Remembering

May 24, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."


The Sun smiles and tells a story
that no one has heard before,
but it doesn't have to be hidden,
or forgotten anymore.

The sea, wind and sky
were together as a whole.
The mountains, plains and deserts
were all part of the same soul.

The fire, rain and snow
came with all their power.
The lightning and the thunder
became frozen before the hour.

The trees, bushes and grasses
All held their mighty stance.
The birds, flies and fishes
were all given the chance.

But the Earth was meant to change,
so the Sun had to too.
And she forgot all she'd seen
And all she had been through.

But when the wind blows just right,
and when the waves calm in the sea,
The Sun remembers the beauty
and she shares her memory.


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on Jan. 6 2013 at 9:18 am
WritingLoverForever PLATINUM, Bowling Green, Ohio
32 articles 2 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's not about success; it's about significance.

No one can make you feel inferior without your consent.

Wow, this was amazing! Incredibly moving and beautifully crafted. I was so captivated by your word choice and phrasing. Excellent job, and would you mind checking out some of my work? I'd love an opinion from a writer as good as you. :)

on Aug. 1 2010 at 8:09 pm
cheyenneduhon PLATINUM, Lumberton, Texas
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You are an amazing writer, and that is an understatment. I hope you do not consider me a weird stalker strainger, you just completly captured me in by your writing. I would love to hear more about what you think of my writing, you are an Artist.

on May. 28 2010 at 9:02 pm
Guitarkid BRONZE, Waupaca, Wisconsin
1 article 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
We come to love not by finding a perfect person, but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly

Amazing! Something else like this would be great! I love it.

on May. 17 2010 at 9:03 pm
SeptJess16 BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
4 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Where classification is key, I want to erase the shred lines so I can be ME." - Stacey-Ann Chin

I really like this one , I heard it out loud and for some reason it sounded even better! Your words, the way you choose certain words and they flow sooo well together it's amazing I think it's a gift in a way. Amazing job. <3

on May. 17 2010 at 3:08 pm
KaraTaylor DIAMOND, Neptune, New Jersey
81 articles 17 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
"life isn't a matter of milestones, but of moments"

"experience is the name everyone gives to their mistakes."

"be as you wish to seem."

"it's better to be hated for what you are, than to be loved for what you are not."

this is really good! keep writing

on May. 11 2010 at 4:40 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

youre so poetic and creative and geniusitive and brilliantive that its making me nauseous-really but not really. 5 stars captain. 5 stars.

on May. 11 2010 at 3:36 pm
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
28 articles 4 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing songs is super intimate. It's a bit like getting naked"~ Gwen Stefani

Now I've read all your stuff and can't wait to read more!Thanks for commenting on my work, I'd love to hear what you think of my other stuff!!! You're a really great writer, don't ever stop!:)

on Apr. 21 2010 at 10:19 am
Ashlie94 BRONZE, Peru, Kansas
4 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't give up and don't give in.. cause the info you give out,you can't take back in.

AMAZING! I really like the way you put it together. This poem makes a lot of sense at the end but in the beginning your wondering just what exactly its about. I LOVED IT!! write more soon.

Ashlie.


on Mar. 30 2010 at 9:48 am
Lucy4himnotu ELITE, Richardson, Texas
148 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am Happy to The Point of Fear" -Ralph Waldo Emmerson

You have a tremendous rhythm in this poem, it is as an earlier comenter said, like the waves. What a beautiful concept :) I love it!

on Mar. 30 2010 at 3:05 am
lucy.wolf BRONZE, Melbourne, Other
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This poem is so magic! it flows like ocean waves :) love it so much!

on Mar. 26 2010 at 4:55 pm
Katiebrox3 BRONZE, Cape Coral, Florida
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
We loved with a love that was more than love. - Edgar Allan Poe

I love love love this.

<3 (:


on Mar. 13 2010 at 7:38 am
NeonCinderella SILVER, Santiago, Other
8 articles 0 photos 1 comment
this is a beautiful poem! the imagery is amazing and i think you have great talent :) it all blends together seamlessly, it truly is fantastic! i also want to thank you for commenting on my poem! :) im new and its so nice to have some feedback haha.

on Mar. 5 2010 at 9:29 pm
WaterQueen07 GOLD, Chardon, Ohio
16 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gerard Way: "Hey, girls, you're beautiful. Don't look at those stupid magazines with sticklike models. Eat healthy and exercise. That's all. Don't let anyone tell you you're not good enough. You're good enough, you are too good. Love your family with all your heart and listen to it. You are gorgeous, whether you're a size 4 or 14. It doesn't matter what you look like on the outside, as long as you're a good person, as long as you respect others. I know it's been told hundreds of times before, but it's true. Hey, girls, you are beautiful."

Wow, I love this poem! It paints a beautiful picture and leaves me at the end with something to think about.

on Mar. 4 2010 at 6:41 pm
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
70 articles 0 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a mountain on a beach"-Unknown
"Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It's remarkable how often those two traits coincide."-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

WOW OH MY GOSH, this is amazing! I honestly and truly love it. The imagery, the way the words flow together.. the meaning behind it. Wow

greg9381 GOLD said...
on Feb. 27 2010 at 1:16 pm
greg9381 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
12 articles 1 photo 50 comments
wow, this is great. I like the nature theme and the personification of the sun. good job!

on Feb. 25 2010 at 7:25 pm
VampiericRain GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
12 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
Would you like a side of epic with that fail?

Amazing word choice. I absolutly love it!

on Feb. 24 2010 at 9:11 pm
alexandraacreel GOLD, Lorton, Virginia
15 articles 8 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The soul would have no rainbow had the eyes no tears."

sorry, meant to write *the*.

I really love your work(:

anyone feel free to check out some of mine[;

on Feb. 24 2010 at 9:10 pm
alexandraacreel GOLD, Lorton, Virginia
15 articles 8 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The soul would have no rainbow had the eyes no tears."

wow! that was soo intense!(: I loved the imagery and all the passion that poured from your word choice. Your vocabulary and they rhyming kept the pace at a beautiful rate and it helped the piece flow amazingly!(: great job!

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on Feb. 24 2010 at 2:46 pm
LiveItUp GOLD, Congers, New York
13 articles 0 photos 10 comments
great imagery.

you're a mature writer. i like it. :)

on Feb. 24 2010 at 8:50 am
TimLeon. BRONZE, Hong Kong, Other
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Art is a human activity whose purpose is the transmission of the highest and best feelings to which men have attained.”

A very vivid depiction of the passage of time. I especially liked the the syntactic parallel phrases "the sea, wind and sky", "The fire, rain and snow"

The rhyme "power" with "hour" is phenomenal. Due to the nature of the slant rhyme, it sped up the pace, increased the suspense.

!


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