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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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pinkypromise23 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 13, 2011 at 3:04 pm:
ive comemted on this once or twice before, but i just read it again for like, the millionith time, and i got goosebumps, again. its amazing.
 
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featherssss said...
May 13, 2011 at 2:52 pm:
this is a really interesting poem, i can relate to it because my parents were very strict and always held me back. good writing (:
 
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miranda.paille said...
May 13, 2011 at 1:03 pm:
this poem is great(:
 
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Hmc15 said...
May 11, 2011 at 3:48 pm:
pretty awesome :)
 
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blueanddark said...
May 11, 2011 at 2:17 pm:
i love this! i was so intrigued.
 
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cutegirl97 said...
May 8, 2011 at 6:08 pm:
this is a very interesting poem! keep writing!
 
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treysongzwife said...
May 7, 2011 at 4:35 pm:
 i love this poem it's the best
 
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JustinBieberGirlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 6, 2011 at 8:34 am:
i loooovvvvveee this poem, it's so good, keep writing more
 
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Jariel V. said...
May 5, 2011 at 5:19 pm:

wow thats fantastic check my wrighting out some time

 

 
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Cubster said...
May 5, 2011 at 3:58 pm:
Awesome. Truly and amazingly... awesome.
 
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wasauskyx said...
May 5, 2011 at 3:39 pm:

I love the last stanza ;P

 

 
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SarahFaith said...
May 4, 2011 at 5:31 pm:
I liked it a lot.  It reminded me of my relationship with my Mom.  Every time I try and break away, she pulls me back.  Some people may not understand it, but I get it.  And they'll get it too, someday.  Good job
 
kitten nightshade replied...
May 5, 2011 at 9:35 am :
I realy like it it remindes me that we are bound down untill we finally brake free!!
 
Cubster replied...
May 5, 2011 at 4:00 pm :
We may be able to loosen our chains, but can we ever really break free? Well, I guess maybe when we move or something.
 
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hwilliamsrocks said...
May 2, 2011 at 10:45 am:
it was good. you need to keep writing
 
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zoid123 said...
May 2, 2011 at 10:30 am:
Wow this is awesome...its so true...Keep writing
 
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Phantomlover95This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 1, 2011 at 4:43 pm:
Wow, you're an amazing writer! This piece, I think, everyone can relate to. This is so great! Amazing! I'm blown away. Keep writing!
 
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cierrajordan said...
May 1, 2011 at 3:26 pm:
This poem is really touching..I know it touched my heart, especially after I read it several times.  I can tell it describes a type of relationship between you and God.  I really, really like this poem and I tagged it as one of my favorites.  Keep writing, you're great at it! (:
 
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DerClogger said...
May 1, 2011 at 11:20 am:
This is not free verse.
 
Nicovera replied...
May 18, 2011 at 7:30 am :

who cares? it's amazingly well-written, and has a lot of truth to it. If you want to get mad about stuff posted in the wrong catagory, go look at the sonnets.

And btw, free verse can technically include every type of poetry.

Great job!

 
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