Life.

May 2, 2011
By Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
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Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me


Death should not come easily
It shouldn't be decided
By those who deem better
Than you,
Life should be lived
Freely and unconditionally 
Like love,
Sweet and wholesome 
The journey of life,
Starts before you're born
And the destination of life
Doesn't end at death,
It goes on forever
And forever it will go on,
Believe it or don't
Want it or don't 
But please, I beg,
See and smile
Because life is slowly stopping,
At least just for a while


The author's comments:
Hope you like it :)

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on Sep. 13 2011 at 3:55 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thanks! 

Mystiecub said...
on Sep. 4 2011 at 1:44 pm
Interesting theme in this poem, I like it! :) this is creative and, in fact, telling the truth :D

on Aug. 31 2011 at 3:22 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thank you! :)

on Aug. 31 2011 at 9:32 am
ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
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I really like the reasurring, peaceful imagery brought on by this poem. It's actually really soothing, and the one solid stanza helps further the feeling of continuity. 

One negative that caught my eye was the punctuation; if you have punctuation at the end of some lines, it's generally accepted that it should be at the end of all your lines. Also, I really like the idea of repitition for this poem, but I think you might be able to find better words to repeat than "don't." Lovely work though!


on Aug. 27 2011 at 5:09 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thank you! :) oh by the way i rated your poems justa minute ago, if you were wondering who it was!

Saysh PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 27 2011 at 5:06 pm
Saysh PLATINUM, Brentwood, California
31 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." ~E.L. Doctorow

'It goes on forever
And forever it will go on,' was my favorite part! I think this is my favorite of the ones i've read of yours! great writing and really thought-provoking! :D

 


on Aug. 24 2011 at 7:51 am
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
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Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thank you! and of course i'll keep writing :P! :)

on Aug. 23 2011 at 7:36 pm
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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This is really thought provoking and I like that! Great job; keep writing!

 


on Aug. 19 2011 at 9:16 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thank you! :)

on Aug. 19 2011 at 9:16 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thanks so much! :)

on Aug. 19 2011 at 9:15 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thanks! :)

on Aug. 19 2011 at 8:41 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Very good! I like the flow of it!

on Aug. 19 2011 at 8:37 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot." -Eleanor Roosevelt

I absolutely loved this, you have a great flow! 5/5!

on Aug. 18 2011 at 9:09 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
5 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

Good Job. It is really a great poem.

on Aug. 18 2011 at 7:10 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thanks! i'm happy you liked it! 

on Aug. 15 2011 at 7:18 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

This. Was. Awesome , and true and flowy. Loved it :)

on Aug. 13 2011 at 5:20 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thank you so much! it means a lot!! :)

on Aug. 13 2011 at 5:19 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thanks! and will keep that in mind! :)

Shayna121 GOLD said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 7:26 pm
Shayna121 GOLD, Port Charlotte, Florida
12 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am the master of my fate and the captain of my soul.

I love the rhyme scheme, the imagery, EVERYTHING! Great job!

Megan.J.B said...
on Jul. 28 2011 at 10:18 am
Megan.J.B, Sault Ste Marie, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Here's the real truth. There are eight million people in this city. And those teeming masses exist for the sole purpose of lifting the few exceptional people onto their shoulders. You, me? We're exceptional."
- Green Goblin. :)

I really liked this although I found "Want it or don't" a little awkward. I would have changed that to "want it or not." but that's just my opinion. 


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