Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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byebye said...
on Nov. 30 2011 at 6:55 pm
byebye, Nevermore, Other
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I love this. I really do. I had to read it a couple times through to really absorb it, and once I did I was thoroughly impressed. To be a little more "short and sweet" (you guessed it - my weakness!) this was beautiful. I hope one day my poetry will be this great!

on Nov. 30 2011 at 9:06 am
Aaliyahthepoet123 BRONZE, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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I think this poem was wonderful :) and some people who said it wasn't good, does not know the meaning of poetry.... One word "creativity".

ihatedemapes said...
on Nov. 30 2011 at 5:12 am
all them people that said this was good, are LIARS, just praying you read what they call "poetry" Or "Art" if you will, but lets be serious, this sucks.. and for all who did not know, men dont have a womb, change the title noob.

on Nov. 28 2011 at 6:44 pm
ReversePrint BRONZE, Manchester, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
“Love is much like a wild rose; beautiful and calm, but willing to draw blood in its defense.” -Mark Overby

This is an amazing poem :) good job!

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on Nov. 28 2011 at 4:47 pm
Jeast10 GOLD, Beaumont, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
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on Nov. 28 2011 at 11:01 am
dakotawright SILVER, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Knowledge speaks but wisdom listens." - Jimi Hendrix

Very Metaphoric.

on Nov. 27 2011 at 4:38 pm
Amanda_Roo BRONZE, Sandy, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"We can never obtain peace in the outer world until we make peace with ourselves."
"People take different roads seeking fulfillment and happiness. Just because they’re not on your road doesn’t mean they’ve gotten lost.”
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Every time I read this, it fills me with an emotion I can't name. This is FANTASTIC!...I would love it if you could get the chance sometime to check out some of my work. Thank you :)

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on Nov. 26 2011 at 8:42 pm
Meredith15, Cypress, Texas
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"You must be the change you want to see in the world."
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nicely written!

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Nov. 26 2011 at 12:20 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
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Absolutely amazing poem, I love it. Would you mind reading some of my work if you get a chance? I would love to hear what you think!

on Nov. 22 2011 at 3:55 pm
Kimmie_Kat SILVER, Orlando, Florida
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swifthearth, I would like to thank you, for your nice comment, and support. :)

on Nov. 22 2011 at 1:21 pm
AlyBUdawgs BRONZE, Indianapolis, Indiana
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I liked it a lot it tells a story in a beautiful inavative way (:

on Nov. 22 2011 at 12:09 pm
swiftheart GOLD, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If someone were to pay you 10 cents for every kind word you ever spoke and collect 5 cents for every unkind word, would you be rich or poor?"

I sometimes ask myself the sameted of like us  question, but the fact is that these people all started off like us-Unnoticed.- They had to work there way to this level.

Ps. I also enjoy your work.


on Nov. 22 2011 at 12:05 pm
swiftheart GOLD, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If someone were to pay you 10 cents for every kind word you ever spoke and collect 5 cents for every unkind word, would you be rich or poor?"

I loved it! You incoperated so much into one poem making it all the more powerful. Creative title, nice wording and an inspiring meaning. 

I would be honored if you looked at some of my poems.


on Nov. 21 2011 at 8:57 am
Kimmie_Kat SILVER, Orlando, Florida
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First of all, Ginger I really appreciate what you said and how you put your comment in a nice way. Second of all, leyna in my POV i was just wondering how this writer got so popular because i really enjoy writing and i wanted to know how to get my writing knowed. Also, you can't judge my writing if you haven't read it.

on Nov. 19 2011 at 6:22 pm
Kayotic PLATINUM, Goodyear, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
You aren't having fun unless you're commiting sin~ Priest

I love such poetry!It just reminds me of so many things!Great job!

 


on Nov. 19 2011 at 5:31 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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hello, nice poem. Would u guys wanna check out my work. its called the cottage 

thank u


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on Nov. 19 2011 at 3:08 pm
exotus SILVER, Aspen, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"If a writer falls in love with you, you can never die"

creative title!

on Nov. 19 2011 at 9:42 am
BridgetND BRONZE, Warsaw, Indiana
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this was wonderful!! =] i was wondering if anyone could view my work and tell me what they think? it would mean alot to me

on Nov. 18 2011 at 9:04 pm
Ginger_ninja72521 SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
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I think this is amazingly deep. I love all of your metaphors! The simplness of your wording brought so much meaning! I can't wait to see more!

on Nov. 18 2011 at 9:02 pm
Ginger_ninja72521 SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
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It shouldn't matter if your stuff is discussed most or the most popular, just that it makes you happy to know that it's out there or that you can write at all. :) And we should support such amazing writers such as this one and learn from them to better our own skills!


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