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The tears poured off her eyelids; slid down her cheeks; fell to the floor. Slowly she sank to the ground, trembling slightly. Her breath came in deep sobs, wracking her chest. She barely had enough air. She did not hear the soft footfalls coming ever closer. She did not see him as he sat down next to her. She did, however, feel as his arm wrapped around her shoulders. Turning slightly, the girl buried her face in his shoulder. Her friend held her tighter, resting his head in her soft chestnut curls.

The two of them sat that way for what felt like hours; the girl sobbing loudly on the boy’s shoulder, the boy holding her quietly, steadfastly. Finally, the girl released her last tear. She looked up at the boy, eyes red from crying, cheeks flushed. He turned to her, a small crooked smile on his lips. To the girl’s surprise, tears were slipping down his face as well. “Why are you crying?” she asked softly, voice cracking. The boy considered the question for a second.

“I am crying because you are crying,” he replied truthfully as yet another tear trickled down his handsome face. His smile was still there, unwavering.

The girl stared at him with wide eyes. He stared back at her. A chill like an electric current flowed through both of them. The air around them tingled with static. Slowly, as if pulled by some invisible force, the two teenagers moved closer. Their faces were within a hair’s breath of each other’s. “Why me?” she whispered. “Why did you choose me?” Her eyes darted back and forth, looking for an answer written on his face. “You are the only one who’s real. The only one out of all those girls who knows what it means to truly love someone. Even though he broke your heart, you just keep going. I like that. I think… I think I may even love that.”

His eyes gleamed with a passion long suppressed. “I think I may love you.” His sweet breath lingered on her lips. The girl’s heart began to beat frantically, as if trying to keep up with her rapidly changing emotions. “I think I may love you too,” she admitted.

Without meaning to, the girl shut her eyes. The two leaned even closer, closing the gap between them. His soft lips pressed against hers. She wrapped her arms around his neck, and his arms coiled around her waist. The kiss deepened.

Gently, they pulled apart. Both were smiling softly. “Thank you,” the girl said under her breath, so quiet that the boy sitting right next to her wasn’t sure he had heard her at first.

“For what?” She stared deeply into his eyes. He held her gaze, reciprocating the intensity. “For giving me a reason to live again. For saving me from falling.”

“Anytime. Thank you, too. Thanks for letting me in. Thanks for not pushing me away.”

At the same time, the two teenagers said, “I love you,” sealing their fate.

The two leaned in closer, their foreheads, then lips, pressing against the other’s.



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Lindsey_O said...
Mar. 6, 2011 at 3:02 pm:
okay, sorry guys, but I don't really have too much time lately, so personally thanking every person is starting to become a challenge XD But I do read and appreciate all comments! :) I hope you liked this, and I hope you read some of my more reccent work (this was from two, almost three years ago now.  And I'd like to hope my writing style has improved a bit since then XD)
Thank you everyone <333
 
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IamtheshyStargirl said...
Mar. 4, 2011 at 5:14 pm:

This is cute, though there's something about the writing style that I find to be lacking.

You are very good with description and imagery, keep up the good work :)

 
Lindsey_O replied...
Mar. 6, 2011 at 2:58 pm :
Thank you!
 
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jenniraffe said...
Mar. 4, 2011 at 2:57 pm:

i love this. this is great! keep writing!check out my work if you want.

my only article so far is romance fiction called "My Favorite Picture"

 
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TheUnknownTeenager7 said...
Mar. 4, 2011 at 8:05 am:
This story is adorable! I love it!
 
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VATSVD said...
Feb. 24, 2011 at 10:39 am:
I LOVE your story!! Is this somethign that really happened to you?!
 
musicprincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 27, 2011 at 8:33 pm :
I LOVE THIS!!! You're writing style is absolutlely fabulous.
 
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DanicaPage said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 8:24 pm:

I definitely like this story. Excellent work. I enjoyed your writing style.

As for being rushed, I don't necessarily agree with those comments.

You were vague (a good thing). We don't know how long they have known each other or anything like that.

I loved the emotion contained within this piece. Keep up the good work!

 
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Bianca S. said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 2:40 pm:
Wow, this is realistic. I can see this happening between two people who love each other. That's amazing :) I love this!
 
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smith said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 9:46 am:
wonderful....keep up the good work.
 
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SatanRose said...
Jan. 31, 2011 at 4:11 pm:
short....to the point...and wonderful.
 
bigdreamsbigheart replied...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 8:31 am :

A-M-A-Z-I-N-G....Keep writing. And the title is perfect for the story.

Check mine out please :)

Thanks

 
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Anime_lover7 said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 4:48 pm:
lol! (see below) its a great story! hmm... try putting it in one of their perspectives.. i wonder what it'd be like! :3 i would love to see a sequel or an extended version of it! keep on writing! :D
 
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dara_elizabeth said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 4:47 pm:
beautiful:)<3
 
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CocoCrayz12 said...
Jan. 15, 2011 at 10:34 am:
So so CUTE!!!!!!! i love this!! HEY I LUV DIS!!!
 
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PoetLaureate07 said...
Jan. 1, 2011 at 7:02 pm:
...i..love...this... WONDERFUL!!!
 
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Mislead said...
Dec. 30, 2010 at 5:53 pm:
Awesome! Very put together and, well, PERFECT!!!!!!
 
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TrueHeartAndSoul said...
Dec. 28, 2010 at 6:00 pm:
you can relate to this but you dont realize you do until she whispers "why me?" its intensee!!(:
 
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kat12 said...
Dec. 25, 2010 at 6:24 pm:
This was really good! I loved it!!
 
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EveMarie said...
Dec. 22, 2010 at 7:55 pm:
a little cliche
 
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