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My First Kiss
We sat there on his balcony looking at the stars on a summer night. The night sky is pitch black, well is suppose to be, the stars make the sky brighter. All of a sudden his arm went around my waist and that shocked me. It was unexpected. I didn't know what to say. I turned around to find his shining blue eyes staring down at me. I was speechless. The love that was in his eyes, it made skin tingle in a good way. I was afraid what will happen next so I turned away and looked at the sky. "Hey is that the big dipper over there?" I asked. I really didn't see the big dipper I just wanted to say something to break that seemed like an everlasting silence. " No thats the not the big dipper." He said queitly and content. Then he moved the arm the was around my shoulders to my waste as he moved a little bit closer.I felt his eyes staring at me trying to read my expression, my mind. A shiver sped down my spine as he started caressing my back. I turned to stare back at him not expecting anything. Until he kissed me and his lips stayed on mine for what seemed like a forever. It was so tender. caring and soft. Just like what I hoped my first kiss to be like. When it was over I knew everything had just changed between us and that made me a bit scared.
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This was adorable and sweet. I loved it. Please keep writing!
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A very cute story, but I felt as though there was a lack of emotion in some points. Grammatical and spelling mistakes are also in here. If you'd fix that up though, it would be a great piece.
Part of me wishes I could have a first kiss like that one, but all of me still gets that undescribeable feeling of pure happiness whenever I think about it. Anywayz, your story has good potential; just see if you can write it as if you were doing so at the same time you were experiencing everything. That might help get some emotion in the piece. :)
Honestly, I didn't really like it. It's a cute story, though. When you attepted to put in detail, you had incorrect spelling or grammer, which, for me, ruined it. I don't really care for your writing style much. Keep practicing though, and you'll get better.
Also something I noticed was your lack of voice. You have no personality in this writing piece.
I would suggest to do all of your writing in Microsoft Word to easily correct any spelling or grammer mistakes.
just like a fairytale...
but fairytales are just fairytales, after all.
I L O V E D it! Super cute! I wish my first kiss had been something like that ;)
I'm new here and a couple of weeks ago i posted some of my work. Please read?
