Him & Him

January 15, 2010
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Commandments stone on slave-prince mountain maul
Less pay rebuke from quiet burdens pained
Thy new deems obsolete hath heaven call
Weeping doves cast crimson, edicts inane
Virtuous bride veneer exalting fifth
Wed tender beguil’d hands dearth commonplace
Forsake poor ills cherishing dev’lish sift
Abstract His binding ring; expunge thy grace
Hath said adoration shall relish flaws
Perhaps claimed forth heeding His hail and beck
Yet so accept tragedies, tender claws
Vehement joys s’rrounding thy face and neck?
Discern, breed sheep, elude, lest He appease
Exist no truer words abode of these

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Monica said...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 5:20 am
Wow, very impressive Christina. Your mom told me you were a talented writer but I had no idea. Keep up the good work!
electrichearts replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 7:41 pm
Thanks, Monica!
Gommy said...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 10:30 pm
This is brilliant! I look forward to an exergesis of the text when we hang out this weekend.
You are awesome!
HBUSA said...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 2:17 pm
Beautifully written, what an amazing talent you have... keep writing and I'll definitely keep reading!
electrichearts replied...
Feb. 28, 2010 at 8:17 pm
thanks, stacey!
Reading Teacher said...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 12:18 pm
Wow! I am so impressed with your craft and the way in which your writing really speaks to the reader. You are a truly talented writer.
SillySyl said...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 10:26 am
WOW! This touches on every emotional string in my body. A TRUE writer you are!
Can't wait to see more of your work!
gleefulandjoyful said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 3:50 pm
this is very touching. i wish i could write like this
csarfati said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 3:43 pm
rhyme scheme, vocabulary, theme, PERFECT! 10/10!!
electrichearts replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:13 pm
you're very kind!
Acting_Rox said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 3:40 pm
You are truly and amazing writer! Keep up the amazing work!
ILovePurple715 said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 2:42 pm
christina!! you're such an amazing writer/poet! great job :D ♥
electrichearts replied...
Feb. 27, 2010 at 3:10 pm
i love you too <3 :D
BLM123 said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 2:31 pm
AMAZING! Perfect rhyming scheme and every thing! Obviouly a very talented writer!
writer614_93 said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 12:59 pm
for some reason, i can't vote, but I really love your sonnet! it's so deep and quite beautiful
iloveentourage1016_ said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 10:51 am
Your poem sounds very professional and the message you conveyed is phenomenal. You have quite the future ahead of you! Keep writing, I look forward to reading your coming pieces.
electrichearts replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:14 pm
Many thanks for your compliments.
sweetsymphony said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 10:16 am
jesus , this sounds so professional! the message is fantastic and unique and you could not have conveyed it better. 5 stars & keep writing. you'll go far!
liketheocean909 said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 10:14 am
this poem had me crying. keep up the awesome work! Go Girl!
Dancer727 said...
Jan. 25, 2010 at 10:41 pm
Omg christina this is beautiful!
I totally had to read this mag for english, it was so good. I didnt know u could write like this its so pretty
Its sarah btw from camp
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