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Feedback on Walking the Halls with Cancer

October 7, 2015
By rebeccaaaa GOLD, Brooklyn, New York
rebeccaaaa GOLD, Brooklyn, New York
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This article tells the inspiring story of a girl named Pia Phillips. It was beautifully written and told the story with perfect vocabulary. The reader really felt for Pia, and realized the hardship she was facing. It relays the message that nothing should define what you are other than your character. In Pia’s case, she believed that people would treat her differently and see her differently because she had cancer. The story was written in a way that flowed nicely and made it interesting to read.
I can connect to this story because I can relate to the struggles Pia was going through. She was going through the struggles of a typical teenager, despite her cancer, and worried that she would not fit in. Although she had cancer, she did not let that overcome her and exclude her from doing the things a normal teenager without cancer would do. To sum it up, Pia’s story touched me. It was written so effortlessly and it was a great piece.



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on Dec. 31 2015 at 12:16 am
evaberezovsky SILVER, MINNETONKA, Minnesota
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Thank you so much @rebeccaaaa for this feedback and your kind & uplifting words. I am so ecstatic that you were able to take away so much from the article and appreciate it as much as you did.