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She spun alone in a poorly lit hall,
Her ivory gown twirling around the night,
Picturing in the room a royal ball,
When effortlessly, from out of her sight

Emerged another from against the wall,
Illuminating the dark without light,
And their palms, in the dark of love's enthrall,

Kissed to turn and twist into sweet delight.

But with the morn' the sun began to rise,
He did not remain with her, but instead,
When seeing dawn by looking through her eyes,
Without a word, he returned to his bed.
For of her love, he was never apprised
As she was invisible; she was dead.




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rebecca-rose This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 27, 2012 at 3:55 pm:
The last stanza gave me chills! I love this a lot, the depiction of the speaker is very vivid for me.  
 
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DallyDysfunctional said...
May 9, 2011 at 12:35 pm:

This is easily a favorite of mine.

(:

I adore it!

 
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devika said...
Dec. 6, 2010 at 9:06 am:
lovely......its so amazing
 
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dancer4life said...
Oct. 1, 2010 at 6:05 pm:
this was great! i love the first stanza.
 
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earthy_kat said...
Jan. 22, 2010 at 7:14 pm:
Very impressive. Keep up the good work.
 
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gabigal said...
Nov. 16, 2009 at 6:16 pm:
i lovvveee this!!!!!! awesomness
 
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bluemagnet22 said...
Oct. 23, 2009 at 3:12 pm:
Oooo I love it! Vry well written...and the flow absolutly perfect:) If you have the chance you should check out some of my poems;)
 
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This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 4:43 pm:
Beautiful:) And very descriptive. Keep it up:)
 
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Stephaniere This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 1:47 am:
This was beautiful, the words you used really painted a picture, I love all the descriptive words:)
 
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Sunshineyday said...
Oct. 13, 2009 at 2:31 pm:
i really dont like love-ish poems (or at least I don't write them) but this has good imagery and unbiasedelly judging it, I would say it is very very good.
 
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michaela said...
Oct. 13, 2009 at 12:25 pm:
You are so talented!
I loved it so much, I had to read it twice...
The second stanza (lines 5-8) remind me of Romeo and Juliet.
Your choice of words is superb. Keep writing!
--Michaela
 
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imaginewhirrledpeas said...
Oct. 12, 2009 at 7:17 pm:
brilliantly written! i would list a lot of things that i lovved, but inkspired pretty much summed it up for me :)
 
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Inkspired said...
Oct. 12, 2009 at 6:33 pm:
I love the imagery, and the description, beautiful idea, wonderful last line.... should I go on?
 
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Bonnie S. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 12, 2009 at 4:19 pm:
the second line really grabbed my attention: the ivory gown. the word ivory almost makes it sound more antique and older, which helps to refer to the last line, "she was dead" all in all, it was an amazing piece, good job!
 
BeyondInvisibility replied...
Oct. 12, 2009 at 4:53 pm :
This piece had some great imagery, and I could truly picture some of the scenes you described. However, I didn't really catch on to the point or meaning of the poem, and I wasn't very impressed.
 
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