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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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Faithful365 said...
May 26, 2011 at 2:39 pm:
The peom was very well versed. You did a really good job at depicting what the protection of a parent can feel like.
 
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krarthurs said...
May 26, 2011 at 2:08 pm:
I loved this poem. The innocence is very apparent and the dialogue was perfect. Very good job, keep it up!
 
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EyesofBlueFire said...
May 25, 2011 at 3:14 pm:
I love this poem. It's deep, but leaves it so that your readers can interpret it in different ways. Very well written. :)
 
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GabbyLynae13 said...
May 24, 2011 at 1:16 pm:
LOVE IT....'nuff said
 
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cara_ruegg said...
May 21, 2011 at 8:02 pm:
Wow this is brilliant, and flowed very well.
 
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Garcia_R. said...
May 20, 2011 at 2:52 pm:
Mine will be up by Tuesday (:
 
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Garcia_R. said...
May 20, 2011 at 2:51 pm:
This is a great poem. check out mine
 
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Alon_Freebird said...
May 19, 2011 at 1:37 am:
great poem.. :)
i can relate to it and i hate it when parents think they can control us..
 
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jasmine66 said...
May 15, 2011 at 2:21 pm:
This is a great poem!! Keep it up
 
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Emmaxoxo said...
May 14, 2011 at 2:09 pm:
This poem is amazing. I view it so many times but it NEVER gets old.
 
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pinkypromise23 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 13, 2011 at 3:04 pm:
ive comemted on this once or twice before, but i just read it again for like, the millionith time, and i got goosebumps, again. its amazing.
 
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featherssss said...
May 13, 2011 at 2:52 pm:
this is a really interesting poem, i can relate to it because my parents were very strict and always held me back. good writing (:
 
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miranda.paille said...
May 13, 2011 at 1:03 pm:
this poem is great(:
 
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Hmc15 said...
May 11, 2011 at 3:48 pm:
pretty awesome :)
 
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blueanddark said...
May 11, 2011 at 2:17 pm:
i love this! i was so intrigued.
 
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cutegirl97 said...
May 8, 2011 at 6:08 pm:
this is a very interesting poem! keep writing!
 
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treysongzwife said...
May 7, 2011 at 4:35 pm:
 i love this poem it's the best
 
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JustinBieberGirlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 6, 2011 at 8:34 am:
i loooovvvvveee this poem, it's so good, keep writing more
 
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Jariel V. said...
May 5, 2011 at 5:19 pm:

wow thats fantastic check my wrighting out some time

 

 
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Cubster said...
May 5, 2011 at 3:58 pm:
Awesome. Truly and amazingly... awesome.
 
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