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Broken Heart

June 15, 2013
By DarknessHasFallen GOLD, Broomfield, Colorado
DarknessHasFallen GOLD, Broomfield, Colorado
12 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm fine. I just feel like I'm shattered into hundred of little shards of glass and I'm going to hurt everybody who loves me.


Do you know what a broken heart feels like? It feels like shattered glass piercing your lungs as you try to hold back the screams and tears of despair. Desperation grips you with old, knowing hands that seem like they will never let go. The memories play in the back of your head like a romantic tragedy. You silently wish to be held in the other person's arms. Your hand still reaches out, wishing to be grasped by another but instead, feels nothing but air. Cold fills every space within you, because to you, there is no sun anymore. You ask the stars questions that will never be answered. You feel like if the only way to remember how to love is to feel miserable you would do it. All you want, all you need is a reason to survive. This is what my broken heart feels like.


The author's comments:
Well this piece describes how my broken heart feel like a after a breakup. Which happens to much I think.

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on May. 21 2014 at 5:02 pm
DarknessHasFallen GOLD, Broomfield, Colorado
12 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm fine. I just feel like I'm shattered into hundred of little shards of glass and I'm going to hurt everybody who loves me.

Thank you so much.  I really appreciate the feedback. I think that you should read some of my other work. And if you have any sugestions on how I can make any of them better let me know. Also If you would like a personalized story check out my friends page. If you are interested in checking out my friends work let me know.

on Jul. 28 2013 at 2:32 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

This is exactly how a heart break fills like you hit it on the nail. And your imagery and metaphors are amazing. This is my favorite cause its so relatable. 5/5 stars

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jul. 8 2013 at 6:17 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

This is beautiful! The use of metaphors and figurtive language is phenomenal and deserves multiple applause. I absolutely loved this, although the title seems a bit cliche, and this piece doesnt deserve that kind of ranking. Other than that, brilliant!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 8 2013 at 4:57 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Boy, do I know what this feels like. I know exactly what you're talking about in this story. I like your descriptions and your comparisons. To me, they were poetic. Honestly, I think this could have been a poem. You should totally transition it from prose to poetry. Just a suggestion on my part. And sorry that you were heart broken. Hope you feel better.