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The spring rain begins to fall
And washes the sun away.
The warm water dives to the ground,
Clings to leaves, wishing to stay.
As the sun fights for its rightful place
Melting away clouds of gray.
Soft breezes help chase them off
The clear, perfect skies of May.
Hearts leap, for summer is near
Far away from December sleighs.
Sunlight shines off the ocean,
Glimmers on the sand and lazed bay.
Green grass basks below,
And above, a rainbow.





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WTCTheRedGlove said...
Aug. 20, 2010 at 1:40 pm
Imaginative. Keep it up!
 
Katherine1 replied...
Aug. 20, 2010 at 1:42 pm
thank you, would you mind looking at my other stuff?
 
WTCTheRedGlove replied...
Aug. 20, 2010 at 1:43 pm
I already am. :-)
 
Katherine1 replied...
Aug. 20, 2010 at 1:47 pm
thank you. just tell me what you get from them. i also have 'chance the pain or remain scared' and 'stunning prospects' (not the official titles) in the forums.
 
mandapanda9736 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 18, 2010 at 2:43 pm
 pretty! very well written and has great rhyme! could you please take a look at some of my work? anything except "secrets" please! thanks!
 
gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 17, 2010 at 7:56 pm
That was so pretty! Very vivid imagery, very relatable, and great rhyming and flow.
 
KatLB said...
Aug. 15, 2010 at 8:25 pm
Thank you both, the feed back is truely appreciated.
 
riley... said...
Aug. 15, 2010 at 8:11 pm

for starters, i am automatically in love with any poem starting with "on" something. haha

 

i agree with mrsneverjonas. brilliant imagery. great word usage that really painted a picture in my mind.

 
mrsneverjonas_899This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 14, 2010 at 3:20 pm
oh my goodness, that was brilliant. the words brought insight n imagery to me :) great job!! that was perfect
 
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