Make Believe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

We were doomed from the beginning,
Blinded from the start,
But nothing can be done
To fool a happy heart.
With each smile and giggle,
Every embrace and every kiss,
We were shooting toward a happy ending,
And we missed.
Cinderella lost her slipper
And it was never found.
Prince Charming came too late,
Now no one’s sleeping sound.
Pillows are soaking wet,
Hopes are all lost.
No more dancing in the clouds.
Dreams have all been tossed.
The fairy-tale warmth has left us
As winter’s setting in.
The storybook reads the end,
But where should we begin?
Now your heart strives to be broken,
And you long for lonely nights
This time our ship is sinking
We’re going down without a fight.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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EyesofBlueFire said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 7:12 pm

This truly took my heart for a ride. I was taken in at the very first line. Keep writing!

I could use a little feedback on my poetry, if you would check. :)

EllieMae said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 7:02 pm
This is so lovely. I was hooked from the beginning. Your ryhtme and emotion portrayed is flawless. Very nice work.
thefamoustapper.... said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 3:20 pm
I'm truly a good way.
ElleNicole said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 10:58 am

Love it.

I need more feedback, I was wondering if you would rate/comment on my work... thanks if you do and keep writing. This piece is a treasure.

savetheplanet said...
Jul. 6, 2011 at 12:12 pm
u combine rhyme with meaning which is what i love about this poem
ExpressWithinYouOut said...
Jun. 27, 2011 at 3:24 pm
love your poem .... very good
lifeloveyou1919 said...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 9:26 pm
you inspired me to write poetry thank you so much.
maki_rain said...
Jun. 19, 2011 at 11:29 am
This was really good. I liked the flow. I think the last two lines are my favorite tho.
faerest said...
Jun. 12, 2011 at 2:07 pm
this poem is soooo sad, its not a happy ending, but happy endings are what we're used to (well at least i am)...
HisPurePrincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 25, 2011 at 2:04 pm
Yep it's a beautiful poem, and I really like it.  I just don't know why my poem "Just Thinking" won't get published.  I think it's as good as this is.  Sorry, yours is really good, I think.
LifeIsButAPoem said...
May 6, 2011 at 10:12 pm
Apr. 25, 2011 at 8:48 pm
wow, this poem is honestly fabulous! I can see myself relating to it one day, when i go through a similar story!  I honestly think this poem is great!  keep up the good work
alwaysadreamer said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 9:49 pm
truly gifted! =)
Debbie1 said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 5:05 pm
Wow! this was really good! Well written, and kinda emotional. love it!
forgottenpenname This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 12:23 pm
Love it... I like how it starts out all happy cheery and all that and by the end it's like a splash of cold water in the face; reality. Fantastic job on this! :)
RFarage said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:25 pm
Great comparisons, great poem. (: !
kvater said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:14 pm
i really liked how they compared it to cinderella
Sierrah said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 6:22 pm
amazing :D
Free- said...
Mar. 25, 2011 at 4:50 pm


your rhyming was not annoying but worked beautifully with the flow and theme of your writing



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KelseyM.McNamara said...
Mar. 23, 2011 at 6:22 pm
really good! i liked how u compared it 2 cinderella! :)
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