Make Believe MAG

By Amanda Bush, Milan, IL

We were doomed from the beginning,
Blinded from the start,
But nothing can be done
To fool a happy heart.
With each smile and giggle,
Every embrace and every kiss,
We were shooting toward a happy ending,
And we missed.
Cinderella lost her slipper
And it was never found.
Prince Charming came too late,
Now no one’s sleeping sound.
Pillows are soaking wet,
Hopes are all lost.
No more dancing in the clouds.
Dreams have all been tossed.
The fairy-tale warmth has left us
As winter’s setting in.
The storybook reads the end,
But where should we begin?
Now your heart strives to be broken,
And you long for lonely nights
This time our ship is sinking
We’re going down without a fight.



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Lahari GOLD said...
on Oct. 29 2011 at 11:46 am
Lahari GOLD, Edison, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. Today is a gift. That\\\\\\\'s why its called the present.\\\\\\\"
— Eleanor Roosevelt

\\\\\\\"When life gives you lemons, make grape juice. Then sit back and watch as the world wonders how you did it.\\\\\\\'

This is really good! Wow.

This is AMAZING! The rhyme fits perfectly and the words are precisely chosen. Can you check out some of my work? 


Dudet95 GOLD said...
on Oct. 22 2011 at 11:25 am
Dudet95 GOLD, Ottawa, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
Your mom, if you don't know the past... You're doomed to repeat it.

You are a very good writer.This has very good rhyme to it, and you used very discriptive words which I love!Its such a sad poem but it relates more to real life actions, because sadly life is not all about happy endings.I love how you encorperated Cinderella into this story and prince charming.:)amazing job 

on Oct. 19 2011 at 9:37 am
Kelssssie BRONZE, Wilton, Iowa
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This is reallly good, and i can relate alot to it..(:

on Oct. 8 2011 at 7:06 pm
JojoMimi BRONZE, Portland, Oregon
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wow. very good

on Sep. 15 2011 at 11:40 pm
Wordscantsay BRONZE, Yuma, Arizona
1 article 1 photo 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
When she was just a girl she expected the world. But it flew away from her reach, so she ran away in her sleep...
- Coldplay

Love it , so sweet, sad and cute!!!! 10 out of 10!!!!

on Sep. 15 2011 at 9:22 am
AlwaysDanceInTheRain SILVER, Sidney, Nebraska
8 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everything happens for a reason.

Fantastic! You were really able to put a lot of emotion in it without it seeming too heavy. Great job! Keep writing

on Aug. 24 2011 at 8:23 am
UnleashYourMind, Oakland Park, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
It really doesn't matter what other people think, whatever makes you happy is what you should focus on.

This is pretty amazing.. it's so creative and different but true all the same. I absolutly love it. 5 stars :)

on Aug. 18 2011 at 7:48 pm
HateKnuckle SILVER, Peru, New York
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Very descriptive way to say its over. Loved the whole idea. 5 stars.

on Jul. 30 2011 at 11:12 am
EmmanuelGonzalez GOLD, West Orange, New Jersey
12 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never Give Up, Never Back Down." - Anonymous

It shows lots of meaning, and lots of truthful meanings to this work of art. I love it a lot. <3

on Jul. 26 2011 at 10:34 am
yousaypotato... SILVER, Peacedale, Rhode Island
9 articles 1 photo 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A good friend will bail you out of jail. But a best friend will be sitting right there with you saying 'Dang, we really screwed up this time.'"

i loved the mention of all the fairytale stories!!!!

on Jul. 18 2011 at 8:35 pm
whitstar27 GOLD, Edison, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
when life gives you lemons, make grape juice. Then step back and let the world wonder how you did it
and
when life gives you lemon, throw them back at life

I like how it didn't have a happy ending, because in reality there often isn't a happy ending or the ending we wanted.

on Jul. 18 2011 at 8:05 pm
Cryswithaly SILVER, Kokomo, Indiana
5 articles 1 photo 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
When I was 5 my mother told me the key to life is happiness. My teacher asked me what I wanted to be when I grew up. I wrote down happy. She said I didn't understand the assignment. I told her she didn't understand life.
-John Lennon (Revised)

Breathtaking and AMAZING.

on Jul. 11 2011 at 7:12 pm
EyesofBlueFire GOLD, Belleville, Illinois
15 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We are only as strong as we are united, as weak as we are divided." Dumbledore, Harry Potter, J.K. Rowling.

This truly took my heart for a ride. I was taken in at the very first line. Keep writing!

I could use a little feedback on my poetry, if you would check. :)


on Jul. 11 2011 at 7:02 pm
EllieMae SILVER, Severna Park, Maryland
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This is so lovely. I was hooked from the beginning. Your ryhtme and emotion portrayed is flawless. Very nice work.

on Jul. 11 2011 at 3:20 pm
I'm truly speechless...in a good way.

on Jul. 11 2011 at 10:58 am
ElleNicole BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"My role in society, or any artist's or poet's role, is to try and express what we all feel. Not to tell people how to feel. Not as a preacher, not as a leader, but as a reflection of us all."

Love it.

I need more feedback, I was wondering if you would rate/comment on my work... thanks if you do and keep writing. This piece is a treasure.


on Jul. 6 2011 at 12:12 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

u combine rhyme with meaning which is what i love about this poem

on Jun. 27 2011 at 3:24 pm
Captivating-Kay, La, California
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Favorite Quote:
A poet is, before anything else, a person who is passionately in love with language.
Breathe-in experience, breathe-out poetry.

love your poem .... very good

on Jun. 26 2011 at 9:26 pm
lifeloveyou1919 PLATINUM, Northfield, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
" Live, love, forget, bull , I'm gonna make the day you met me the day you regret."
-Julia Vain

you inspired me to write poetry thank you so much.

on Jun. 19 2011 at 11:29 am
maki_rain BRONZE, Rocklin, California
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Favorite Quote:
A hero is not a man more courageous than others, but a man courageous for a little while longer.

This was really good. I liked the flow. I think the last two lines are my favorite tho.


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