A Teenage Love Story 2

September 29, 2009
By JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
10 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want to look young and Beautiful, stand next to ugly old people.
(love this, hilarious :)


It was a warm June night, the sun just a glimpse above the horizon, with a slight breeze, brushing lightly against my skin. I could feel my dark brown hair flowing with the direction of the wind as i went round and round on the carousel. I closed my eyes and listened to the soft carnival music in the background of people talking and laughing. Even with my eyes closed, I could still see the joyful faces of children, their eyes wide with excitement, their parents watching them carefully and happily. I smiled, capturing the moment. I made sure to mentally write down all the details in my head, so I could retell it exactly to my parents. It’s been nearly a week since I last seen them and would be another month or two until I would see them again, although before leaving they made me promise to call them whenever I wanted but at least, once a week. Their 20th anniversary was last week, so as my gift, I decided to go stay with my aunt in California for the summer. As my mind drifted to my home back in New Jersey, I felt the carousel slowly come to a stop. I gently opened my eyes and let out a happy sigh. I laughed as I struggled to get off my carousel horse. Feeling dizzy, I went to find a place to sit. As I sat down on a nearby bench, my eyes swept the carnival for a corndog stand. Aha. Spotting one, I started walking towards it. Halfway there, knowing I was supposed to call my aunt at 9:30, I decided to see what time it was. I looked down in my bag and began searching for my phone. Suddenly, I ran into someone. “Sorr-“, I looked up unexpectedly into the striking blue eyes of a drop dead gorgeous stranger. He looked about my age, if not a year older and was an inch taller than me. No words could even begin to describe him.
My heart pounding, I tried to catch my breath. Just when I thought he couldn’t get any hotter, Gorgeous Stranger smiled, making his eyes twinkle and my conclusion rip into shreds. Finally catching my breath again, I tried to speak again. “Sorry, I wasn’t watching where I was going, I….My…..Sorry” I stuttered. He laughed, and then smiled again. “Don’t be”, he said. Even the sound of his voice made my heart explode. He held out his hand. “I’m Jonah, by the way “I held out my hand, meeting his. My hand tingled. “Skyler’ I said back, matching his smile. “Do you live around here? I don’t think I’ve seen you around town before.” Deep breathes, deep breathes, I thought to myself. “N-No, I’m just visiting my Aunt for the summer. I live in New Jersey. What about you??” I asked. “I moved here about five years ago from Portland Oregon, so I’ve lived here for some time. How long are you staying with your aunt?” His eyes seemed to sink into mine; making it seem as though each thing I said really mattered. As if I really mattered. My heart fluttered as though it were a butterfly trying to escape. The odd, yet amazing thing was, that, even though it was breathe taking, I loved the feeling of excitement. I wanted to jump up and scream, as though a bubbly volcano had erupted. I could feel it building inside me, as his eyes continued to stare into mine. I loved the way he_oh, wait, he asked me a question. It was hard to concentrate on anything when I was staring at him. He was so beautiful, with th-C***, I was doing it again. Okay, Okay, answer the question, Skyler. “F-F-For the summer”, I said. Ahhhh! Why do I keep stuttering? He probably thinks I have a speaking disorder, I thought. He smiled again.” Cool, maybe we can hang out sometime. I could show you around town, if you’d like”, he said. Oh yes, Skyler would like, Skyler would like Very Much…. “Sure, that sounds like fun. When would y-“, I started to ask, but suddenly I was cut off. “Jonah! I’ve been looking all over for you pookie poo! “ I turned to see who rudely interrupted me, and saw a gorgeous blonde walking toward us with two almost as equally gorgeous girls, one taller, the other average height. The one who was taller was also blonde, but the average height one was a brunette. Judging by the way the gorgeous blonde was walking just slightly ahead of them, I could tell she was the leader of their group. And judging by the look she was giving me, I could tell she wasn’t too fond of me. Great, I already have someone who hates my guts. I sighed. Super. They all seemed to walk in unison, and as if they owned the place, like they were better than everyone else. Their eyes weren’t exactly friendly. As they got closer, I could see two guys with them, who seemed to trail the other two like puppies, obviously their boyfriends. I realized in disappointment that the leader didn’t seem to have one, but apparently wanted one, by the seducing look she was giving Jonah. My stomach turned. “Hey Tara. Hey Steph, hey Cammie. What’s up John, Caleb?” Jonah said to them all, giving me an apologetic look. So the leader was Tara, the two behind her were Steph and Cammie, and the guys were John and Caleb,I thought, hoping I could remember which is which. As they reached where we were standing, Tara went and stood by Jonah; very close, I might add, while the others sort of circled around. Tara wrapped her arms around Jonah. “Where have you been, we looked all over for you!” she said. She gave me a dirty look. “Who are you? C***. Someone call B**** 911. I smiled at my little snide comment, and was tempted to laugh when I saw that my little grin seemed to annoy Tara. Jonah, however, seemed to look amused again. With a deep breath, I told myself that I would remain neutral if anything should happen. At least for now, HeHe. “Hi, I’m Skyler. I’m visiting here from New Jersey for the summer.”Nice. I smiled to myself. Lets just hope I could stay calm for the rest of the night.


The author's comments:
This is the first part edited and the second part. There will be more to come :)

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on Jan. 3 2011 at 3:17 pm

FYI: Post may rhyme with toast, but its not spelled the same way. 

Friendly Tip:)


on Jan. 3 2011 at 3:14 pm
I agree. it was too gumbled up. you should have different paragraphs when different people are talking, if you did that in the first place it wouldn't be as confusing. 

wetrqtqert said...
on Jan. 3 2011 at 12:39 pm
to long. got lost after fist sentance

on Jan. 3 2011 at 2:45 am
UnwantedNinja GOLD, Pretoria, Other
17 articles 0 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them.
Walt Disney

WOw i love the story when u make the next part u hav 2 tell me !!!!! You should write a book :)

on Nov. 20 2010 at 5:16 pm
omg i think iread that over like... a bajillion times!! its soo good!!!!! plz hurri and poast the other half rlllyy soon!!

JustMe212 GOLD said...
on Nov. 1 2010 at 2:18 pm
JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
10 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want to look young and Beautiful, stand next to ugly old people.
(love this, hilarious :)

lol huh? im sorta confused.....but thanks :)

on Oct. 29 2010 at 2:50 pm
i can't want to here wat happens LOL

on Oct. 29 2010 at 9:21 am
D_Beauty BRONZE, Euclid, Ohio
2 articles 1 photo 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God didn't promise days without pain, laughter without sorrow, sun without rain, but He did promise strength for the day, comfort for the tears, and light for the way."

P.S 

written by the white girl friend :D

 

and not in the bad way since im writing this too :)


on Oct. 29 2010 at 9:19 am
D_Beauty BRONZE, Euclid, Ohio
2 articles 1 photo 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God didn't promise days without pain, laughter without sorrow, sun without rain, but He did promise strength for the day, comfort for the tears, and light for the way."

I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPEENNNNSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!

  AGHHHHHHH


JustMe212 GOLD said...
on Oct. 11 2010 at 5:34 pm
JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
10 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want to look young and Beautiful, stand next to ugly old people.
(love this, hilarious :)

Sorry i havent written the whole story yet. I have a hard time staying with just one story. I'm going to try and find time to just finish the story but it may take a while. Again Sorry, and thank you guys for being patient :)

trblue GOLD said...
on Oct. 11 2010 at 8:45 am
trblue GOLD, Richmond, Virginia
14 articles 7 photos 141 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Too often we lose sight of life's simple pleasures. Remember, when someone annoys you, it takes 42 muscles in your face to frown. It only takes 4 muscles to extend your arm and slap that mother@#?!&* upside the head. "

over the summer i pulled some teenink stuff off the internet, and this pice of work was decided. i love how she got the jitter and i mad to only get 1/2 of the storie.

on Sep. 19 2010 at 11:53 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

Thank you, Cherie S.

on Sep. 15 2010 at 3:23 pm
lessthan3cherie BRONZE, Brockport, New York
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I agree with DreamWriter15, but the story seems a bit cliche. The topic of teenage romance is very delicate and not a lot of even published authors can make it believable. Sorry :/

JustMe212 GOLD said...
on Aug. 9 2010 at 12:01 pm
JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
10 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want to look young and Beautiful, stand next to ugly old people.
(love this, hilarious :)

lol thanks for the tip :)

on Aug. 2 2010 at 12:02 pm
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
14 articles 1 photo 279 comments

Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

wow. unlike most romance novels, this one actually sounds realistic.  cool.  and just a tip, can you make the paragraphs shorter?  cuz i kept on loosing my place.

on Jul. 11 2010 at 10:40 pm
sundaelover116 BRONZE, Ann Arbor, Michigan
3 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind" ~Dr. Suess

Great story!!! I wish I could write like that!!!

on Jul. 11 2010 at 6:55 pm
tianaxbiddy SILVER, Wareham, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Plot is character revealed by action."




-Aristotle

wow......itz really good. i love it!!!!

JustMe212 GOLD said...
on Jun. 30 2010 at 10:36 am
JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
10 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want to look young and Beautiful, stand next to ugly old people.
(love this, hilarious :)

"th-c***" is just another typo. It suppose to say "th-crap." Its like Skyler's train of thought. She starts thinking about Jonah going on and on, then she realizes Jonah just asked her a question. And Skyler was kidding. She only swore once. And Crap is not a bad word. And the "someone call b**** 911" was a joke. You know, like the show Nanny 911. If you still dont get it, then just erase that part in your mind and put in, "Crap. Someone call animal control." I'm pretty sure thats everything i can do to explain.

TuffGurl said...
on Jun. 29 2010 at 5:55 pm
what does "th-C***" mean??? and why does that girl swear so much like just randomly calling her "C***" and why would she call 911 a b****? 

JustMe212 GOLD said...
on Jun. 28 2010 at 4:08 pm
JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
10 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want to look young and Beautiful, stand next to ugly old people.
(love this, hilarious :)

Ummm, im not sure what you mean by all the capital letters, but the astrics after were a typo that kind of just happened. And it was Tara that siad the 'who are you?" and then Skyler was thinking the "Crap. Someone call bit** 911." If you still dont get it, just let me know.


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