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What could a baby girl of about 5yrs old would say to her daddy, when he beats her mercilessly for nothing,"Please daddy don't beat me for something that I haven't done, it was not my mistake to be a girl, yet I apologize "SORRY DADDY!!""






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VartikaSinghSikarwar said...
Feb. 28, 2015 at 7:15 am
Thankyou! I will keep on contributing.
 
Rayme said...
Feb. 28, 2015 at 4:40 am
Okay this is awesome. Proud you are doing great things and working on great projects. Very nice.
 
VartikaSinghSikarwar said...
Feb. 27, 2015 at 1:39 pm
Thankyou! I'll keep that in mind.
 
Amai-kun This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 27, 2015 at 1:31 pm
I like the subject matter here and the length and general style. I think you could improve some of the line breaks by putting them in different places to have a better rhythm and perhaps doing a general run-through to edit the grammar and some of the words. For example, it would be more proper to say "a little girl of only five years old" or "a little girl of five years old" to avoid sounding unprofessional.
 
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