THIS WAS A HOT POEM I REALLY LOVED THIS IT BROUGHT BACK MERRIORES THANK YOU HOPE U MAKE MORE
 
karenlovesyou(: said...
Apr. 4, 2011 at 5:32 pm
AWESOME POEM(: YOU GOT TALENT!!!!!!
 
Singergirl2012 said...
Apr. 4, 2011 at 4:55 pm
sounds about like MY dad :p
 
bbcly123 said...
Apr. 3, 2011 at 9:38 am
i really did not understand why the title said daddies womb so it made want to read it AND HONESTLY IT WAS GOOD.
 
X-CountryRunner said...
Apr. 2, 2011 at 4:45 pm
Great Poem!!
 
RandomPi said...
Apr. 2, 2011 at 5:05 am
This is a lovely poem. Great job!
 
PoeticallyCorrect said...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 7:43 pm
i wish my writing was as beautiful as this......amazing
 
scooba2 said...
Mar. 31, 2011 at 6:36 pm
Keep up the good work...this is a great poem!
 
livingthedream0 said...
Mar. 31, 2011 at 10:32 am
This is a very beautiful piece.<3
 
ronniesofly said...
Mar. 30, 2011 at 11:31 am
this poem was deep and i like it i thin this is really great!
 
Penfencer said...
Mar. 29, 2011 at 5:25 pm
I feel like sometimes here you're working so hard to make it rhyme that you lose some of the power. The rhyme scheme is also a little bit wavering. I love the message though, and you have some good stuff, but I would really like to see this as a free verse non-rhyming poem, because I think you could get your message across a lot better that way.
 
bieberl0ve15 said...
Mar. 29, 2011 at 2:54 pm
I don't really understand this.. what does it mean?
 
AdiiG said...
Mar. 29, 2011 at 2:43 pm
=) very nice, :DD
 
BeccaLeigh13 said...
Mar. 28, 2011 at 1:33 pm
I love this poem i can picture you jumping in the air and unfourtunately landing on the ground. I can really relate to it.
 
Justin S. said...
Mar. 28, 2011 at 7:59 am
Very good poem.... the sense of rhythm and visualization is amazing.... great work!
 
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