Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

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NonStopClem. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 10, 2012 at 2:58 pm
I genuinely love this poem, and have so much respect for you for being able to write it. I connect to it.. Also, I like how you played with the capitalization.  It's very e.e. cummings-esque. 
Gildedlily123 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 8, 2012 at 10:05 am
A probing look at the delicate relationship between parent and child; this poem has a surprising maturity that I enjoyed
sweetgirl70 replied...
Apr. 9, 2012 at 1:42 pm
yea kinda cool love the words that you used
Clg1688 said...
Apr. 6, 2012 at 2:00 pm

To my interpretation of this poem, it makes me think of parents over their children.

Love it!

ReneeB said...
Apr. 4, 2012 at 1:47 pm
I really love this poem. It easily paints a picture that the reader can visualize.
To me, this poem shows the smothering nature of parents, how they try to keep their children safe, despite how much their children want to get out and test the world on their own. Is this what you were going for?
WhereAmIWithinMyself said...
Apr. 2, 2012 at 7:10 pm

A great bildungsroman poem.

Also, if you want to help me answer the question "Where am I within myself - in my heart, my soul, or my mind?", check out my poetry pleasee. :)

Banana said...
Apr. 2, 2012 at 12:04 pm
Kristie1250 said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 12:25 pm
Wow.  That was really good.  Thank you for writing, and please keep doing so.
dragonfly95 said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 12:21 pm
i love it!this is so beautiful, it choked me up, check out my own work please!
leshaye said...
Mar. 29, 2012 at 2:42 pm
this is nice
Nooneknowsme said...
Mar. 28, 2012 at 5:32 am

Thank you for your comment!!

This is really fantastic!! 

Keep on reading my works, a new one which is waiting for approval is on the way!

Im sure you`ll like it

Luv2WriteNO1 said...
Mar. 27, 2012 at 7:54 am
This is amazing!
MissShah said...
Mar. 25, 2012 at 12:09 am
oh really lovely! soo touchy... keep it up!=]
c.c.haynes said...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:33 am
c.c.haynes said...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:29 am


A friend told me about all the comments she read in response to my poem, one in particular scolded me for not reading and/or responding. My apologies; I was busy studying English as an undergrad at the College of Staten Island. Meant some awesome poets there, such as, Cate Marvin, Jeffery McDaniel, Joushua Beckman, Jericho Brown, Tyehimba Jess, Patricia Smith, Gregory Pardlo, Terrance Hayes,Thomas Sayers Ellis, and recently I got to hear Major Jackson. Please check these folk... (more »)

avarose101 said...
Mar. 22, 2012 at 2:56 pm

i loved it. I could picture the whole story in my mind


c.c.haynes replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:49 am
USCG13 said...
Mar. 22, 2012 at 1:39 pm
Way to spe am the truth
c.c.haynes replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:37 am
SpreadUrWingzNFly said...
Mar. 21, 2012 at 4:46 pm
Totally beautiful and fearless and powerful, simply amazing, I would love if read a few of my poems and gave me sone constructive criticism
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