My First Kiss

September 8, 2009
By Anonymous

We sat there on his balcony looking at the stars on a summer night. The night sky is pitch black, well is suppose to be, the stars make the sky brighter. All of a sudden his arm went around my waist and that shocked me. It was unexpected. I didn't know what to say. I turned around to find his shining blue eyes staring down at me. I was speechless. The love that was in his eyes, it made skin tingle in a good way. I was afraid what will happen next so I turned away and looked at the sky. "Hey is that the big dipper over there?" I asked. I really didn't see the big dipper I just wanted to say something to break that seemed like an everlasting silence. " No thats the not the big dipper." He said queitly and content. Then he moved the arm the was around my shoulders to my waste as he moved a little bit closer.I felt his eyes staring at me trying to read my expression, my mind. A shiver sped down my spine as he started caressing my back. I turned to stare back at him not expecting anything. Until he kissed me and his lips stayed on mine for what seemed like a forever. It was so tender. caring and soft. Just like what I hoped my first kiss to be like. When it was over I knew everything had just changed between us and that made me a bit scared.

The author's comments:
This is how i wanted my first kiss to be like.

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on May. 4 at 9:30 am
thefanfictionwritingsidekick02 GOLD, Holly Springs, North Carolina
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Magical, Disney-esque, not enough words to describe the beauty of this piece...excellent work!

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on Jun. 7 2015 at 8:22 pm
mRamos BRONZE, Pinon Hills, California
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You write beautifully, I love how descriptive you are! It was magical, but completely unlike my first kiss. Mine was completely not how I was expecting it. Your magical kiss will come one day, don't worry :) keep up the amazing job!

on Sep. 17 2012 at 1:27 pm
Everlasting_Love SILVER, Burbank, Illinois
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This article was VERY good. Very descriptive and I know this sounds crazy but that was my first exactly. Donw to sitting on his porch with the stars shining down on us(: Your first kiss will be amazing even if it's not exactly like that(:

wombat said...
on Aug. 26 2012 at 11:04 am
This is pretty, I don't mean to hate in any way at all, but I think this website is about writing and sharing work, as well as critiquing and growing as a writer/artist, right? The detail in this was good, and it carried a lot of emotion and honesty. However, the grammar wasn't really that great and neither was the description or basically, the content was wonderful and sweet, but it sort of lost some of it's magic through the immaturity of the writing style. :/ Just an oppinion :)

on Jun. 21 2012 at 11:32 pm
writer3499 GOLD, New Bedford, Massachusetts
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really great!! the emotion and detail was fantastic...i want my first kiss to be that special. Awesome story! 

on Mar. 12 2012 at 5:39 pm
writingandwondering BRONZE, Downers Grove, Illinois
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Awww! This was so sweet and romantic! Great job on the detail and really capturing the emotion of the story! The only thing I would suggest is proof reading before you post. This truely grabs and holds the readers attention making them crave more! I hope my firtst kiss is as magical as your story! Great job and keep up the good work!

on Jan. 11 2012 at 1:18 pm
Goddess PLATINUM, Connellsville, Pennsylvania
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on Dec. 6 2011 at 11:20 pm
michaela mrianda BRONZE, Temporary, Other
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wonderful to me it feels as if that story could go on forever

ILYx3 said...
on Dec. 6 2011 at 5:35 am
ILYx3, Sydney, Other
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Every bit you wrote made my heart melt <3 (Happens whenever i read something extremely romantic) never been kissed before, but hope my first one would be like this!

on Nov. 14 2011 at 10:54 pm
sarah4president SILVER, Santa Clara, California
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so simple... and that's what makes it so good.

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on Nov. 14 2011 at 1:44 pm
ChantelleK., Toronto, Other
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This is adorable. A few grammatical errors but great otherwise.

My first kiss was with my friend playing truth or dare, so I don't think it really counts. :P

on Aug. 18 2011 at 9:51 pm
prettylittlewriter BRONZE, Villa Park, California
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awww thats cute. :)

on Jul. 5 2011 at 9:58 pm
singingwriter14 BRONZE, Chester, New York
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That was soo sweet. Hope my first kiss will be like this! :-D

on Jun. 26 2011 at 3:06 pm
introducingshelby GOLD, San Diego, California
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Buaha[x I loved it.

Mystiecub said...
on Jun. 14 2011 at 7:49 am

O.O WOW that was awesome!! lol, i've already read it countless times, phenomonal job!

soon i'll have my own article describing my first kiss, if you'd like to check it out :)

on Jun. 13 2011 at 10:58 am
SabreEleven DIAMOND, Madeira, Ohio
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haha I was thinking the same thing :)

on May. 22 2011 at 7:29 pm
iL0v3him BRONZE, Alamosa, Colorado
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oh goodness.... this made me melt!!! haha i wish my first kiss was like that... although mine was by a vending machine... but very nice work keep it up!(:

on May. 22 2011 at 4:33 pm
BlairJay SILVER, Lake Havasu City, Arizona
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Awh, that was so sweet! :)

My first kiss was something along the lines of this!

on Apr. 27 2011 at 7:49 am
babagirl BRONZE, Jackson, Ohio
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funny my firs kiss was on august 24 2006 10:34 im 16 now wow its been a minuet :)


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on Apr. 8 2011 at 10:14 am

that was so sweet


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