A Teenage Love Story 2

September 29, 2009
By JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
10 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want to look young and Beautiful, stand next to ugly old people.
(love this, hilarious :)


It was a warm June night, the sun just a glimpse above the horizon, with a slight breeze, brushing lightly against my skin. I could feel my dark brown hair flowing with the direction of the wind as i went round and round on the carousel. I closed my eyes and listened to the soft carnival music in the background of people talking and laughing. Even with my eyes closed, I could still see the joyful faces of children, their eyes wide with excitement, their parents watching them carefully and happily. I smiled, capturing the moment. I made sure to mentally write down all the details in my head, so I could retell it exactly to my parents. It’s been nearly a week since I last seen them and would be another month or two until I would see them again, although before leaving they made me promise to call them whenever I wanted but at least, once a week. Their 20th anniversary was last week, so as my gift, I decided to go stay with my aunt in California for the summer. As my mind drifted to my home back in New Jersey, I felt the carousel slowly come to a stop. I gently opened my eyes and let out a happy sigh. I laughed as I struggled to get off my carousel horse. Feeling dizzy, I went to find a place to sit. As I sat down on a nearby bench, my eyes swept the carnival for a corndog stand. Aha. Spotting one, I started walking towards it. Halfway there, knowing I was supposed to call my aunt at 9:30, I decided to see what time it was. I looked down in my bag and began searching for my phone. Suddenly, I ran into someone. “Sorr-“, I looked up unexpectedly into the striking blue eyes of a drop dead gorgeous stranger. He looked about my age, if not a year older and was an inch taller than me. No words could even begin to describe him.
My heart pounding, I tried to catch my breath. Just when I thought he couldn’t get any hotter, Gorgeous Stranger smiled, making his eyes twinkle and my conclusion rip into shreds. Finally catching my breath again, I tried to speak again. “Sorry, I wasn’t watching where I was going, I….My…..Sorry” I stuttered. He laughed, and then smiled again. “Don’t be”, he said. Even the sound of his voice made my heart explode. He held out his hand. “I’m Jonah, by the way “I held out my hand, meeting his. My hand tingled. “Skyler’ I said back, matching his smile. “Do you live around here? I don’t think I’ve seen you around town before.” Deep breathes, deep breathes, I thought to myself. “N-No, I’m just visiting my Aunt for the summer. I live in New Jersey. What about you??” I asked. “I moved here about five years ago from Portland Oregon, so I’ve lived here for some time. How long are you staying with your aunt?” His eyes seemed to sink into mine; making it seem as though each thing I said really mattered. As if I really mattered. My heart fluttered as though it were a butterfly trying to escape. The odd, yet amazing thing was, that, even though it was breathe taking, I loved the feeling of excitement. I wanted to jump up and scream, as though a bubbly volcano had erupted. I could feel it building inside me, as his eyes continued to stare into mine. I loved the way he_oh, wait, he asked me a question. It was hard to concentrate on anything when I was staring at him. He was so beautiful, with th-C***, I was doing it again. Okay, Okay, answer the question, Skyler. “F-F-For the summer”, I said. Ahhhh! Why do I keep stuttering? He probably thinks I have a speaking disorder, I thought. He smiled again.” Cool, maybe we can hang out sometime. I could show you around town, if you’d like”, he said. Oh yes, Skyler would like, Skyler would like Very Much…. “Sure, that sounds like fun. When would y-“, I started to ask, but suddenly I was cut off. “Jonah! I’ve been looking all over for you pookie poo! “ I turned to see who rudely interrupted me, and saw a gorgeous blonde walking toward us with two almost as equally gorgeous girls, one taller, the other average height. The one who was taller was also blonde, but the average height one was a brunette. Judging by the way the gorgeous blonde was walking just slightly ahead of them, I could tell she was the leader of their group. And judging by the look she was giving me, I could tell she wasn’t too fond of me. Great, I already have someone who hates my guts. I sighed. Super. They all seemed to walk in unison, and as if they owned the place, like they were better than everyone else. Their eyes weren’t exactly friendly. As they got closer, I could see two guys with them, who seemed to trail the other two like puppies, obviously their boyfriends. I realized in disappointment that the leader didn’t seem to have one, but apparently wanted one, by the seducing look she was giving Jonah. My stomach turned. “Hey Tara. Hey Steph, hey Cammie. What’s up John, Caleb?” Jonah said to them all, giving me an apologetic look. So the leader was Tara, the two behind her were Steph and Cammie, and the guys were John and Caleb,I thought, hoping I could remember which is which. As they reached where we were standing, Tara went and stood by Jonah; very close, I might add, while the others sort of circled around. Tara wrapped her arms around Jonah. “Where have you been, we looked all over for you!” she said. She gave me a dirty look. “Who are you? C***. Someone call B**** 911. I smiled at my little snide comment, and was tempted to laugh when I saw that my little grin seemed to annoy Tara. Jonah, however, seemed to look amused again. With a deep breath, I told myself that I would remain neutral if anything should happen. At least for now, HeHe. “Hi, I’m Skyler. I’m visiting here from New Jersey for the summer.”Nice. I smiled to myself. Lets just hope I could stay calm for the rest of the night.


The author's comments:
This is the first part edited and the second part. There will be more to come :)

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Chimercy said...
on Jan. 18 2017 at 9:53 pm
Can u please complete this story?
It is not complete yet and it is getting more interesting.... Arhn

on Sep. 6 2016 at 10:34 am
adventuregirl331 PLATINUM, Los Angeles, California
21 articles 2 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want something in life...reach out and grab it.

will there be a part 2 ??

Raja said...
on May. 6 2016 at 4:18 am
Very nice, if permission given, i love to do short movie.

Raja said...
on May. 6 2016 at 4:18 am
Very nice, if permission given, i love to do short movie.

CianaB GOLD said...
on Jan. 27 2016 at 5:13 pm
CianaB GOLD, Kennett Square, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 34 comments
I really liked this story, I just wish you had separated it into paragraphs.

M.Awan said...
on Dec. 16 2015 at 3:26 am
Good work
but its too short...

Aiasha said...
on Sep. 29 2015 at 10:22 am
Nice one short and swt but it could be more better

Srl102 said...
on Jul. 29 2015 at 12:24 pm
That was the best report ever

Come on said...
on May. 28 2015 at 7:28 pm
Nice grammar there.

Roxxy said...
on May. 23 2015 at 1:53 pm
love this.... very moving

Kazuya said...
on May. 7 2015 at 7:00 pm
This really helped me, thanks, I can really relate, you have some serious talent though: )

Megan said...
on Mar. 9 2015 at 10:00 pm
I already love this .. Dying to read the rest ..I don't even read I just got bored but now I want to read the rest . I hope skyler gets Jonah but has to win him first .

shaoni666 said...
on Feb. 6 2015 at 3:48 am
Waiting for the next part

Poodle69 said...
on Feb. 1 2015 at 4:22 am
OMG when is the next part coming out I'm dying to read more!!

on Oct. 24 2012 at 9:53 am
NoMercy666 BRONZE, Goose Creek, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It aint no sin to be glad you're alive." -Springsteen

THANK YOU, finally, someone else knows the use of the comment option.

skysky2230 said...
on Oct. 2 2012 at 11:42 am
skysky2230, New Palestine, Indiana
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My name is Skyler!!! XD Hahaha!!! I like this story, can't wait until part three!!!

on Sep. 11 2012 at 5:50 am
Madu_Bala BRONZE, Colombo, Other
4 articles 1 photo 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
To unpathed waters, undreamed shores - Shakespeare

What can be more tragic than to feel the boundlessness of the surrounding beauty and to be able to see in it its underlying mystery... and yet to be aware of your own inability to express these large feelings… Isaak Levitan

that's what I thought too, but the writing style is perfect!

on Sep. 10 2012 at 5:20 pm
foreverHope BRONZE, New Bedford, Massachusetts
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I knew you would be right beside me the day i died. I just didn't realize you would be holding the knife"



























-Mikaeyla

Its the perfect love story. I like how Skyler embarises herself but Jonah doesn't even care. Really sweet!!!

cat15 said...
on Jul. 6 2012 at 11:17 pm

Yeah, sorry, but I'm not sure why this is so popular...the word choice is okay, but there are some major spelling and grammatical errors, and I was also really confused by the part where the mean girl (or is it the narrator?) insults the narrator (or is it the mean girl?) 

Also, it was really kind of clicheish. "I stared at the most gorgeous guy I have ever seen..."  Maybe try to work on some elements, make it a bit more unique and unusual. 

Has potential...just needs WORK. But your word choice is, for the most part, pretty good. Maybe try to cut down on the self - description. 


MGRobinson said...
on Apr. 9 2012 at 6:13 pm
good start but sounds ALOT like the last song. Several gramatical errors but it still shows great promise




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