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Intensity

June 13, 2009
By Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell


The tears poured off her eyelids; slid down her cheeks; fell to the floor. Slowly she sank to the ground, trembling slightly. Her breath came in deep sobs, wracking her chest. She barely had enough air. She did not hear the soft footfalls coming ever closer. She did not see him as he sat down next to her. She did, however, feel as his arm wrapped around her shoulders. Turning slightly, the girl buried her face in his shoulder. Her friend held her tighter, resting his head in her soft chestnut curls.

The two of them sat that way for what felt like hours; the girl sobbing loudly on the boy’s shoulder, the boy holding her quietly, steadfastly. Finally, the girl released her last tear. She looked up at the boy, eyes red from crying, cheeks flushed. He turned to her, a small crooked smile on his lips. To the girl’s surprise, tears were slipping down his face as well. “Why are you crying?” she asked softly, voice cracking. The boy considered the question for a second.

“I am crying because you are crying,” he replied truthfully as yet another tear trickled down his handsome face. His smile was still there, unwavering.

The girl stared at him with wide eyes. He stared back at her. A chill like an electric current flowed through both of them. The air around them tingled with static. Slowly, as if pulled by some invisible force, the two teenagers moved closer. Their faces were within a hair’s breath of each other’s. “Why me?” she whispered. “Why did you choose me?” Her eyes darted back and forth, looking for an answer written on his face. “You are the only one who’s real. The only one out of all those girls who knows what it means to truly love someone. Even though he broke your heart, you just keep going. I like that. I think… I think I may even love that.”

His eyes gleamed with a passion long suppressed. “I think I may love you.” His sweet breath lingered on her lips. The girl’s heart began to beat frantically, as if trying to keep up with her rapidly changing emotions. “I think I may love you too,” she admitted.

Without meaning to, the girl shut her eyes. The two leaned even closer, closing the gap between them. His soft lips pressed against hers. She wrapped her arms around his neck, and his arms coiled around her waist. The kiss deepened.

Gently, they pulled apart. Both were smiling softly. “Thank you,” the girl said under her breath, so quiet that the boy sitting right next to her wasn’t sure he had heard her at first.

“For what?” She stared deeply into his eyes. He held her gaze, reciprocating the intensity. “For giving me a reason to live again. For saving me from falling.”

“Anytime. Thank you, too. Thanks for letting me in. Thanks for not pushing me away.”

At the same time, the two teenagers said, “I love you,” sealing their fate.

The two leaned in closer, their foreheads, then lips, pressing against the other’s.



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on Nov. 5 2009 at 3:42 pm
live.love. BRONZE, Canton, Ohio
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keep writing..you are great

TeaganOlivia said...
on Nov. 5 2009 at 3:02 pm
TeaganOlivia, Someplace, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Today is Yesterday's Tomorrow.
Certainty of death, small chance of success... What are we waiting for? :D ♥
Pippin: "Anyways you need people of intelligence on this sort of...mission. Quest. Thing."
Merry: "Well that rules you out Pip," :D ♥
There are some people who live in a dream world, and there are some who face reality; and then there are those who turn one into the other."
---Douglas Everett

That was so good!!!!

on Nov. 5 2009 at 1:13 pm
oh my i might cry that was great!!!!!!!!!! way to go keep writeing

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Nov. 3 2009 at 5:29 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

good for you! i'm glad it all worked out! :D

on Nov. 3 2009 at 2:55 pm
JordanNicole SILVER, Spartanburg, South Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Love is strange, powerful, and sneaky. You won\'t know it until you find it...and when you have it, never let it go!\" ~JordanNicole

I told him how I feel. Turned out that he feels the same way... :) He assured me that it wouldn't change our friendship and that he would always be here for me no matter what happens. We're still trying to decide wether or not to go out. Hopefully someday we will; but right now neither of us are ready to take that leap...Keep you updated.

on Nov. 3 2009 at 2:51 pm
JordanNicole SILVER, Spartanburg, South Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Love is strange, powerful, and sneaky. You won\'t know it until you find it...and when you have it, never let it go!\" ~JordanNicole

Thanks. I told him last night how I feel and it felt Great. He told me that it would never change our friendship and that he would always be here for me no matter what happens....He does feel the same about me and we're deciding wether or not we should go out. We've been friends for the past eight months and I think it will feel kinda weird if there's anything more. Hopefully someday there will be; but we're not ready to take that leap yet.

on Nov. 2 2009 at 8:18 pm
I agree. You should just tell him how you feel, and believe me, i know how hard that is. You can get someone else to 'gossip on you' (someone supposedly gossiping to him. and telling him you like him.) or, you could tell him yourself, at a time when he's distracted. Not the way you' think Like..say at a football game, and a certain team he likes is winning. More like after the game, and your alone, waiting for a ride home, and you could say "I know this is awkward at the time, and i know you probably don't feel the same way, i just want you to know, i have feelings for you." and boom...its done. And if he doesn't feel the same way, then just ask him if you can still be friends. Hope this helps :)

on Nov. 2 2009 at 6:07 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

I agree! I loved this!!!!!!!!!!!!! Keep going!!!! ;)

on Nov. 2 2009 at 5:49 pm
Life-in-between96 BRONZE, Bellevue, Nebraska
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This is beautiful piece of writing and made me a little upset when it ended. you should really try to develop this one into something more.

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Nov. 2 2009 at 5:14 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

of course! I haven't read any of her books yet, but I plan to. And I would love to read your book! Sounds interesting!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Nov. 2 2009 at 5:10 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Thank you everyone for your comments! It really means a lot to hear what you all think about my writing!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Nov. 2 2009 at 5:08 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

well, it depends on what you want to do. You could tell him you like him, and there's the possibility that he likes you too. You could not tell him, and just try to be friends. You could also tell him, but he may say he doesn't reciprocate the feelings. Another possibility that I've tried before is have one of your friends ask him if he likes you. I'm not sure what you should do exactly, since I don't know exactly what your situation is. Maybe someone else here has some ideas on what you should do!

KIMI said...
on Nov. 2 2009 at 5:07 pm
Thats nice Iam writing a book too I am actually going to post the first half on teen ink mine is a mixture of Charles Dickens a nd Jane Austen you know who she is right?

on Nov. 2 2009 at 4:54 pm
KiraKira PLATINUM, Cardiff By The Sea, California
35 articles 0 photos 217 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not pity the dead, Harry. Pity the living, and above all, pity those who live without love -Albus Dumbledore

This is beautiful. Absoloutley love it. I really felt the characters. They are deep, though you don't know much about them as a reader, and yet they speak to the reader. Perfect.

on Nov. 2 2009 at 4:39 pm
JordanNicole SILVER, Spartanburg, South Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Love is strange, powerful, and sneaky. You won\'t know it until you find it...and when you have it, never let it go!\" ~JordanNicole

I absolutely love this piece. When I read that it was like I was the girl crying with her guy friend there comforting her. And in the end when they declared their love for each other...amazing! I wish my guy friend would do that. I'm actually falling for him and I don't know what to do... If you have any advice pls comment. I really need the help, Lindsey. Check out some of my work and post a comment. Keep up the good work.

biddycakes said...
on Nov. 2 2009 at 4:09 pm
biddycakes, Charlotte, North Carolina
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one word.....fantastic!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Nov. 2 2009 at 2:03 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

wow! haha thanks! and i certaintly hope so! if only i can finish my book first!

on Nov. 2 2009 at 1:26 pm
kayx3ftw PLATINUM, Woodbridge, New Jersey
46 articles 4 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You don't get another chance, Life is no Nintendo game"- Eminem

amazing...

KIMI said...
on Nov. 2 2009 at 11:56 am
That had a very strong beiginning and was really good I really liked it and i also liked how you didn't explain why they were cying thats what keept me reading good job you may be the next Jane austen!

on Oct. 10 2009 at 9:39 am
xxxVanessaxxx SILVER, Alexander, Arkansas
9 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"i CaNt Be AwAy fRoM hEr BeLlA, iT hUrTs ToO mUcH." (Jacob from the breaking dawn book)

ooooh! i loved it! i want to fall in love that way! i dream of that moment everytime my heart breaks! i'm crying again. ;)


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